Your Blind Heart!!

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  1. Deficiency

    Deficiency True Poetical Emcee

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    You don't take anytime to appreciate
    You don't care who gets hurt
    Your soul purpose is to take..
    and never give a thing in return.
    Where's your common sense did you throw
    it away? You can't see clearly, Your
    dealing with someone's feelings harshly
    everyday. Then tears fall from the eyes of a soul
    that's true.. Suffering a punishment
    that it never deserved to go thru.
    You'll never understand what I'm saying. You take
    for granted the many things You've been
    blessed with and how fortunate YOU truly are..
    Your just another product of society
    that will one day fall.. because, your just
    a follower of your blind heart!!!!​
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  2. MisterEThoughts

    MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth

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    wow bro this was very special i liked it a lot man short i wish it could have went longer so i could have gotten into the piece more but damn you did a wonderful job keep it up....
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  3. Deficiency

    Deficiency True Poetical Emcee

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    thanks for the response i appreciate it.
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  4. Deficiency

    Deficiency True Poetical Emcee

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  5. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    Deep and that's for real. Damn man you got me thinking, But let me ask you something, aren't we all followers of a blind heart? Anyways that piece was real nice you had some nice points and the flow of the piece was real good. Word for word This shit was simple yet tight.


    Stay Up, Much Love, peace
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  6. Deficiency

    Deficiency True Poetical Emcee

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    yes, in a way we are all followers of a blind heart. I'm talking about how alot of people don't appreciate it when someone sincere is in there lives.. and they never take the time to notice how true and caring they are. To them it's just nothing.. cuz they are brainwashed by society.. there only concerned about themselfs and there reputation and society perception. They never really have any common sense and leave the true to suffer when there is no reason why, they should have to go thru that type of pain. Thanks for the love I appreciate it.
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  7. ladypoet

    ladypoet New Member

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    yo that was tight.
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  8. Deficiency

    Deficiency True Poetical Emcee

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  9. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    You'll never understand what I'm saying

    man i feel that...its like pouring out your soul to someone who u loved and them just not getting it...they see and here what they want to see and here

    nice job man

    UP
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  10. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    i have now read this poem about 6 times. lol i just dont know how to respond to it . i'm probably very guity of what your saying and thats why.
    but anyway . very emotional and deep and the length of the poem adds to the frustration your trying to show. its short and alittle abrupt like our tempers when we are dealing with people that just dont get it . great poem ^
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  11. eatemup

    eatemup New Member

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    this was a heartflet piece nice to flow and read good job
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  12. IvyG

    IvyG New Member

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    very deep.. and awesome job... awesome piece.. <3
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  13. SAMARA

    SAMARA truth is a sword

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    I have read this poem more than a few times. There are parts to this poem that I did not like. In fairness though, it is my own ideologies that reserved me from annoting "decent or nice drop".
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  14. FukkedUPKidR

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    Yes. I liked that this piece was short.. if you had gone on and on it probably wouldn't have had that much of an effect on me. It takes talent to get what you wanna say out in a minimum number of lines. Good job, this was dope.

    Emotions .. get me every time.

    Stay up, pz.
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  15. Deficiency

    Deficiency True Poetical Emcee

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