wrote to that blink song .

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  1. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    Hello there
    It’s been awhile since we talked
    I wonder where the conversation went a rye
    Sometimes I
    Only hear what’s softly spoken
    Misconstruing what’s intended between the lines
    The bold print
    What I saw was the sound of closure,
    Which broke my eardrums and welled up my eyes

    You pushed me aside

    I’m sorry
    I never meant to cause you pain
    I lashed out with mascara – dripping pride
    In anguish
    I came to you for comfort
    I didn’t know you’d frown at an attempt to make me smile
    I see now
    You were never really here
    There was no sanction of security within the miles

    But I’ll still hold you near

    I’ve bent past my
    Spine,
    Jumping through the hoops
    That I thought would bring me close to you
    But the sting
    From each ring of fire
    Has burnt deeper than desire
    And singed the truth

    What’s left for me to do?

    Alone here
    Between each thread of silent suffering
    Trying to unravel every silken thought of you
    Entangled
    But down to my soul it soothes
    For I’ve been scabbed and badly bruised
    Pressed against the dark side of the moon
    I’d knew I’d lose

    I miss you
    test
  2. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    Blink isn't the only one who has a song like that...Umm...Incubus has a song like that too, just not so forward...Anyhow, loved it...different that what I am used to, but nonetheless good...
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  3. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    are yall talking about that blink 182 song? If so, i've written a piece to that song also.

    "I’ve bent past my
    Spine,
    Jumping through the hoops
    That I thought would bring me close to you
    But the sting
    From each ring of fire
    Has burnt deeper than desire
    And singed the truth"

    Damn that was fire. You describe that feeling so well. Like the structure of the piece, kinda different from the way you would normally put it together.

    one luv
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  4. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    yeah that blink- i miss you song . thanks guys :)
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  5. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    uppin for the sleepers
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  6. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    "I didn’t know you’d frown at an attempt to make me smile"

    Nice line


    This was just a real nice piece, Loved the flow and the concept was tight. I can just picture how this piece relates to the blink song. Sometimes music just brings out different emotions in us and helps us to write.


    Stay Up, Much Love, Peace
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  7. iLL Script.

    iLL Script. ~Poetic~

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    I’m sorry
    I never meant to cause you pain
    I lashed out with mascara – dripping pride
    In anguish
    I came to you for comfort
    I didn’t know you’d frown at an attempt to make me smile
    I see now
    You were never really here
    There was no sanction of security within the miles


    very nice piece, was feelin' it. good song 2 write 2 :) nice job
    stay up
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  8. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    thank you guys
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  9. lpoet

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    this piece made me smile...lovin the flow in this one..but i'd expect nothing less from you :)

    Upin
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  10. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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  11. 49th Prophet

    49th Prophet Dark Magic Inferno

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    "I’ve bent past my
    Spine,"

    That line stood out, but I really liked how the whole thing was worded. As always a real nice piece.

    much love

    peace
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  12. mr.rip

    mr.rip New Member

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    hot woody wood hot shit home girl
    i like writing replies to songs to
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  13. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    thank you
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  14. Zeta

    Zeta New Member

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    Wow that was sweet!! I"m really impressed

    Alone here
    Between each thread of silent suffering
    Trying to unravel every silken thought of you
    Entangled
    But down to my soul it soothes
    For I’ve been scabbed and badly bruised
    Pressed against the dark side of the moon
    I’d knew I’d lose

    I miss you...
    This part was my favorite, it's just like Viola!!!!

    PEACE
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  15. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    ???

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  16. misspimp

    misspimp a.k.a KATURAH

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    I came to you for comfort
    I didnÂ’t know youÂ’d frown at an attempt to make me smile
    I see now
    You were never really here
    There was no sanction of security within the miles

    But IÂ’ll still hold you near


    IÂ’ve bent past my
    Spine,
    Jumping through the hoops
    That I thought would bring me close to you
    But the sting
    From each ring of fire
    Has burnt deeper than desire
    And singed the truth

    WhatÂ’s left for me to do??

    Alone here
    Between each thread of silent suffering
    Trying to unravel every silken thought of you
    Entangled
    But down to my soul it soothes
    For IÂ’ve been scabbed and badly bruised
    Pressed against the dark side of the moon
    IÂ’d knew IÂ’d lose

    I miss you


    Damn...thats kinda sad that i qouted basically the whole poem...and didnt even notice....but however it was well worth the qouting...i really thought i replied to this a long time ago...but i didnt....and boy was i sleeping!!! This shit is defiently hott!! I can definetly relate and truly loved every bit of this...loved this!!

    mad love
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  17. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    thank you. i dont know why i reposted the whole poem... i dont rember doing that ????
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