Your direct reflection

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  1. nathedawg

    nathedawg New Member

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    The light that reveals a little more than just light

    The light shines in a way that it reflects all that is good

    To the point you give up sight

    And go in a deep sleep, wondering what made it this way, wondering if it "should

    The light continues to shine so extraordinary, that you think nothing can go wrong from here

    And then the siren begins to alarm and you feel: a tear

    You think to yourself what did I do to deserve this, did I put too much trust in this light?

    You think to yourself, my instincts aren't always right

    You question the light, asking "why" do you have to spread tyranny

    The light responds with quite a easy answer, look into the mirror, you'll see.
    test
  2. Nebulaz

    Nebulaz fear God, not man

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    I really liked the content and direction you played with this. but be easy on my eyes and choose a duller color =/
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  3. Urizen

    Urizen Guest

    I liked it nice piece
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  4. nathedawg

    nathedawg New Member

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    sorry about the color, I also thought it was quite blinding, but I thought might spread the message more. one love
    Im out like tiger woods
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  5. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    This was ok, But i felt everyline was like a different statement this piece had no connecting flow from line to line.



    stay up, much love, peace
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  6. Deficiency

    Deficiency True Poetical Emcee

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    yeah this was alright.. not bad..
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