Youre Purpose ??? ( Feedback welcomed and appreciated ) )

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  1. Sizzle

    Sizzle Molesting Your Skills

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    Wishfully thinking.......
    As i stare without blinking.......
    As for instance.....
    Im gifted with your prescence.......
    Yet cursed by yor existance.....
    You inspire my heart to beat.....
    But yet giving it a reason to fear.....
    To fear love as a whole....
    Grimacing as you torture my soul......
    I love you.....
    But in a non sprecial way....
    Moments i feel hopless without you.....
    While emotions vary day to day......
    And to my dismay......
    A year passing and still.....
    Wishfully thinking..........
    As i watch u sleep next to me........
    Believing expecially.........
    Fate has corrupted my destiny......
    Leaving me with you......
    You leaving me a hollow shell.....
    Creating within me a vessel.....
    A vessel where melancholy dwells.....
    But still yet.....
    I love you......
    Not knowing any reasons....
    Ironically........
    Thoughts of you leaving......
    Continues my wishfully thinking.......
    test
  2. Sun_Flower

    Sun_Flower Bluez By Loves Eye

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    "Thoughts of you leaving....
    Continues my wishfully thinking...."

    Beautiful piece from start to finish luv da endin'
    test
  3. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    ^yeah i was feelin the ending also. But what is up with everybody wanting to post in color now lol?

    one luv
    test
  4. MisterEThoughts

    MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth

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    i am liking this it was very deep and to the point haven't seen any of ur writing but i am liking what i see so keep posting.
    test
  5. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    Im gifted with your prescence.......
    Yet cursed by yor existance.....
    ^^^
    feelin that

    I love you.....
    But in a non sprecial way....
    ^^^
    feelin that

    i like this....not a big fan of this rhyme scheme but it was a nice piece......
    test
  6. Sizzle

    Sizzle Molesting Your Skills

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    thanks for the feedback im recieving, and sorry femme i was just trying something new lol
    test
  7. Blunted Reality

    Blunted Reality Still Blunted on Reality

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    this was very nice...and its always good to try new things and I think this is workin' for you. I had no problems with it. Keep it up.
    test
  8. Sizzle

    Sizzle Molesting Your Skills

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    thank u
    test
  9. Dark_Angel

    Dark_Angel Dark_Angel

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    really nice peice you done here, my quotes have been taken but overall this was a very beautiful peice...great work
    test
  10. Sizzle

    Sizzle Molesting Your Skills

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    :) thanx everybody
    test
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