You Are Hopeless

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  1. Evg.poet

    Evg.poet As the Heart Speaks...

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    First and Last
    Lustrous
    Wasting Away



    you're hopeless
    I know you know this
    Why try to hide it
    Why try and deny it
    Its like you enjoy making people suffer
    If you're not happy
    No one else can be either

    Jesus
    Help me understand
    Why I go through what I go through
    Why I went through what I went through
    I don't wanna cry no more
    he does not deserve my tears
    he should be as emotionally scarred as me
    The physical pain could not hurt as much
    It could not even compare
    he’s unaware of the damage he has caused
    Not realizing that his constant antics
    And needless tactics
    Are not bringing anybody
    Satisfaction
    Not even himself
    Yet he prides Himself
    In trying to make other people suffer

    Jesus
    Help me understand
    This life I must live in
    I don’t get it
    And I probably never will
    I know You will walk with me
    Even if he continues to try to make me fall
    You’ll be right beside me
    Even when he has left me for dead
    he’s not worth even a word form me
    So I’ll continue to speak silently
    Only addressing those who need me for me
    And not need me to hurt me

    Yea your still hopeless
    And you probably won’t ever change
    Revenge is sweet
    But it probably won’t be from me
    Jesus has my back
    Jesus has had my back
    Even when you tried to make me fall
    Those times you didn’t catch me
    Jesus did
    When you disgraced me and took advantage
    Jesus had my back than to

    Hopeless begets hopeless
    So that’s why you married someone who acts just like me
    Cause its against the law
    For you to have me
    Sad so sad
    Your are hopeless
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  2. unspoken1

    unspoken1 Revolutionary Wordsmen

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    whoa....definitly a beautifully written piece....i couldnt stop reading it once i started it....you are truly talented...keep doing you
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  3. Justin85

    Justin85 True Poetical Emcee

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    yeah, this was a nice piece.. straight real..

    peace
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  4. Subconcious

    Subconcious CiPrIoLa DyNaStY

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    Wow...there was definately some cold and bitterness in writing this...You expressed it well enough for me to feel that too...Good piece

    ^^^ Luv
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  5. RealMS

    RealMS Ne te quaesiveris extra

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    This is something different, I haven't read something like this in awhile lol. I don't know, the beginning had me drawn into it. Then in the end, the whole thing about the guy marrying someone who seems just like you-I thought that was crazy. Good work from you.
    -Peace
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  6. MisterEThoughts

    MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth

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    this really sad man oh man but i think it was really beautiful really nice job keep it up and keep your head up
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  7. Craccer_Jacc

    Craccer_Jacc SudAnillyst

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    very real piece ...i liked it alot even though i've been on the recieven end of one of those a few times ... i could really feel where u were comming from look forward to reading another from u...Peace
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  8. Psycho69

    Psycho69 A Soul Born In Verse

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    not much to say, other then I was really feeling this piece. Real nice work.
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  9. Clarksvegas_Dan

    Clarksvegas_Dan Registered Voter

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    Cool, this was more than just a poem. It was an eloquent prayer that I could definetely dig. I'm not even going to try to critique the poetry, cause I know that to God it sounded excellent. I'm pretty sure the very first poems were all prayers. You're just carrying on a noble tradition. Drop em like this everytime and you can be sure that I'll enjoy it everytime. God knows us so well, that even our choice of words is unimportant in prayer. Here's a good prayer: ABCDEFG... alright I said my piece. later
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  10. Shibaby

    Shibaby betcha dollar i can do it

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    yep cold and bitter.....i can relate fuck him. if u need help hit me up.
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  11. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    Wow this was nice as fuck. Piece had a kinda subtle(sp) agner within in it. The first stanza caught my attention from the get go. Great work

    one luv
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  12. Evg.poet

    Evg.poet As the Heart Speaks...

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    thanks for the response and encouragement....it was greatly appreciated
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  13. Evg.poet

    Evg.poet As the Heart Speaks...

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    thank you so much............lol.....thank you
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  14. Evg.poet

    Evg.poet As the Heart Speaks...

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    lol....its not all that serious...but i'll keep ya posted....thanks
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  15. Evg.poet

    Evg.poet As the Heart Speaks...

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    Thank Yo To You All For Your Words Of Encouragement And Expression....always Apprectiate The Critiques...god Bless Everyone
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  16. nathedawg

    nathedawg New Member

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    i like this piece, it feels good to vent and get everthing out that you need to out and into the world. Thanks for sharing this, and i hope you can work something out or just take the right steps to get out of this. one love and keep ya head up peace
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  17. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    Sometimes it irriates me when people call out to Jesus, but that is something else not really pertaining to this piece. Anyways it was beautifully written, but very sad and biter like. The emotions were shown and it did seem like a cal out for help or answers for the events that have taken place. Liked this, it was written every nicely


    Stay Up, Much Love, Peace
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  18. Evg.poet

    Evg.poet As the Heart Speaks...

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    Thanks nakey and tooshort for those responses and critques....iit was greatly appreciated....
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  19. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    of course you know, lol...this reminds me of my mother, lol...much better, very focused...
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  20. Evg.poet

    Evg.poet As the Heart Speaks...

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    Ok Evan_Blade what is that supposed to mean...?
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