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  1. Surreal The A.D. Prophet

    Surreal The A.D. Prophet Wondrous Poetic

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    Pre.

    I began for myself
    I have continued in that manner
    But differently

    I.
    explorations
    of voice,
    My own, calling itself.

    Self satisfying
    My voice consumed it’s sound.
    Swelling composition.

    II.
    continuations.
    Logical steps,
    Examinations of surroundings.

    Voice calling,
    Learning echoes,
    Mapping reflections.

    envisioning shape;
    language as hands,
    Surveying mind.

    III.
    Definition.
    Seek it out.
    Give shape to all heard.

    In becoming a body
    Of knowledge,
    I hungered for more

    My voice speaking.
    Sustenance in syllable.
    Constructing concept

    Digesting notion,
    Breaking down idea,
    I seek to make it clear.

    Pro.
    Diametric. I speak.
    Defined
    In opposition

    Of undefinition,
    Of language
    without voice.

    I wrote self exploration,
    Continuous
    Self definition.

    Inexorably tired.
    Fatigue;
    Sign of integrity.

    My voice consumes it’s sound
    digesting reflections
    I hunger more

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    All the Voices in my Head
    (4 Eimihl) ..Keystyle.
    Bricks( the wall)
    test
  2. Psycho69

    Psycho69 A Soul Born In Verse

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    I've never really seen much of your writing.. you got an interesting style. I dunno, but I liked this. Nice piece.
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  3. quotive

    quotive 3

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    This was weird, wtf does it mean? lol
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  4. Surreal The A.D. Prophet

    Surreal The A.D. Prophet Wondrous Poetic

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    were there certain confusing passages? or you got nothin from this? (quotive)
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  5. quotive

    quotive 3

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    What did it mean? Break it down to me.
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  6. InTheStars

    InTheStars Reflective

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    I agree with Qoutive, I don't get it at all. Is it your thought process at work?
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  7. Surreal The A.D. Prophet

    Surreal The A.D. Prophet Wondrous Poetic

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    Pre. = preface
    I - stage one
    II - you get it..
    III stage....eight? no 3
    Pro. = Prologue

    but if you didnt get it, i need to work on the structure. but is it structure or phrasing?

    i would hope that ....

    wait

    pay REAL close attention to punctuation and line breaks...i mean painstaking if you have to.

    ...hmmm no one has said much to clarify what's unclear. but it could actually be the whole poem. i doubt it, but maybe.
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  8. Zeta

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    I liked this it made sense in an abstract sort of way, pretty cool and original. BTW about your reply to my post I appreciate your input and will make note of it in my future posts, I aim to please :)
    Peaz
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  9. Zeta

    Zeta New Member

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    LOL @ the smilies I dunno if that's the smilie I thought I was gunna get lol
    PEace
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  10. Surreal The A.D. Prophet

    Surreal The A.D. Prophet Wondrous Poetic

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    ...

    so, you post saying that i am arrogant...then thank me for the reply,

    "i aim to please" - sarcasm?


    these are questions...not accusations, but i can't help but sense that you are playin the fence. i expect people to view me as arrogant, and it bothers me only to a certain extent. and the same can be said about people disliking my criticism.

    what bothers me is the sense that you won't simply come out and say that you didnt care for my reply in the slightest. but this is me simply trying to guess motives.

    my suggestion for anyone who doesnt appreciate my statements, so so and then stop addressing me. the most frustrating thing about all of this, is that i really have made it a point not to BEGIN anything.

    meh. this is tiring.

    i guess my question is this. zeta is this reply in this thread bullshit?
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  11. Surreal The A.D. Prophet

    Surreal The A.D. Prophet Wondrous Poetic

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    just saw that you had a paragraph of response.

    LMAO

    wow. so, i read your poe, and evaluated it based on a standord, which would have to be mine. of course i came with a standard.

    the thought that i walk away 'reassuring' myself is such a moot poin tthat it is hard to address. isnt the act of evaluation an act invo9lving comparing your standard to whatever you are evaluating? and then, when you are finished, wouldnt you walk away assured of your standard?

    stop this.

    seriously. i am done. there is no dialogue. we are having two different discourses and i am tired of it.
    test
  12. nathedawg

    nathedawg New Member

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    In becoming a body
    Of knowledge,
    I hungered for more

    i can relate to this part completely, good writing and...

    envisioning shape;
    language as hands,
    Surveying mind.

    good imagery, very effective piece very well done, i say fuck all the haters, this piece had very explainable structure. Just took longer to figure out than normal pieces nah mean. peace out. one love
    test
  13. I liked this, the way the developments and chapters outlined your approach was nice..
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  14. Evg.poet

    Evg.poet As the Heart Speaks...

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    different and interesting...gotta read it a couple of times to get it......
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  15. Zeta

    Zeta New Member

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    LOL, I like it, period, but I do stick by what I said I am not playing the fence I like to experiment with new ideas in my poetry that's all I meant.
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  16. Surreal The A.D. Prophet

    Surreal The A.D. Prophet Wondrous Poetic

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  17. Bhitiah

    Bhitiah Powerful Scriptures

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    and for some reason, it took me forever to reply to this.

    "I wrote self exploration,
    Continuous
    Self definition." <<yeah.
    test
  18. Shylah

    Shylah Eargasm's

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    This was an interesting piece...i've never read anything in this style nor quite like it. I enjoyed reading it of course...nice piece.
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