[WK17] 27. Black Tiger 0-0 v. 28. Discreet 0-0 (Vote!)

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  1. Quriosity

    Quriosity Moderator

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  2. Discreet

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  3. Black Tiger

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  4. Black Tiger

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    im a life changer, carving a new path for this spine so this bitch cant drop obsolete
    holdin backpacks this geek... because only punks use guards when crossing the streets.
    i already know his punches misses..& he doubtfire, dont give'em any roll of tissues
    get it off ya chest bitch & heres the cue, he'll gear up then i'll adress a ye'old issue.
    you made a new name, well i guess its time to bring the pain
    discreet got no direction in the rap game.. just do you! & fall back on the name.
    gotta 08 name & tried driving a stick.. now he's just flippin a bitch
    i piss on stalls & its, in Public bathrooms.. weather Undecided u sit or pee on toilets.
    creet blowing smoke & dudes a joke... my hanglines'l make'em float
    you just bogus though.. i cut through gas tricks & bypass his throat.
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  5. Discreet

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    I know this jock won't last, so I will drop you fast,
    That's why I checked in with 10, I just forgot the dash.
    You'll never rock me dude, I'll pull out the glock and pull,
    And get rid of a black head quicker than Oxy do.
    I'm new to this league, so I'll just follow in his lead,
    Cuz Quriosity killed the cat, so Tiger'll get murked by Discreet.
    I don't mean to alarm you, but you know Dis will harm dude,
    And put holes in a Black T big enough to put my head and arms thru.
    You outta retire now, or I'll leave you with a wired mouth,
    So change my name to knee injury the way I'm taking Tiger out.
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  6. Nick Rainey

    Nick Rainey When it RAINES it Pours!

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    Black Tiger
    What is this spoken word dude? Your opening set-up was long as fuck and completely pointless: life charger, new path, spine, obsolete ..huh!? It honestly wasn't congruent in the least b. Then you drop right in with the follow-up that didn't rhyme til the end of the line and made even less sense than the opener. Aight the 'fall back on the name' concept made alotta sense, it was a weak insult, but still that's what you're suppose to do in a battle. The toilet line was retarded as fuck fa'real my dude: "weather Undecided u sit or pee on toilets" ..that didn't correspond to anything else in your verse; PLUS you forced the shit outta the rhyme. You're trying to be cryptic and poetic, but if just comes off as stupid. I'm not hating or beefing or even really trying to diss you, but the shit is the opposite of what a battle verse should be.

    Discreet
    Your opener was bad, I guessing you meant 10-yard dash, but the way in which you worded it left it incomplete. The black head/Oxy line was decent, the curiousity killed the cat concept has been done a million-billion times before though. Yet I did like your black-t shirt concept and your tiger injury idea was good, but you didn't make it impact enough.

    Overall I'd give this to Discreet without thinking, not cause he was anything amazing, but because he wrote an actual battle verse. His verse was extremely simplistic, but it was standard enough to defeat Tiger's exordinary oddness ..Vote - Discreet.
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  7. Wordp1ay

    Wordp1ay the realest right

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    Vote Discreet

    Explainin Is A Waste Of Time, Regardless If I Do Or Dont The Outcome Of My Vote Is The Same So Why The Fuck Do People Complain About Explanations...votes Are Votes Take Or Leave It
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  8. Discreet

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  9. Area51.

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    Black Tiger just didn't do a good job of creativly dissing Discreet, shit was too wordy and not witty enough. theres really not much else to say bout it
    Discreets verse was ight, blackhead lines played but he had some pretty solid nameplays, the tiger woods line was pretty good I liked that. didnt like the killed the cat line, but black t wasnt bad. anyway overall better/more polished verse

    I don't mean to alarm you, but you know Dis will harm dude,
    And put holes in a Black T big enough to put my head and arms thru.
    You outta retire now, or I'll leave you with a wired mouth,
    So change my name to knee injury the way I'm taking Tiger out.

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    nothing

    v/ Discreet
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  10. Black Tiger

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    blah ok take the win
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  11. Trombley

    Trombley .Deon.

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    bt didnt really attack his opponent witty enough here. his ideas werent developed enough either. some of his stuff just read like he was freestyling some nonsense.

    overall i feel like discreet came with a more prepared effort here and put together that arm's and head line that was pretty good.

    v/discreet
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  12. Black Tiger

    Black Tiger New Member

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    ok its a k.o. close battle please i'll givem that
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  13. Yung Troy

    Yung Troy The Lyrical King

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    creet blowing smoke & dudes a joke... my hanglines'l make'em float
    you just bogus though.. i cut through gas tricks & bypass his throat.
    this was the only thing I was feeling from Discreet's verse, he had a lot of confusing lines in there which made me say fuck it and if I gotta do that then what's the verse worth?..but the closer was nice though..

    You'll never rock me dude, I'll pull out the glock and pull,
    And get rid of a black head quicker than Oxy do.
    I'm new to this league, so I'll just follow in his lead,
    Cuz Quriosity killed the cat, so Tiger'll get murked by Discreet.
    these were the nicest lines of the battle that I think did enough to get Diz the win on this one..

    vote=Discreet
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  14. DaTrusHurtz

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    im a life changer, carving a new path for this spine so this bitch cant drop obsolete
    holdin backpacks this geek... because only punks use guards when crossing the streets.
    holdin backpacks was a dope concept, but ur punchline was a bit hazy n' not executed well, try to get to the point in fewer words
    i already know his punches misses..& he doubtfire, dont give'em any roll of tissues
    get it off ya chest bitch & heres the cue, he'll gear up then i'll adress a ye'old issue.
    concept just came off as really forced and stretched
    you made a new name, well i guess its time to bring the pain
    discreet got no direction in the rap game.. just do you! & fall back on the name.
    wording was just pretty off on this concept
    gotta 08 name & tried driving a stick.. now he's just flippin a bitch
    i piss on stalls & its, in Public bathrooms.. weather Undecided u sit or pee on toilets.
    u tried too hard to make this work.. its not that original anyway, stay away from anything having to do with sex, gays, or public bathrooms unless its really witty
    creet blowing smoke & dudes a joke... my hanglines'l make'em float
    you just bogus though.. i cut through gas tricks & bypass his throat.
    nah, just came off as a lil forced again

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    I know this jock won't last, so I will drop you fast,
    That's why I checked in with 10, I just forgot the dash.
    concepts a bit forced.. didn't kinda work
    You'll never rock me dude, I'll pull out the glock and pull,
    And get rid of a black head quicker than Oxy do.
    decent concept tho u coulda done more with it
    I'm new to this league, so I'll just follow in his lead,
    Cuz Quriosity killed the cat, so Tiger'll get murked by Discreet.
    its alright, tho kinda simple
    I don't mean to alarm you, but you know Dis will harm dude,
    And put holes in a Black T big enough to put my head and arms thru.
    much better, its also simple, but kinda witty and to the point, good diss
    You outta retire now, or I'll leave you with a wired mouth,
    So change my name to knee injury the way I'm taking Tiger out.
    coulda prolly done a better tiger woods diss, but not bad

    Black Tiger, u got some ideas, but ur wording is too forced n' stretched. Work on coming more direct n' get to the point through fewer words. Discreet u were the opposite, too simple n' too the point, but u came more direct with the disses and u hit him harder so u got this.

    Vote - Discreet
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  15. Caveat1

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    im a life changer, carving a new path for this spine so this bitch cant drop obsolete
    holdin backpacks this geek... because only punks use guards when crossing the streets.
    OK
    i already know his punches misses..& he doubtfire, dont give'em any roll of tissues
    get it off ya chest bitch & heres the cue, he'll gear up then i'll adress a ye'old issue.
    COOL
    you made a new name, well i guess its time to bring the pain
    discreet got no direction in the rap game.. just do you! & fall back on the name.
    SOLID
    gotta 08 name & tried driving a stick.. now he's just flippin a bitch
    i piss on stalls & its, in Public bathrooms.. weather Undecided u sit or pee on toilets.
    ALRIGHT CONCEPT/WORDING NEEDS SOME WORK
    creet blowing smoke & dudes a joke... my hanglines'l make'em float
    you just bogus though.. i cut through gas tricks & bypass his throat.
    STRONG FINISH


    I know this jock won't last, so I will drop you fast,
    That's why I checked in with 10, I just forgot the dash.
    GOOD START
    You'll never rock me dude, I'll pull out the glock and pull,
    And get rid of a black head quicker than Oxy do.
    NICE
    I'm new to this league, so I'll just follow in his lead,
    Cuz Quriosity killed the cat, so Tiger'll get murked by Discreet.
    NICE CONCEPT
    I don't mean to alarm you, but you know Dis will harm dude,
    And put holes in a Black T big enough to put my head and arms thru.
    OK
    You outta retire now, or I'll leave you with a wired mouth,
    So change my name to knee injury the way I'm taking Tiger out.
    ILL CLOSER/REAL STRONG


    V-DISCREET
    HE WAS REAL CONSISTENT AND SHINED HERE. I LIKED HIS STUFF FROM THE CONCEPTS TO THE CLEVER WORDING, HES NICE. TIGER HAD SOME NICE CONCEPTS BUT NEEDS TO CUT DOWN ON BAR LENGTH AND FIX THE WORDING IN THE FUTURE. TIGER HAD MORE UPS THEN DOWNS AND I LIKED HIS OPENING CONCEPT MOST. GOOD BATTLE
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  16. Constrikta of CVI

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    I'm not going to break down both verses in this vote, but I'll explain why Discreet is the winner.

    Black Tiger you have some ok concepts.. but you really need to work on your flow. Your bars are way too long and take away from the effectiveness of your dissing. All of your verse was stretched.. you need to shorten those bars and flip your concepts a little more clever to be effective at all. Discreet had a much cleaner flow and a smoother verse overall. It was definitely enough for him to get the win here.

    Vote- Discreet
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  17. Proof

    Proof Jamaicans do errything

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    hard to pick something to say that hasn't been covered by the other voters. black tiger, i would say try to pick one thing to focus on improving at a time. my suggestion would be your wording. you have a few unnecessary phrases and words in there that didn't add to the concept, timing or rhyme scheme.

    Discreet- real nice first verse here, especially considering the competition. best line was the head and arms thru / black t holes line... real nice one there. look forward to peepin ya shit in the future.

    vote-discreet
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  18. Aloe

    Aloe www.myspace.com/aloemusic

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    vote - discreet.

    wasn't really feelin this battle, it seemed like both of yall were holdin back or not tryin hard or something. the reason behind me voting for discreet is pretty much cus he had my favorite line in the battle:

    You outta retire now, or I'll leave you with a wired mouth,
    So change my name to knee injury the way I'm taking Tiger out.

    pretty decent lil line. keep at it yall.
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  19. U S E R

    U S E R NON-DOHPE.squad

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    Discreet Wins.
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