Your ghost

Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by Feme Sole, Oct 21, 2003.

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  1. varentao

    varentao New Member

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    while you fuck behind luxuries doors
    i make love on dirty floors.

    I dunno why. But i don't usually quote lines. I guess you could therefore take me doing it now in both a good and bady way.

    But that was a quite striking line. It reminded me of this person i knew. In a very vivid way. More vivid and direct than you probablyu meant it to be. i.e. in a different way. Er...

    ...overall a piece of brooding dark undertones. Which actually became overtones in the end.

    Well at least that's the way i read it. An interesting piece. Which tickled my memories. But i wont go into that any further.

    ...resp...
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  2. skandelous_lala

    skandelous_lala back from the dead

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    bravo girl. i love your pieces and this one is no exception.
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  3. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    yeah i agree but the whole poem was cool the way its put into time frames and worded i also liked this -
    "sorry for bleeding on your sheets that night i didnt know my pen would leak..."
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  4. Predator INC

    Predator INC New Member

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  5. vinous

    vinous New Member

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    dayum, yeah i read this a while ago and was happily amazed....read it again 2nite and am stil happily amazed...goodnite, pz.
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  6. Urizen

    Urizen Guest

    I heard that theres peace in heaven
    but i was one of those women
    that settled
    for their piece of hell.
    Im sorry

    SICK
    how do u come up with this stuff
    DAMN u sick I LOVE those lines LOVE
    em DAMN that was a nice piece
    but THOSE lines NO *shakes head*
    2 sick
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  7. *Princess*

    *Princess* skantless bitch

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    i liked this alot, especially how you set it up great job
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  8. Judge tha Dacyple

    Judge tha Dacyple Poetic Papi Emcee Señor

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    wow girl. Incredible piece of writing here! the imagery was startlingly vivid, I read this three times to just make sure it fully sank in before I replied. I loved the second stanza, I honestly dont know how to reply to this. This brought back some seriously hard memories, very powerful writing Feme. Nothing but respect for you and your writing talent.
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  9. what can I say... love it and all your writings but honestly I'm a bit lost with this one.

    El, she is skrate fiyah my •••••...
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  10. *DowntownStar*

    *DowntownStar* ____________________

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  11. Deficiency

    Deficiency True Poetical Emcee

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    this was a very unique piece.. I like it.. and I like the way you put it together.. good job.
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  12. misspimp

    misspimp a.k.a KATURAH

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    This was a very nice piece...looks like i was the last to get a read. Really i dont want to oute anything, because the whole piece is a qoute in itself...it was that great! However these lines stuck out to me the most...

    -I heard that theres peace in heaven
    but i was one of those women
    that settled
    for their piece of hell.


    I really enjoyed reading this piece, loved the concept and evreything else was great as well...

    mad love
    test
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