Yahshua the anointed

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  1. Parable-Dot-Comm

    Parable-Dot-Comm New Member

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    Explain subliminal reign to miserable brain.
    Where your, physical pain thoughts visceral slain.
    and if, life's chain had needless kinks.
    Kill scorn, will born to what Jesus thinks.
    If you read this, blink & if you hear it, pause.
    Searching your mind for your spirits cause.
    And it's all love here but we fear it's flaws.
    When we're pure then we're sure we can bare this cross.
    Amongst all tongues some words will smite.
    Anything opposing eternal light. In sight
    My purpose, to elevate energy.
    Separate entities move delicate, synergy..
    So pay attention to the deficits order.
    Where each space indicates a separate border.
    Now there's homage, getting paid like a light bill.
    Fools will try to see God in a white pill.
    So rest easy, I walk on water.
    As raised staffs part the sea.
    So rest easy, we talk on slaughter.
    and through wrath you will start to see.
    So rest easy, I walk on water.
    As raised staffs part the sea.
    So rest easy, we talk on slaughter.
    and through wrath you will start to see.
    Prose to those kicking simplest scripts.
    I Let disease wrath go dimple his lips.
    Spun through chaos caught in the mix.
    Role like bookies that's brought in to fix.
    Some chatter spilled with you near.
    Where laughter wilts into tears,
    I shatter guilt into fear
    to catapult a career.
    I saw everything, avoided none.
    They say Yahshua's the anointed one.
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  2. T.R.C....

    T.R.C.... New Member

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    damn thats ill dude multis were dope vocab was crazy id have prefered you kept rhymin instead of that hook like part towards the end but you still killed it
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  3. Parable-Dot-Comm

    Parable-Dot-Comm New Member

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    i know what you mean about the hook, it was written to a beat and there was a hook part. thanks for the feedback man.
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  4. nO gOoD!

    nO gOoD! Life Music :: Press Play

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    dude this was real nice.. solid rhyming and the flow was real smooth.. I would like to heat the audio of this.
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  5. dsp2k5

    dsp2k5 Dime Sack Pimp

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    nice vocab, nice flow, nice multis ... this was a solid drop ... hit the nail right on the head with this one, right square on the head ... dope ...
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  6. lyricalpriest

    lyricalpriest Rap Games Dawson Creek

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    damn my guy eloquent word choice, it felt as it could also be a spoken word, i imagined like an old soothsayer performing this piece, it draws on energy and describes something so subliminal it pierces..the only thing iiiiii could give as a negative critique is.. the words were almost to eloquent, it seemd kinda forced.. but nothing major just a lil side note..

    nice job on this one magic
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  7. cram oremor

    cram oremor New Member

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    Dats ripe magic. "Explain subliminal reign to miserable brain
    Where your, physical pain thoughts visceral slain". You blew it up wit the first line!
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