Writers Challenge #12

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  1. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    Simile Exercise

    25 lines at the most people! Dont overdue it.
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  2. ~*D.Zyre*~

    ~*D.Zyre*~ .::D.Zyre Victory::.

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    1. A bird sitting in an old man’s beard is like…
    a young child being comforted and feeling safe inside his mothers arms
    2. The sails on the ship moved as if…
    God is guiding them with his devine wisdom
    3. Everything was different, now that it was…
    me who was hurt
    4. A woman in…..is like a…..in…..
    love with you is like a angel being with you forever
    5. Down is like up when…..is like….
    hate is like love
    6. Hate is to a closed first, as love is like…
    an open palm..it hurts to get popped but you keep sticking it out
    7. A half empty glass is more like……than it is like…
    loving but not being loved back than it is like not loving at all
    8. Blank pages are as wasted as…
    as air
    9. A man in…..is like a……in…..
    love is like a child in love with christmas day
    10.Truth is as hard to obtain as…..and as easy to lose as……
    gold and as easy to lose as your life


    blank pages fill my room..
    blank pages irrate me...
    the blank clean whiteness of the pages call me..
    it's too white....too clean...too...blank...
    writing is all i know now...
    a desire to pour out my soul on this clean white paper is growing stronger..
    it's as if the page knows me...
    it soothes me...as each blank is filled...
    as the cleanliness becomes dingy with pencil
    as the white becomes quickly etched dark marks strewn across the lines
    another scar is healing...
    another pain is subsiding...
    another heartache is mended...
    these blank pages comfort me...
    these blank pages are more precious then air...and cannot be wasted...
    test
  3. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    1. A bird sitting in an old man’s beard is like…
    An old man giving head

    2. The sails on the ship moved as if…
    Beckoned by the sun and yet called by the wild
    3. Everything was different, now that it was…
    Tuesday

    4. A woman in New Jersey is like a turd in bloom

    5. Down is like up when cocaine is like air

    6. Hate is to a closed first, as love is like
    Open heart surgery

    7. A half empty glass is more like a thirty bastid than it is like a satisfied father

    8. Blank pages are as wasted as…
    Prophets of le jhetto

    9. A man in dc is like a diamond in the right land

    10.Truth is as hard to obtain as perfection and as easy to lose as your last 2 dollars


    Basic Exercise:

    Circle the sentence you like best, and use it as a central image in a 15-25 line poem, any form or style. This exercise focuses on the development of similes in your poetry.

    Or

    Circle three of the sentences you like the most, and weave them together, creating a poem 15-25 lines long, any form any style.


    Everything was different, now that it was her time to moan
    Here time to worry that she'd have to be alone
    Now I wasn't enough to her, she passed me when I lapsed into self-loathing
    for three years.
    For these fears of never being able to be me
    Or who everyone thought I was supposed to b.e
    I cried too long now I'm dehydrated, I made it this far
    Dying of thirst with a half empty glass of self respect
    Half filled with despair.
    I never knew how she loved me in the first place
    But now I can avoid the unsuredness.















    Because I know why she left.














    And everything is different now...
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  4. Clarksvegas_Dan

    Clarksvegas_Dan Registered Voter

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    1. A bird sitting in an old man’s beard is like a wiseman wandering through the wilderness, and he is never alone.

    2. The sails on the ship moved as if the ocean was their ballroom and they didn't care who was watching, because they will always know where the providence blows

    3. Everything was different, now that it was at the beginning again

    4. A woman in Pink is like a Peacock in a paramount Paradise

    5. Down is like up when the methuselah is like a child at play

    6. Hate is to a closed first, as love is like Hates Handcuffs

    7. A half empty glass is more like a nap in the middle of a symphony than it is like reality for a gluttonous man

    8. Blank pages are as wasted as children serving Life without parole, and yet they are precious to me because with any old pen they are able to grow.

    9. A man in his mirror is like a long lost book of legendary lessons in the World's largest library that refuses to use the dewey decimal system.

    10.Truth is as hard to obtain as the Head of the Medusa and as easy to lose as a childhood friend.



    A bird sitting in an old man’s beard is like a wiseman wandering through the wilderness, and he is never alone
    Sophia is always there
    The sails on the ship moved
    as if the ocean was a ballroom
    and they don't care who is watching,
    because they will always know where the providence blows
    But the Merchants refuse to follow that muse
    A woman in Pink is like a Peacock in a paramount Paradise
    with a permanent Rainbow
    Streaking the sky
    Her tail feathers will be noticed
    A man in a mirror is like a long lost book
    of legendary lessons
    in the World's largest library
    that refuses to use the dewey decimal system
    But the Librarian can show you exactly
    Where your book can be found
    He also knows the author
    But he is rewarded for his 24/7
    dilligence and care
    When he's reading the books
    He is also in prayer.
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  5. Clarksvegas_Dan

    Clarksvegas_Dan Registered Voter

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    I just like this little exercise alot, and not very many others are playing, so I thought I would do it again.

    1. A bird sitting in an old man’s beard is like an asteroid orbiting in our solar system.

    2. The sails on the ship moved as if they had a mind of their own, and the destination is the words that they speak.

    3. Everything was different, now that it was my turn again, I try to be patient but I have a passion for making the wheel spin.

    4. A woman in flesh is like an Annointed Angel in a seductive Demonic Disguise, her consciousness rests there in the flesh but her true self is seen in the skys.

    5. Down is like up when drinking from the cup is like poking a finger down into my throat and throwing back up, it must have been all the salt.

    6. Hate is to a closed fist, as love is like the wall of a tempered steel safe, which protects the Truth from the incessant racket of those fists of shattered bones that refuse to come on home.

    7. A half empty glass is more like a blessing when it's tempered by the serpent than it is like a disappointment to those tragically Great Expectations

    8. Blank pages are as wasted as Our mom when she was still a virgin

    9. A man in hot pursuit of his same suit is like a race car with wings and super jet propulsion inside the caged track with narrow paths and low ceilings, but at least the crowd can witness the feeling.

    10.Truth is as hard to obtain as asking your server for a refilling of your cup and as easy to lose as an extra rib that's all grown up.

    The asteroid school of falconry
    specializes in preserving the knowledge esoterically
    And they are aware that the sails can take them there
    where the words become the reality
    And finally it's my spin again
    And this time around I am destined to win
    Cause I finally see who I'm trying to be
    And my Bat-like Angel makes the love not a sin
    And down today is down to stay
    I will not give it up
    And all those fists closed to tight to resist
    are in a no-win battle
    Please cease and desist
    And my good friend the snake, a.k.a sophia
    Whispers be grateful for what's still with the Dea
    And a cluttered room with blank pages everywhere
    is not wasted yet, so long as they stay there
    For the potential of each..One of the pages
    Is infinite in the minds eye
    I hope the story is of Mages
    She's outrageous
    as the Queen of Hearts
    If only I could convince her
    that her words are too sharp
    Like, "Off with their Heads"
    But she just loves to see red
    The Truth ain't hard to find
    Start the search inside of your mind
    Strip away all of the inauthentic in time
    It is just like they say it
    If you seek you will find,
    And in my search for myself
    I found what I know has been missing.
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  6. Clarksvegas_Dan

    Clarksvegas_Dan Registered Voter

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    Damn. These exercises aren't any fun when we're given no feedback. Oh well, I'll keep doing them and I'll imagine that the people reading them have just lost control of their hands, so they are unable to reply. Yes. That's what I'll do. lol I just love symbols. They're the greatest invention ever. yeah, Ima just go write some stuff to put in my time capsule and I'll check back tomorrow I guess. Peace.
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  7. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    GO READ THE F*CKING RULES AND GET OFF YOUR OWN NUTS.

    If they aren't replying, they didn't feel the need to. This isn't a fast-pased forum in here. Calm the hell down. I read ya shit, wasn't moved to reply or give feedback.


    I noticed you didn't respond to mine. I just opted to NOT bitch about it...
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  8. Clarksvegas_Dan

    Clarksvegas_Dan Registered Voter

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    Lol, very good.
    I suppose I should get off my own nuts,
    but it's a good place to be.
    I just needed some kindof attention.
    thank you Sr. Sin
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  9. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    [funny] you are a very odd individual.
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