Writing My Anguish

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  1. ChyllTyrant

    ChyllTyrant AmIEternalOrAnEternalist?

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    frustrated I sit here
    waiting so long for inspiration

    death is a bit near
    and I bear the winds duration

    like a candle I glow
    just to aid the sight of the wicked

    in my mental I’m slow
    but suddenly I write the quickest

    as I drain and perspire
    my thoughts to written oath

    I mainly birth the fire
    for my love stricken ghost

    to redeem itself in afterlife
    only I’m deemed the vengeful half to

    the one-sided faster knife
    from whose blade I’ll feel the wrath soon

    for I’ve lived a wrong life
    and only now have I found grace

    so I pierce two long knives
    into my eyes and tear down my face
    test
  2. MURDERGHOST

    MURDERGHOST New Member

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    I like it... the wrath of a blade..

    i got crazy visions...of moons reversing situations...

    by howling down to wolves!..


    Your poem was like a path... my mind followed it..

    then at the end of the trail.. i see an individual...

    digging knives in his face!...


    That's when the flashes...zoomed into my memories...


    i can relate to those type of feelings...


    nice job...
    test
  3. Percipient

    Percipient New Member

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    AmIEternalOrAnEternalist??


    That's some Rakim ish ain't it. The 18th letter... oh wait... might be Mos Def black on both sides.
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  4. ChyllTyrant

    ChyllTyrant AmIEternalOrAnEternalist?

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    yeah rakim and talib kweli said that.

    thanks for peepin this shit tho peeps

    PEACE
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  5. quotive

    quotive 3

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    like a candle I glow
    just to aid the sight of the wicked

    in my mental I’m slow
    but suddenly I write the quickest

    as I drain and perspire
    my thoughts to written oath

    I mainly birth the fire
    for my love stricken ghost

    That right there is what caught my attention, very dope peice...
    test
  6. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    Very dope piece here man. The ending was my favorite part.

    one luv
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  7. RealMS

    RealMS Ne te quaesiveris extra

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    in my mental I’m slow
    but suddenly I write the quickest

    I think I may relate to this, but I'm not sure.

    for I’ve lived a wrong life
    and only now have I found grace

    I used to feel cursed 'cause I had a broken family and beyond that, just a rough life, but I'm grateful for all of it, might sound crazy but oh-well.
    I like this part^^^ mostly. Even though the ending took its turn in detour and ended that way, it was still good, nice twist to it, but it makes me think.
    -Peace
    test
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