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  1. EL FEROS

    EL FEROS New Member

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    Young
    YOUNG,BEAUTIFUL AND SWEET
    THE ONLY THING YOU COULD BE.
    YOU THINK YOU KNOW ABOUT LIFE,
    WHICH YOU REALLY DONT.
    LET TIME GO PASS WITH YOU,
    DONT GROW BERORE YOUR TIME.
    BE SMART AND LIVE YOURLIFE HOW
    IT IS,DONT TRY TO BE OLD,CAUSE ITS
    NOT YOU.
    YOU'LL LOSE FUN TIMES, YOU'LL LOSE YOUR INNOCENS
    AND YOU'LL LOSE THAT LOVE YOU HAVE FOR THINGS.
    LET WISER PEOPLE GUIDE YOU, AND DONT
    LET OTHERS BRING YOU DOWN.
    JUST DONT GROW BEFORE YOUR TIME.
    test
  2. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    Wasn't really digging this as much as the rest of the pieces dropped on the Realm. Although, you have a different technique in writing, quite simplistic, but it's your meaning that counts always. Found it decent, but nothing more than that. Keep elevating though and I'll keep dropping my opinion. Work on: Rhyme Scheme, Flow, Metaphors, and Similes often. Word choice may come later as you develop, but remember this as well. It's your CHOICE to share your poetry, it's for you, not for others. So, keep doing you! My blessings..
    test
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