Your Guiding Light

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  1. SupermanRT

    SupermanRT Tha Man Branded Wit Tha S

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    The pain inside amplifies with every breath you take
    Every move, choice and step you view as a mistake
    Lost and confused you don’t know where to turn to
    The world turns their back on you, but that’s untrue
    Take a close look at the person standing beside you
    When you feel down and out I’ll help you through
    Your hard times and show you good ones lie ahead
    All I want is for you to smile when you go to bed
    For when you need that shoulder to cry on or maybe
    You just need a simple hug to cheer you up possibly
    I’m always by your side during the good, bad and ugly
    Cloudy skies? Let me know and I’ll help you see clearly
    I only want to see you smile, it hurts to see you in pain
    So I’ll do anything to make you laugh and smile again
    It’s just reality that life isn’t always going to be easy
    But when times get hard, just know you can count on me
    Friendship isn’t just a word tossed around for fun you see
    It’s one thing to claim to be a friend, but that’s just too easy
    I put you before me and I’ll be beside you until the end
    I’m here for you, care for you and will always be your friend

    just me speakin on friendship...
    test
  2. California Poet

    California Poet Born Again Poet

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    this piece was really simple in form and context, but you got a stong point across...i always like reading poems about someones feelings for some else...it makes me want to write about love every time...keep up the good work and i look forward to more by you

    "The world turns their back on you, but that’s untrue
    Take a close look at the person standing beside you
    When you feel down and out I’ll help you through"

    great shyt

    peace~
    test
  3. JBB Sports Man

    JBB Sports Man New Member

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    yeh nice piece...simple but got the message across easily...nice point, good drop...
    test
  4. UFO the Phoenix

    UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS!

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    wooooord up

    thats real man....diggin this

    true friends are hard to find these days I can respect this poem

    str8 from the heart.....just good ol fashion poetry...nothing fancey but it still was nice

    Stay up

    PEACE AND GODBLESS
    test
  5. absolute zero

    absolute zero Among the living

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    yea....agree with everyone else.....it was simple enough.........but i think it was written for you a little more than it was written for us readers....stay up

    God bless
    test
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