Writers Challenge #2

Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by Mind~$oul, Jul 16, 2003.

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  1. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    If You Could Turn Back The Hands of Time...

    Write to the topic
















    Thanks to TuNed RooT for helpin on the topic



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  2. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    So do we reply in here with the poem? Cause if so, I wrote a piece about it a long while ago, but I already have two poems on the front page...
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  3. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    Yeah you reply in here, it wont count as a third
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  4. Ntrikit

    Ntrikit Please stop freeposting.

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    What would you do...
    "If You could turn back the hands of time?"
    What would you say...
    "If You could turn back the hands of time?"

    Would it really matter any way because if there was another today yesterday may not have made it. Free Will is a key and we have played it, life a bill and none have paid it we're all just along for the ride on an underground railroad led by Harriet.
    "What If" is a rotting corpse that we haven't buried yet.
    How easily we forget that we are time's pet and not the other way so say we use clocks as rocks and put them inside of slingshots and wage war with Goliath.
    Take down Giants with a myriad of imagination.
    This world that our children are facin will never be embracin unless we begin erasin the will to erase.....and simply draw.
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  5. Infonation

    Infonation Info for the Nation

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    If the hands of time were on my left and my right

    I'd turn days back, from the day, to the evening, to the night

    Think of how much greater our insight's sight would unite

    Think of all those thoughts left in the dark, would now step into the light

    But i would never take advantage, God's plan has already been done

    I wouldn't be the one, to forsake HIS only begotten son

    Cause time is my enemy, and some time is not manigable

    Not to be touched by mortals, time is not tangible
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  6. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    good topic
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  7. 6ftground

    6ftground BLACKACE/GRIMREADER

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    If You Could Turn Back The Hands of Time...
    Life for today would repeat its self
    OVER AND OVER AND OVER…..
    Whoa is me to believe one rip of “mother” times arms
    Would this in turn rewind the 911 destruction and harm?
    Bring back mothers who past in 98’s cancer swarm
    I just can’t wait for the hands of time ovulate
    I contemplate, to revaluate the conception of times gates
    Open says me as I impregnate phases of an new era
    Only then would I ponder an IF.


    If You Could Turn Back The Hands of Time...
    What would you do for an IF?
    If IF was a fifth we’d all be some drunk $@#!#……6FTG
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  8. iceheart

    iceheart The Frozen Poet

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    6ftg is back - woo hoo!
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  9. MisterEThoughts

    MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth

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    If You Could Turn Back The Hands of Time...

    If i could turn back hands of tme I dance in the rain like theres no tommorow.What makes it easy is that i can speak my mind like there was a reunion that i have been waiting for. If i there was no tommorow i would be with my grandma that had passed away many years ago... to a better place called heaven. I wish there was tommorw i wish i just had one more chance to live... to try to make a difference in this world that i have lived for 18 years... what makes me sad is that i have taken a wrong path and i don't believe i am able to take it back.........


    ok this was very waccc i am soo sorry hah but yea
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  10. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    ::Keystyle::

    I keep blockin' open hand pimp slaps from time
    Waiting for a moment to be mine and I
    Decide then that I don't want to live another second
    Just that one forever when time is too tired
    To take it's toll on me.
    If I could turn back the hands of time woefully
    I'd hopelessly enjoy the respite from the abuse
    Destined to be obtuse
    Resonant is the accused
    Of battery, infinitely powered by irony
    I stand now on the reef of the ocean
    Between the young and the older
    But way before golden
    And I notice a few abnormalities
    I
    Can't move like I used to, windmills hurt
    And my knees are quickly loosing their faith in me.
    I don't remember things I used to want to forget
    And can't forget things I never wanted to know in the first place
    I no longer have faith in being first in the race
    You know, that feeling every kid has that
    They are special?
    I begin to wonder, what has "time" done to me
    to make me melt into the pot
    Yelling for it to stop
    Because I now can't tell the difference
    Between me and the throng.
    I tried too long
    To deny being young
    And now
    Time has made me live to regret it.
    Youth is gone and I didn't live to forget it.

    If I could turn back the hands of time,
    I might go back to when I first learned to rhyme
    Not because of the enjoyment of poetry
    But it was the same time I tried to kill myself
    And it's annoying me
    Why
    Couldn't
    I
    Just
    Kill

    Time?

    I tried to turn back the hands of time
    But realized time is me.
    My hands pinned back to the wood
    Back as it should
    Crucified by the insanity
    That time has made of me.

    And when I realized
    Time is me
    It became sad to see
    That time


    Really never "was" in the first place,
    and hence

    This poem has been written anonymously
    By hands that have yet to exist...
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  11. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    damn soultan that was ill
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  12. 6ftground

    6ftground BLACKACE/GRIMREADER

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    Damn I thought i was the only one that could express self from six feet ground I see you been burried alive too by life many twist... I like this piece...REAL....6FTG



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  13. *Princess*

    *Princess* skantless bitch

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    i actually wrote this about 2 years ago, when i saw this thread, i added more to it tho...

    i wish i could...could go back in time
    back to when i was 14...
    wasnt the best of times but fuck...
    i could change so many things
    just starting high school
    i'd be drug free
    mom and dad, dont need to test me
    i'd make my mother proud
    i'd do the work
    and get good grades
    i'd still be a virgin
    so i'd get to wear pure white on my wedding day.
    i'd wait for my honeymoon...
    but if i did have sex...i'd be sure to take the pill EVERY night...
    so i wouldnt be stuck in this prediciment twice.
    i'd think before i acted...
    and not kiss on the first date
    but hey...i'm only 18...still gotta life time to make my mother proud...

    i dunno...i just dont like it very much..needs something more
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  14. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    It just doesn't come across as a poem; just...

    sad.
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  15. Wicked5744

    Wicked5744 Last I awoke, it was morn

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    Develop

    Reputations would cease to exist,
    Fly by my eyes and disipate before the world,
    I would watch this all happen,
    From a distance I would feel the heat,
    For the energy exerted into such a fetish,
    Has become an epidemic.

    The minds of the young would have no concepts,
    No realities would emerge,
    For realities would be considered a slang,
    Something made up by a person,
    Just so they could get a point across.
    Realities would mean pointless,
    No longer mean the worrysome world.

    Stupidity would reign across Earth.
    Lack of intelligence would be the absolute IQ,
    Knowledge would be gained only through fact,
    Not desire of conquest.
    People would no longer be smart enough for territory,
    Or even brutish violence.
    Simplicity would regain it's place within complexity.

    I would look from a cliff,
    Somewhere in the universe,
    On Earth, it might be,
    And stare upon this pure creation,
    And try to think of anything better.
    If the world would be like this,
    What could possibly be wrong?
    The will to write would leave from among my tips,
    But the reasons,
    Would remain in the furthest abyss.

    Instead,
    I remain on this cliff looking at the sculpture,
    Proportioned so well, realism returns,
    Complexity envelopes itself,
    and the world around begins to change,
    And the people's reputation persists,
    That's what happens when mortals,
    Develop time.
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  16. misspimp

    misspimp a.k.a KATURAH

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    I can still hear her voice in my head...
    "Eva I cut my hair"
    I close my eyes...
    So vivid so clear...
    I see my best friend smiling...
    standing there...
    I was so scared when it hit me...
    When she's not coming back...finally sank in...
    If only I could go back...i'd hug my best friend...
    Before the lord called her name and took her in...
    If i had one wish...it'd only be to say goodbye...
    If only i could turn back the hands of time....

    I'd look him in the eyes...
    I'd hold him real close...
    Tell him exactly what i feel...
    and what i hate about him most...
    I'd take back my love...
    and take away my care...
    Tell him what he's missing...
    Leave him alone...standing there...
    I swear...i'd let him have it...
    But my words would be nothing but lies...
    I'd give back the feel of loving a man...
    If only i could turn back the hands of time...
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  17. Dark_Angel

    Dark_Angel Dark_Angel

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    Miss pimp and BlackSoultan i absolutely loved!
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  18. MzLashay

    MzLashay Livin'

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    This is my first time writing to a title so please tell me whatcha think i can do to make it a little betta

    ......If I could turn back the hands of time........

    If I could turn back the hands of time
    I would turn my negatives in the positives
    turn my frowns upside down.....
    I would live my life full of joy and love
    And for every beautiful day I would thank the man upabove.....

    I would rebuild the bridges that I have burned down.......
    I would make a peace with the grudges i held........

    Only if i could rewind the time
    I would do it all a little better
    think with my heart and not my head
    Not even mumble the words
    "I wish i were dead"

    Smile everytime that I opened my eyes
    take in a deep breath and Thank God for my life...

    I would go kiss my mother and tell her sorry for the things I have done
    but thank her for sacraficing the way she did for me and her son
    I would hug her every chance that I had
    I would have done anything not to make her sad
    Most of all i would have told her how much I love her
    how im glad she brought me her and how wonderful she is as a mother...

    I would go tell my father
    he made a mistake when he left
    Most of all i would forgive him
    so my heart and be at rest
    tell him i still love him even though he doesnt want anything to do with me
    He'll have to answer for his actions
    where ill be standing in the pearly gates waiting to see

    Most of all i would thank everyone who helped me along
    from them I go the courage to get right and move on
    but only i would change this
    If I had the power to turn back the hands of time
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  19. If you could turn back the hands of time

    If i could?
    i'd leave the minute hand where it stood for my own good
    I wouldnt travel to impossibility
    wouldnt go back reclaim my virginity
    wouldnt try and become perfect
    wouldnt move myself to nurse my cuts and bruises
    I would stay the same
    just as i have ever been
    everchanging
    ever ready
    ever steadily
    expanding momentarily
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  20. 6ftground

    6ftground BLACKACE/GRIMREADER

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    this whole piece was well wrote...Your insite is a delight and I hope to read more of your poems..6FTG

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