Your Heart's Protector

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  1. MISSKEYdaQUEEN

    MISSKEYdaQUEEN Watch the black panther..

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    Your Hearts Protector


    Am I too stuck up to think I’m doing you a favor in
    announcing my enchantment with you,
    I mean… I think about your words often
    Stuck in finality
    And lost in unanswered questions
    Of just being friends
    And it’s not a bad thing I suppose
    When two get to know one another
    It’s basically building a foundation of what could have
    infinite duration
    Even if it’s just “being friends”
    But
    I think quite often about what your heart
    could fall victim too.
    He that seems invincible
    He with staunch character
    He with such serious demeanor
    In your way even you, could be bait to any
    Long acrylic nailed, flawless weaved, similac child
    Who only wants to cradle your mind between overused thighs
    She may say things to soften your tenacious spirit
    Catch you off guard and give you a taste of
    Something you don’t need to feed from:
    Insincere intentions.

    May HE protect you from that which is beneath you.

    And my intention is not to thrust my pedestal too high
    But who other than I could appreciate the way you
    can’t smile and look at me at the same time too long
    without turning away?
    Who other than I could appreciate the deepness in your voice
    And the simplicity in your disposition
    The passion in your servitude to the community,
    the desire to make a change,
    and the need to make a difference.
    Who other than I could recognize the definition of your manhood through
    the utmost respect for your birth right.
    And maybe I don’t know you thoroughly
    But does my desire warrant consideration of the incomparable kind?

    Maybe I shouldn’t toot my own horn but,
    Miles Davis could only equate to what my heart could provide for you
    Even as just….being your friend



    ***yes, it's a love joint so sue me...what's good yah!***
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  2. eM-T

    eM-T Because We Are

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    not a bad poem at all. my only beef would be the lack of imagery which is close to zero. Words point people in directions, but with images attached we can get an idea of what is along the way.

    stay up.

    -eMtea
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  3. MISSKEYdaQUEEN

    MISSKEYdaQUEEN Watch the black panther..

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    Yes, I feel you. I'm huge on imagery also but this poem is something I wrote for someone I know. It was kind of an inside piece I wanted to share.

    It's felt though!
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  4. Bhitiah

    Bhitiah Powerful Scriptures

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    "Am I too stuck up to think I’m doing you a favor in
    announcing my enchantment with you,
    I mean… I think about your words often
    Stuck in finality
    And lost in unanswered questions
    Of just being friends
    And it’s not a bad thing I suppose
    When two get to know one another
    It’s basically building a foundation of what could have
    infinite duration
    Even if it’s just “being friends”
    But
    I think quite often about what your heart
    could fall victim too.
    He that seems invincible
    He with staunch character
    He with such serious demeanor
    In your way even you, could be bait to any
    Long acrylic nailed, flawless weaved, similac child
    Who only wants to cradle your mind between overused thighs
    She may say things to soften your tenacious spirit
    Catch you off guard and give you a taste of
    Something you don’t need to feed from:
    Insincere intentions."


    ^^ I loved that whoooooole part. Damn ...Girl, Damn....lol
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  5. Lord RAH

    Lord RAH Grandeur's illuminant

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    Why is this being so slept on...Yo up this and what do y'all mean there's no imagery..I dig the tone and it's flavor...Plus the poem seduces you with straight truth.....Yo big up I'm feeling this one...ONE
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