You dying..

Discussion in 'Open Mic' started by GaLaTeA, Nov 20, 2013.

  1. GaLaTeA

    GaLaTeA GymArt

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    ..almost had me ending my life holding a prosciutto knife,
    blade's reflection had me seeing the light,
    insides shaken and sliced these days I barely survive,
    memories I'll never let go tears being hard to control,
    to hell with this life when I've lost my partner in crime,
    my equal, wanting the King's return like the hobbit sequel,
    missing your sick slick rhymes and words »a lil rough patch but it'll end well«
    without a farewell your passing turned everything into a living hell..​
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  2. Chase Murda

    Chase Murda hostile enviroment

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    Not bad not bad could've been longer but overall it was a god flow ..I do know u have talent an I think should continue writing
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  3. GaLaTeA

    GaLaTeA GymArt

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    Appreciate the feedback. :)
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  4. nO gOoD!

    nO gOoD! Life Music :: Press Play

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    This was good. Super heartfelt. I always got time for open mics like this. Stay strong.

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  5. J o o k

    J o o k Win your battles before they’ve even been fought.

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    No need for Italian knives,
    This unsung hero chose to lead a battalion life -
    His infectious candid spirit,
    Was life changing - a true man's endearment
    He wouldn't want anything to hurt you
    So stop talking "hell", as Noble is a synonym of virtue,
    You see the earth too - experiences rapture and pain,
    The sun shines brightest after the rain
    So every now and a-gain, when feeling low and bleak
    Stay strong and know that once more your souls will meet.

    To @GaLaTeA & @NOBLE SOLDIER
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  6. GaLaTeA

    GaLaTeA GymArt

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    Hello tears.. :( That was beautifully written <3 @J o o k..
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