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  1. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    this took me forever to find lol.....todd mcfarlane is great though.....thanks to my buddy marshall for taking out the writing :) and thanks to da klimp for the space

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  2. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    Take a long walk off a short cliff...
    Better yet hop scotch
    300 foot swan dive into a half gainer
    To oblivion
    Because no one feels sorry for you...
    You don't even feel sorry for yourself,
    And you think life is all fun and games...
    Well Death is fun too,
    Let's play kiddie games...
    Like Russian roulette for Now & Laters,
    And paper our wrists
    With comic book pages,
    To see who dies the fastest...
    To see who'll die laughing,
    And who'll die crying...
    a hop skip and a jump
    From defying
    gravity
    And flying with no wings
    And no engine,
    Into a cesspool of sin,
    And eternal regrets.


    This sucked pretty bad, but oh well...if you don't like it do better. lol
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  3. utsukushikumegami

    utsukushikumegami That's Ms. Goddess to you

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    oh well...I tried...

    Like a good girl, I follow the rules
    I go through each number the way I’m supposed to
    And execute my tasks flawlessly
    1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9…
    But here I am now, what can I do?
    My life is worthless, there’s nowhere left to go
    Daddy’s little girl lost her way
    What good is being a good girl,
    When all you know is “Yes” and “Of course, with pleasure!”?
    There is no life left for me
    Only an endless fall into a vast world of nothingness
    There is only down from here…
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  4. Mick Foley

    Mick Foley Cant Kill Me

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    I'm losing control
    Time is slip, slip, slipping
    As the time closes in
    My life falls short
    Sweat dripping down my face
    Just losing it
    Losing control
    I cant see anymore
    My sight is going
    Cant help but look at me
    Hurting worse than ever
    Not knowing when it ends
    When I fall
    Fall off the cliff
    Fall out of sight
    Never know when
    The pain ends
    Lost all my friends
    One more step
    and its the end.
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  5. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    ayo ima give it a try my first time at this



    A deceitful game of sort much like life
    You get tricked into the wrong yet you know what’s right.
    You take a fall for what you bestowed trust upon,
    your friends arent what they seem they are plottenious.

    They scheming on you without you knowing
    They aint down to ride yet they let you keep going.
    You fall face first on reality
    with no one to help you up ,its, a sad sight to see

    alone through life with no one to trust
    even your friends turn out to be fake
    ...................


    my mind just ran blank sorry maybe i'll finish another time
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  6. Hopscotch on the clifftop red riding hood with goldie locks
    innoncence onto jagged edge
    falling is flying to the depths
    No shame in childs play
    mind doesn't care if it looks like rain
    the things as a child i couldn't contain
    are the things i would never change and do again.
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  7. Infonation

    Infonation Info for the Nation

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    We all follow the leader, but today the leader is wrong

    This one, they give the title, has no flute or enchanting song

    Off to her death, she'll leave a scar on this planet

    Showing people, don't take your uniqueness for granite

    And when your problems, turn into a flame, don't fan it

    Because the unlikely, turns to possibile, and then to a menace

    Then your nightmares, of the satan are relentless, and your pain of torture is endless

    Welcome to Hell.....
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  8. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    She knows exactly what shes doing
    having fun, making it numb...
    When she awakes everyone will try to fix her
    but she knows what shes doing.
    Trust her once...

    (She dreams)
    One is for the the number of people who love her
    she doesnt sleep with her hatred anymore...
    Two is for the number of times she was hospitalized
    but that gave her time to explore...
    Three symbolizes the trinity,
    the union of her heart, mind, and lack of hope...
    Four is when she shut the door and found where she belonged...
    Five is when she got strong...
    Six is when her house became a home but she was still alone...
    Seven is when the minutes turned to hours and april flowers
    brought may showers...
    Eight is when she could celebrate when somoene lost his power...
    Nine times she was almost at the end of the line...
    but then she realized a line doesnt end.

    Ten brought new things...
    two caloused fingers, paint stained overalls
    and a new set of wings.
    Someday she will bless you with what she brings
    but for now,
    the lady in red
    will live in her head.

    She knows what shes doing
    let her fly.
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  9. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    didnt suck.....dont sell yourself short.....it was nice......especially the last few lines.....
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  10. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    Damn, Feme. Consider yourself blessed with words. You sendin' me back to the lab to come tighter.
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  11. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    This one is hard. I see so much in this picture. I just erased a poem because it didn't quite capture it all correctly...

    I'll be back.
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  12. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    [heart] thanks......im looking forward to yours
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  13. Vulkan'XL

    Vulkan'XL New Member

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    Satan's little red dress got Little Johnny all excited before she started to hopscotch her way out of his life and into the portal of time and space...Taking existance past boundaries Johnny hadn't seen before! Going to her wit's end to keep him enthrawled in her ways, she blows him kisses with her silken smooth hair and tempts him to follow the leader. The children of the corn don't run and giggle, neither does Johnny anymore, not after she got a hold of him and wouldn't let go. Now the new recruits have come to play and night overcasts the day, and vampires feed on their children as prey...She waves, "Come see my evil ways"...Happiest I ever saw her was when she was ahead of the rest, the leader of the pack in her little red half-back. Words flow from her hips as the enticing smell of dried mushrooms and weeds eminates from below the plank. Dank with the smeel of funk and spunk, awaiting the smiles of a drunken man to be there and take her hand...Hurling her down, down, down....Forever into her pit of nothings...Follow the leader, watch as Johnny once did...See her move and shake and jump with haste! Living life on the lip of the cliff..."Here," she motions, "Give hell a taste..."

    Nice jobs by everyone so far...Keep it up!
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  14. PiNoyProPhEt

    PiNoyProPhEt Illsick Bitch...DJ/Emcee

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    fall away from the world/ stay paced to erase the face of this little girl/ that ive been so dully pained in this whirl...wind of my existence in life/ persist to live in the these indiginous eyes/ that keep me to be living in lies/ so i'll step off the cliff and wait to see whats held in the skies/ and not follow my peers/ cuz the tears that ive shed through the years have led to this moment...keeping me in fear/ its time to rise above and not be like any other/ the picture paints a world that only sees me in color/ but its in our minds that we shape ourselves and one day can hopefully love one another...
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  15. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    Potato Leek Soup
    Time passes slowly
    Freeze frame
    These days
    My
    Life moves in pictures
    In descriptive scriptures
    But I don't dream in color
    Of
    Others, I
    tried.

    And when I finally get it
    Life keeps me still
    Comatose for 2 weeks
    And the people see me ill

    But I couldn't see you
    Just
    Potato Leek Soup.
    Chalk outline of my life
    Standing on a cool cat's ninth
    Overlooking the end of existence
    The Dream and the Distance
    Purposeful
    Fate of the shore's view
    My past is the past
    It's gone,
    I implore you!
    The only face i see
    Is He of the Trinity
    In conversation with the he
    Pointing the hand of the Goat's Head
    1,000 years. Hope's dead
    And I finally understand
    All the dreams of my existence
    And where I am to stand

    It's the whisper of the soul
    Of my angel
    It's the home of
    My days in the coma
    I'm 98 years old
    About to have my first day
    In the Potato Leek Soup
    Days renewed
    The new days to seek truth

    And I now see you
    In the enigmatic picture
    This picture is me
    Along with everyone in it.

    God speaks to the Devil
    At the base of my life
    Determining who get's me
    After this strife
    The little boy,
    Oh the little boy
    I
    remember him well
    I
    remember the spell
    The father that I never had
    The men who can't replace my dad
    My first, second and third Husband
    Trying to find me
    Trying to find what I wasn't
    And the road on which I stand
    playfully pointing to innocence
    Ressonant pictures
    Of the Potato Leek Soup

    And when I finally get it
    Life keeps me still
    Comatose for 2 weeks
    And the people see me ill

    I finally get life
    Finally seek the dream
    How can it be the scene
    Like this to quiet the screams?

    So I joyfully head towards
    The denoument of World existance
    I head to the inspiration
    Of all the Scriptures
    He who wears number three
    He who was there for me
    When I never knew my father.
    Because he didn't want me...

    Heaven can't wait
    Nor can I any longer
    Finally I live in color
    In Potato Leek Soup

    I go towards the light
    Towards His might
    Fall away to the day
    With a full day's light

    And when I finally get it
    Life keeps me still
    Comatose for 2 weeks
    And people see me ill
    But I cannot iterate
    The lack of that veracity
    This is the first time I've lived
    Ever in my full capacity

    That is me,
    Finally existing in full color
    Happily
    That is me unlike any other
    Finally,
    I'm that little girl with no more bothers
    Because I head to the Promise Land

    I've finally found my real Father...


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  16. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    ^daaaaaayyyyummmmm......that shit was thoro.
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  17. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    I changed it a little so it flows better.
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  18. varentao

    varentao New Member

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    Fairly quickly done. Just wrote from what i saw. And built upon that.


    To edge we played happily
    Riding innocence with our toys
    Wary of what's beyond it
    We masked it in our joy..
    Adapting to fit our games..
    Let us play some more...

    Yet it always looms over me
    A shadowy beast who claims it love
    Hairy fury it's tool of pleasure
    My tears turn to slimey disgust
    "Last time.." i say in whispers
    For age those words have echoed..

    Darkness scares no more
    Too long in it's torment
    Mind rose to embrace it
    I skip towards the end..
    For surely beneath it all
    True light must exist...



    (Some might find this piece kind of sick...once they dig into it...but that's reality...stop running/looking away from it..)...
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  19. MisterEThoughts

    MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth

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    Here i am wanting you're hand and you are not here to catch me fall.
    How could this be I am falling and you're not here to catch me. Help me God I need someone in my life in order to catch me fall.


    oK that was wacc i am sorry my first time doing it to a pic i will do better next time.But i tried.
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  20. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    DAYUM soultan
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