Zions renaissance

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  1. Zionism

    Zionism YEHUDI HU AKBAR

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    An end of the Arabian disease, which swept away us from our feet/
    Jerusalem re-taken... and now zion slowly rewakens/
    from a comatose state, healing wounds of the crescent, while the peasant-/
    descendant of Isra'el tends to his sheep, the Sons of David weep/
    Bedouin Arabs face the fate of the wanderin J.ew with no land/
    occupation of our sands, they cant comprahend nor understand/
    Soveriegnity of G-d's Chosen, was hopeless but not hopefull/
    The restrictions of Ishmael go as surely their yoke-falls/
    Shma yisra'el....your sons will always defend ur gates against Hell's/
    While we walk the sands, ADONAI shall pravail....
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  2. varentao

    varentao New Member

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    It was raw and personal in an slightly controlled and 'intellectual' sense..which i liked...

    ...and i feel where you ar coming from. Though don't completely agree.

    But i wont go into that...

    ...critique? Nah, not the type of piece to do that for me...

    ...resp...
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  3. *GeMiNeYeZ*

    *GeMiNeYeZ* ~§¤Sweet Shinobi¤§~

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    i like it. the assonance made it cool. it's a strong piece, with volcabulary to back it up. nice poem!
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  4. Zionism

    Zionism YEHUDI HU AKBAR

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    thnx 4 the replies.

    up.
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  5. iceheart

    iceheart The Frozen Poet

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    very intense work, liked the vocabulary, keep them coming.

    iceheart
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  6. MisterEThoughts

    MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth

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    damnnnn thats what i call fuckin hottt shit as hell beautiful man please keep writing mann damn
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