Yup, you guessed it, yet another untitled keystyle...you know you love me though!!

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  1. Judge tha Dacyple

    Judge tha Dacyple Poetic Papi Emcee Señor

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    I remember
    the grey blue pools of perfection that held me
    petrified to even speak
    for fear of breaking the moment
    of shattering a conscious dream
    words werent enough to express
    the fact that
    total enlightenment came from
    your smile alone
    simple gestures multiplied my appreciation
    since then I haven't slept a wink
    frightened I might awaken to find
    that I wasn't awake before
    and your eyes were only my desire
    to manifest bliss within surreal body parts
    for each piece of you took a piece of me
    and created a collage of us instilling inner peace
    thus crafting the current situation at hand
    how do you express love
    to a work of art?
    test
  2. MisterEThoughts

    MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth

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    simply beautiful nice and beautiful man i gotta tell you for a keystyle this was very good man keep it up
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  3. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    nicely done, i cant believe this was a keystyle, so flawless. lol you need to start naming your pieces man...

    one luv
    test
  4. Sun_Flower

    Sun_Flower Bluez By Loves Eye

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    BEAUTEOUS! How you capture such picture in thought of expression the smile along tells its place. One word for you and this piece.

    ~...Embrace...~

    I miss reading your work such dome I admire as always
    test
  5. D.B.

    D.B. Death

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    your smile alone
    simple gestures multiplied my appreciation
    since then I haven't slept a wink
    frightened I might awaken to find
    that I wasn't awake before
    and your eyes were only my desire
    ^fav lines......nice piece....felt it...stay up
    test
  6. vinous

    vinous New Member

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    really liked the whole thing, but this was my fav part here:
    for each piece of you took a piece of me
    and created a collage of us instilling inner peace
    thus crafting the current situation at hand
    how do you express love
    to a work of art?

    keep em cumin, i dont care if they aint titled = )
    test
  7. the.dirtiest

    the.dirtiest inactive

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    i sort of wish you didn't say the word eyes and left it implicit. it makes for more momentum when you don't say the object explicitly. still this is a nice drop. keep up the good work you're on a roll!
    test
  8. iceheart

    iceheart The Frozen Poet

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    good job i liked that one a lot

    peace
    iceheart
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  9. MzLashay

    MzLashay Livin'

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    This was a very ejoyable read it was simply beautiful i enjoyed it keep up the good work
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  10. *GeMiNeYeZ*

    *GeMiNeYeZ* ~§¤Sweet Shinobi¤§~

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    beautiful poem...
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  11. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    shits dope...but start namin your got damn pieces...lol...and i'm not playing
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