your guilt in a gift.. or a curse

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  1. PotHead

    PotHead average brilliance

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    http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?p=9089533#post9089533
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    do you still love me?


    I still love you,
    I know this because when I said it,
    it wasn't simply because I wanted to fuck you

    but it seems... that without intercourse
    .. you.. fucked.. me

    I must be stupid
    I must be dumb
    to confuse lust for love, but still loving the lust
    but I'll forget about you.. if I must

    and even though you hurt me in the worst way
    even if.. it's your guilt that's keeping you away

    I'll always love you.

    mabye it was your support group,
    that told you.. or lead you to believe
    that I wasn't good enough for you,
    .. or that you.. weren't good enough for me

    I don't support that group, nor refute.
    all I have to say.. is that I never lied, not once
    when I said I'd always love you

    so when I'm dead and buried,
    .. still short a small piece.. of a broken heart.
    know that it was left to protect you.. in some small,
    .. mysterious, and unknown method to me
    it's just my hope, that you're happy.

    uncondtional love is all that I offered,
    but I suppose you weren't having it, and I'm not angry
    I'm not fazed in the slightest way.
    I'm just hurt, take it as a gift or a curse.

    with a grain of salt.. I'll always love you.
    .. I just won't be there for you.. ever again, ever again..

    EVER....AGAIN
    test
  2. quotive

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    "I still love you,
    I know this because when I said it,
    it wasn't simply because I wanted to fuck you"

    haaaa dude is clownin.. that shyt was funny

    But yo..

    "I must be stupid
    I must be dumb
    to confuse lust for love, but still loving the lust
    but I'll forget about you.. if I must"

    Thats dope to me because I can relate... nice wordplay yo..

    "mabye it was your support group,
    that told you.. or lead you to believe
    that I wasn't good enough for you,
    .. or that you.. weren't good enough for me"

    Once again, nice ass wordplay...I'm diggin it.

    "so when I'm dead and buried,
    .. still short a small piece.. of a broken heart.
    know that it was left to protect you.. in some small,
    .. mysterious, and unknown method to me
    it's just my hope, that you're happy."

    Dawg, this is like the best piece I've read in the realm in a minute... that shyt right there is fire^^

    "uncondtional love is all that I offered,
    but I suppose you weren't having it, and I'm not angry
    I'm not fazed in the slightest way.
    I'm just hurt, take it as a gift or a curse."

    Nice ending on your part, dopeness. I hope to see more from you, I'm DIGGGGGIN' your wordplay, its cool. You an emcee man? Sure seems like it. But yeah, stay up do0d..
    test
  3. nathedawg

    nathedawg New Member

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    im gonna have to agree with quotive on this one, dude you got some mad wordplay in this piece. good shit and overall a good piece, are u really a pothead?!!! come on now dont be shy@!!!!
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  4. PotHead

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    lol @ "are you really a pothead?"
    I normally post as the Guy with a Pen


    thanks for the positive feedback.
    test
  5. FukkedUPKidR

    FukkedUPKidR Guest

    Interesting... When I read this ..I was thinking..'Guy with a Pen' ..I don't know why because I barely even remember reading many other pieces from you.

    It was really good though. I tell ya.. I love the simple but complex type of stuff..and this was just that.

    thanks fer sharin
    test
  6. very very nice..

    so when I'm dead and buried,
    .. still short a small piece.. of a broken heart.
    know that it was left to protect you.. in some small,
    .. mysterious, and unknown method to me
    it's just my hope, that you're happy.


    you summed it all up here..really gr8
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  7. PotHead

    PotHead average brilliance

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    thanks,


    that's exactly the feeling I enjoy writing with, simple.. but complex.
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  8. Subconcious

    Subconcious CiPrIoLa DyNaStY

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    Ha! I was wondering where you have been. You are one of the people I have not seen post since I have came back, and was really looking for a piece. This was a great drop Guy. I always love the way you can put raw emotion into your poetry. I think it was you that wrote "slut" a little while back. Good to see your drops again.

    Luv^
    test
  9. Killumin

    Killumin Be happy with what u got!

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    nice wrd's and read[smokin]head !!!
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  10. PotHead

    PotHead average brilliance

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  11. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    Didn like how it started off and then went into a whole unconditional love thing. Kind of bothered me as i was reading the whole piece, I kept refering back to the opening lines. Anyways the word play was nice, the endin was nice and the whole piece was ok


    Stay Up, Much Love, Peace
    test
  12. PotHead

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    yeah - that was my concept.
    even though she did me dirty, and even though I can't be there for her... or 'like her' so to say - I'll always love her.
    test
  13. 6th_plague

    6th_plague More then meets the eye

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    Nas Last track on 'I am...' - Unconditional Love...
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  14. areeyesee

    areeyesee New Member

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    u most definitly have talent man
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  15. PotHead

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    *opens kazza lite*
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  16. INkLiNeD

    INkLiNeD Better Than You

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    this was nice, i was feeling it, good wordplay and shit, stayed on point and on topic, nice
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  17. nathedawg

    nathedawg New Member

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    good job guy with a pen!!! lol
    i mean pothead
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