Wrongfully pursued...El Poet/Lyrical Sorcery

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  1. ~Eloquent

    ~Eloquent Narcissistic....

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    Lyrical Sorcery

    confusing my mind
    searching for truth by persuing the lies....
    media isn't helping
    they're just some fools wearing ties
    the fued is disguised...
    by politicians and cowardly ways
    everybody is killing for money
    to gain some power and praise...
    I put flowers by graves
    for all the people that have lost their life
    don't know their names
    but feel their pains in these awful fights

    Children dieing so young,
    these parents have to barry their babies....
    I think of my daughter and cry
    because things are so terrible lately...
    I can't imagine what I'd do
    if she was taken from me.....
    but I'm already loosing my mind....
    I can't escape what I've seen

    Money... the root of evil
    look at what it can do to people...
    strangers becoming enemies
    to the point that fueds are leathal.
    all this violence and terror...
    I stare into my eyes through the mirror
    and hope for a peaceful moment
    to be applied with our neighbors


    Eloquent Poet
    as we search for true meaning,so much shit seems so deceiving
    politicians give us their so called "wisdom" and choke us til were barely breathing...
    children die so young,they are forced to grow up so fast....
    the enemy at times,becomes are own selves, still living in our past
    my heart has been shaded partially black due to my own self destruction....
    searching for true answers from the "wise ones" but theyll never let us confront them

    they know our ideas and dreams as nonsense,cuz they say were not "important".....
    but whats "important" is to point out all the over grown fetuses that so often become aborted

    in our misfortunes,we find an hourglass that is slowly ticking down our seconds for rekindling our hope and dreams

    they say our childrens hopes arent important though,cuz they are the ones that only possess the "expertise"

    so at nights we hear screams but of course,all left unanswered....
    i can no longer block out the senseless violence that has led to our earth's cancer

    so they say that we are hypocrits....we turn to drugs and alcohol to try to interchange the bitterness

    burning inside our hearts and minds....still hoping for "lost benefits"
    we struggle solemnly as parts of a sinister galaxy......we have strong hearts,strong minds,shattered souls,and so many of us could become fatalities....
    test
  2. Clarksvegas_Dan

    Clarksvegas_Dan Registered Voter

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    Right on. Very clearly stated. I hope it gets better.
    test
  3. nathedawg

    nathedawg New Member

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    I stare into my eyes through the mirror
    and hope for a peaceful moment
    to be applied with our neighbors

    awesome....awesome good job dawg... love the ending

    eloq poet....

    wow i didnt even get far into your piece and i can quote already!!!!

    as we search for true meaning,so much shit seems so deceiving
    politicians give us their so called "wisdom" and choke us til were barely breathing...

    powerful and used very well... mad props on this collab

    although i think that lyrical sauce's piece could of used some spelling corrections and overall grammar checks!!

    overall it was a very well done piece....
    test
  4. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    *applauds*

    concept was excellent...

    first joint about this that i've read here in the realm

    shit was fire

    I put flowers by graves

    ..for some reason that really stood out to me..reminds me of fallin soldiers..

    and el poet
    the enemy at times,becomes are own selves

    ...couldnt have said it better myself

    good job u 2..loved the piece
    test
  5. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    A well thought out piece. Both of you came strong. Both pointed out how the children of today are dying so soon, it's ugly. Elouqent I dont think I never seen you write in that way (the structure), it kinda threw me off. Great collab.


    one luv
    test
  6. ~Eloquent

    ~Eloquent Narcissistic....

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  7. MANchyld

    MANchyld Guest

    why are you always spelling my name wrong too short, it's SORCERY, and that is how it's correctly spelled... and always hating on my work... spelling corrections and grammar.. lmao


    I hadn't even read EP's part of this since I sent him my half about a month ago, but that was definately dope

    we should do more shit together.... and sorry I missed our battle in the rstl man.... I wrote it, but got into a car accident and couldn't post it cuz I was in emergency, but I'm cool now

    ne way... nice shit man and thanks everybody
    test
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