You Use To Love Me

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  1. mr.rip

    mr.rip New Member

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    This is a song i'm writing for my daughter and sister

    You Use To Love Me

    You coming home late at night
    Smelling like perfume that ain't right

    You have broken major rules
    You’re standing there laughing
    But that ain't cool

    Suppose I flip the script on you
    And did the things you like to do

    You’d probably cuss
    You’d probably slap me
    But you can't see
    Why I’m not happy

    Standing here with alcohol on your breath
    I gave you the love that I had left

    You use to love me
    You use to care
    You use to tell me
    You’d always be there

    Now you have money
    Things have changed
    You’re acting so funny
    You're acting so strange

    I don't re-cog-nize -you-no-more
    Putting your hands on me
    Like I'm some street whore

    What is wrong with you
    You’re out of your mind
    You use to treat me so sweet
    You use to treat me so kind

    Is there someone else
    Please let me know
    Just tell me the truth
    So I can go

    I was there when you had nothing at all
    I refuse to be there
    When you take your fall

    You use to love me
    You use to care
    You use to tell me
    You’d always be there

    Now you have money
    Things have changed
    You’re acting so funny
    You're acting so strange





    Terry L. Sidney
    6/1/2010
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  2. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    It seem that people change for all the wrong reasons sometimes, and they don't account for the casualties of their actions until things fall apart. Sad but true. This piece reminds me of me in a way. I had to be slapped back into reality and picking up the pieces in the aftermath is hard. Nice poem very simple and the message was strong. Had a song like flow As well so it might make a good song. Would like to hear it put to music.

    Stay up, much love, peace
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  3. mr.rip

    mr.rip New Member

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    Some people let money and fame change them. They forget about the person that was there when they had nothing. thank you for taking the time to reply it much appreciated sounds good to.
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  4. J o o k

    J o o k Win your battles before they’ve even been fought.

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    I read it and it was a bit simplistic for my taste. Keep doing your thing bruh.
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  5. RealMS

    RealMS Ne te quaesiveris extra

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    Been there before, the worst!
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  6. mr.rip

    mr.rip New Member

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    to me the only thing that should change you is God. and just because he is in your life don't mean you not going to go through some stuff it just makes it easier to deal with when he's in your life.
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    mr.rip New Member

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    Thank you Jook. I have writers block right now lol
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  8. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    My first reaction was that this work is better suited to be aimed at a girlfriend.

    you must love your fam to be coming like this.


    well done, how old are you rip ?
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