[WK/29] (CONTENDER) 1. -Sephiroth- 10-1 v. 2. Ren. 4-0 (seph wins)

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  1. Quriosity

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    [01] - The deadline for verses is Thursday @ 11:59pm EST.
    [02] - The deadline for extensions is 24 hours ONLY, making it Friday @ 11:59pm EST.
    [03] - The deadline for voting is Sunday @ 10:00pm EST.


    VOTING

    [04] - You must post at least 5 valid voting links within your match.
    [05] - Within those 5 links, you must be sure to vote on both the Championship and Contender matches.
    [06] - Votes must be at least 2 full lines of feedback per competitor followed by the competitor's name in which you choose to vote for.
    [07] - Voting a tie result is deemed a failure to vote.
    [08] - Voting links must be posted in your battle thread with the Champ and Contender matches labeled clearly.
    [09] - Votes changed after 1 hour of posting will be deemed a failure to vote.
    [10] - Voting is open to current participants, past champions, and active RBL moderators ONLY.


    VERSES

    [11] - All verses are to remain within the limits of 8 to 30 lines. Contender/Champion match verses are TO remain within the limits of 8 to 40 lines. Any breach of line limit must be agreed upon by both competitors prior to a verse being posted. Failure to comply will result in an automatic forfeit by all failing parties. An agreement of a line limit will thereby serve as the maximum allowed; competitors are allowed to post under an agreed limit, but never over. An agreement is not required.
    [12] - You must not edit your verse once your opponent has posted, who in turn must not edit their verse after the first vote is cast.
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  2. Ren.

    Ren. elite.

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    sixteen.
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  3. -Sephiroth-

    -Sephiroth- Geostigmatic

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  4. -Sephiroth-

    -Sephiroth- Geostigmatic

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    i might need an extension.
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  5. Ren.

    Ren. elite.

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    me too. tomorrow it is then.
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  6. Ren.

    Ren. elite.

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    Look homie..
    I'm whorin ya stuff, ya not fire so I'm warming you up
    shoulda named yaself Caveat too..to give the league a Warning YOU suck
    your nameless..idc what ya claiming cut out the shameless braggin
    one hit n' u'll have an Offset Eye that NFL Teams'll use as a formation faggot
    ya losing popularity..noones appealing to yours its only real if ya sure
    Fuck hair.. your Receding Lines got Men in their Fourtys feeling secure
    your chick can't Box.. can't stop. thats just enough man ya cocky
    she's been working the Corner harder than the Cutman for Rocky
    acting like your status is legit.. ya weak an I was the pinnacle first
    Serv only recycled to prove you weren't worth a fuckin original verse
    its easy to see your shook.. so look, it'll get real if you push me
    if danger comes this kid will Run enough for DMC to feel like a pussy
    I thought you were decent. I'm the boss for a reason.. ya ain't able to quit
    ya showed us a Veteran Status.. is somethin we CAN'T label ya wit
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  7. -Sephiroth-

    -Sephiroth- Geostigmatic

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    bet the voters'll disregard everything this fucker had said
    i'll have Q saying this battles 'Over', without upping the thread
    but i agree with you though, thats why you probably feelin nervous
    we on the same page, thats why i see my old concepts in ur verses
    your not even capable of deciphering the thoughts that i say
    he wouldn't know what this 'disbarment', if his lawyer was dropped from the case
    i hear the talks, people say you'll be killing me ?
    well thats neither here nor there... it's out with your creativity
    no wonder your known as a joke, you got the wackness factor
    you changed the subject, and turned a contendership into a laughing matter
    think he deserve the shine, just quit it clown
    only thing bigger than your inferiority complex, is how many people it could house
    probably caught emotions thinkin them bars up for me
    so im'a punch a hole through your chest, and wear your heart on my sleeve

    pz
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  8. Quriosity

    Quriosity Moderator

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    REN

    Look homie..
    I'm whorin ya stuff, ya not fire so I'm warming you up
    shoulda named yaself Caveat too..to give the league a Warning YOU suck
    ^nice use of quote, creative i'd say because no one would've picked that out of that long ass convo just for this. wording was good and so it connected.

    your nameless..idc what ya claiming cut out the shameless braggin
    one hit n' u'll have an Offset Eye that NFL Teams'll use as a formation faggot
    ^eh, don't think i dig it. mainly because the whole concept is just played as far as something pertaining to football in the sense of a line or formation or whatever. it also wasn't creative or nice enough. at the same time it was executed fairly well other than i think the braggin/faggot thing was forced because it was too hard to rhyme and make complete sense with just formation. but, it was done well and damn near unnoticed. if i dug the concept, this would be a nice line.

    ya losing popularity..noones appealing to yours its only real if ya sure
    Fuck hair.. your Receding Lines got Men in their Fourtys feeling secure
    ^eh, another played concept imo. the whole receding hairline thing. still, this was executed well just as the last and nothing felt noticeably forced other than the set-up but just as the last line it still seemed to work for some reason. i'd say the flow really because it hides the fact that the set-up was thrown together just because it rolls well off the tongue.

    your chick can't Box.. can't stop. thats just enough man ya cocky
    she's been working the Corner harder than the Cutman for Rocky
    ^would've been good if you said working the corner longer. otherwise, i don't think this was a fresh flip. rocky lines have been done to death and i can't say that i've heard a working the corner reference but at the same time it didn't make much sense to me with the harder being that rocky is old school. if it were current, then maybe. would've been a worthy flip though imo had you said longer because rocky's been doing it for fucking ever. still, executed well and its a decent line.

    acting like your status is legit.. ya weak an I was the pinnacle first
    Serv only recycled to prove you weren't worth a fuckin original verse
    ^lol, good personal. effective.

    its easy to see your shook.. so look, it'll get real if you push me
    if danger comes this kid will Run enough for DMC to feel like a pussy
    ^nice. creative, haven't heard it before.

    I thought you were decent. I'm the boss for a reason.. ya ain't able to quit
    ya showed us a Veteran Status.. is somethin we CAN'T label ya wit
    ^eh, this was pretty good. funny, so on comedic value i'd say its nice, but nothing great.

    SEPHIROTH

    bet the voters'll disregard everything this fucker had said
    i'll have Q saying this battles 'Over', without upping the thread
    ^pretty good. a Q line that hasn't been used yet, so that's a plus. sets the mood for your swag so its a pretty good opener.

    but i agree with you though, thats why you probably feelin nervous
    we on the same page, thats why i see my old concepts in ur verses
    ^eh, basic. not really that great of a flip. plus i wouldn't characterize you as a cat who gets flipped often. then again, i wasn't around during your time really or just never paid attention so maybe you're worth it. all in all this was still a basic flip of a concept that's been used many times and i wouldn't give it credit unless you pointed to a specific line that was flipped and proved that this wasn't just a generic diss but actually had legitimate personal value.

    your not even capable of deciphering the thoughts that i say
    he wouldn't know what this 'disbarment', if his lawyer was dropped from the case
    ^nice. i think the extra this was uneccessary but it worked at the same time by using DIS as DISS instead of THIS. might be better actually, being that DIS/THIS could be viewed as forced. set-up and everything was in relation so it worked for me either way.

    i hear the talks, people say you'll be killing me ?
    well thats neither here nor there... it's out with your creativity
    ^i think something about the wording or flow could've been better but the idea itself was a good straightforward punch. never heard it quite like this before so i'd say the idea for execution was creative but i just think you could've done more to beef it up.

    no wonder your known as a joke, you got the wackness factor
    you changed the subject, and turned a contendership into a laughing matter
    ^lol. nice.

    think he deserve the shine, just quit it clown
    only thing bigger than your inferiority complex, is how many people it could house
    ^pretty good.

    probably caught emotions thinkin them bars up for me
    so im'a punch a hole through your chest, and wear your heart on my sleeve
    ^no, heart on sleeve punches are blah by now and i don't tend to dig the violent routine unless its dope. this wasn't dope to me.

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    all in all, this was a nice match. probably better than what is reflected in my vote. as a straight read i think this was enjoyable and both brought some shit to the table though both seemed reserved. i think ren's execution was impressive though i didn't dig some of his lines while seph had some creative concepts but i wasn't feeling the execution of a few of them. ren's flow was good, the verse read well, and the lines were all at least decent. i think he had 3 in there somewhere around the middle that i felt could've been substituted but overall it was a good verse and finished well. seph was a bit more all over the place and had dopeness in patches. he came out decent, then dropped some good ideas, then finished iffy for me with that closer. all in all i think he had about one line that i didn't like, two that i felt were okay, two that i dug and the rest i felt could've been better but were pretty creative ideas. i liked about four from ren. i'm breaking it down like this because i'm trying to determine who i think won. in the end, i'd say ren was more consistent though and even his played lines were executed fairly well. but he had a good personal and a few more lines that i felt as though i genuinely liked that didn't really need work. so with that said,

    VOTE - REN
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  9. Yung Money

    Yung Money New Member

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    ren...nice start

    offset eye shit was kinda poorly worded...wasn't really feelin the connection between the two concepts...

    what are receding lines?? means nothing to me really... could've worked it better

    rocky line's cool

    serv line was pretty cool... again, the wording could've been better, but still good

    rundmc line was blah to me... plus it's not exactly contemporary

    and the closer was weak to me... it was like the equivalent of saying "you're a veteran, not"

    seph

    strong opener... nice, current good shit

    same page....ok

    disbarment...lol... took me a while to figure out cause you left 'this' in front of it... kinda threw me off... creative and funny

    creativity line was ehh

    inferiority complex line was ehh because of the wording... concept was there...wasn't flipped well

    kinda cool visual with the closer... not sure whether it's a played concept or not but i haven't read a violent/visual type line in a while so you still score points

    im gonna have to give this to seph... his verse was put together better...concepts were generally executed well... ren had a couple lines that were really let down by his choice of wording and ended up sounding kinda corny

    vote=seph... enjoyable battle
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  10. PERTAiN2LiFE

    PERTAiN2LiFE sheesh the rapper

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    your nameless..idc what ya claiming cut out the shameless braggin
    one hit n' u'll have an Offset Eye that NFL Teams'll use as a formation faggot
    acting like your status is legit.. ya weak an I was the pinnacle first
    Serv only recycled to prove you weren't worth a fuckin original verse

    to

    bet the voters'll disregard everything this fucker had said
    i'll have Q saying this battles 'Over', without upping the thread
    but i agree with you though, thats why you probably feelin nervous
    we on the same page, thats why i see my old concepts in ur verses
    your not even capable of deciphering the thoughts that i say
    he wouldn't know what this 'disbarment', if his lawyer was dropped from the case
    no wonder your known as a joke, you got the wackness factor
    you changed the subject, and turned a contendership into a laughing matter
    probably caught emotions thinkin them bars up for me
    so im'a punch a hole through your chest, and wear your heart on my sleeve

    Vote - Seph

    Ren had hard hitting verse I wasn't feeling some of the concepts.
    Seph had a solid drop with some punchlines that were flipped nicely.
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  11. coil grimely

    coil grimely Tears textcees to tidbits

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    up and until this point did i think Ren was indestructable.
    both competitors were eager, maybe a bit conservative.

    ren had most humor, a consistant flow with aove average punches.
    seph was onpoint with personals and i fealt as though he delivered proper execution this week.
    s some of ren lines seemed not to be relevant with his opponent.
    both have an enormously large amount of creativity tho and i see both taking something from this match

    vote - seph
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  12. 4Matt

    4Matt On the money

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    ya losing popularity..noones appealing to yours its only real if ya sure
    Fuck hair.. your Receding Lines got Men in their Fourtys feeling secure
    your chick can't Box.. can't stop. thats just enough man ya cocky
    she's been working the Corner harder than the Cutman for Rocky

    VS.

    bet the voters'll disregard everything this fucker had said
    i'll have Q saying this battles 'Over', without upping the thread
    but i agree with you though, thats why you probably feelin nervous
    we on the same page, thats why i see my old concepts in ur verses
    your not even capable of deciphering the thoughts that i say
    he wouldn't know what this 'disbarment', if his lawyer was dropped from the case
    no wonder your known as a joke, you got the wackness factor
    you changed the subject, and turned a contendership into a laughing matter


    Overall, both seemed rushed. I thought Ren was gonna take it but after looking at which lines i liked from each, Seph got it. Verse was more consistan and had some good ideas in there.

    Overall, vote Seph.
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  13. I'm Deon

    I'm Deon the guy who fucked ur mom

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    I'm whorin ya stuff, ya not fire so I'm warming you up
    shoulda named yaself Caveat too..to give the league a Warning YOU suck
    solid open

    your nameless..idc what ya claiming cut out the shameless braggin
    one hit n' u'll have an Offset Eye that NFL Teams'll use as a formation faggot

    didnt really grab me, seen these kinda lines about formations, worded good tho

    ya losing popularity..noones appealing to yours its only real if ya sure
    Fuck hair.. your Receding Lines got Men in their Fourtys feeling secure
    nah, not feeling receding, pretty played.

    your chick can't Box.. can't stop. thats just enough man ya cocky
    she's been working the Corner harder than the Cutman for Rocky

    the setup wouldve gave this more impact, punch hit ok

    acting like your status is legit.. ya weak an I was the pinnacle first
    Serv only recycled to prove you weren't worth a fuckin original verse

    solid personal

    its easy to see your shook.. so look, it'll get real if you push me
    if danger comes this kid will Run enough for DMC to feel like a pussy

    nah, not feelin this one

    I thought you were decent. I'm the boss for a reason.. ya ain't able to quit
    ya showed us a Veteran Status.. is somethin we CAN'T label ya wit

    okish close, been done really





    vs

    bet the voters'll disregard everything this fucker had said
    i'll have Q saying this battles 'Over', without upping the thread

    nah, not really feelin this

    but i agree with you though, thats why you probably feelin nervous
    we on the same page, thats why i see my old concepts in ur verses

    heh

    your not even capable of deciphering the thoughts that i say
    he wouldn't know what this 'disbarment', if his lawyer was dropped from the case

    nice, hit just right too

    i hear the talks, people say you'll be killing me ?
    well thats neither here nor there... it's out with your creativity

    solid twist, i've seen people butcher this concept so many times tho

    no wonder your known as a joke, you got the wackness factor
    you changed the subject, and turned a contendership into a laughing matter

    iight

    think he deserve the shine, just quit it clown
    only thing bigger than your inferiority complex, is how many people it could house

    eh, kinda old

    probably caught emotions thinkin them bars up for me
    so im'a punch a hole through your chest, and wear your heart on my sleeve

    nah not feelin this one

    this was a straight battle, i think both had some decent attempts but seph just had slightly fresher material & he hit with maybe a more consistent verse here. it's close though but i think seph took this by a small margin.

    v/seph
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  14. Xquisite

    Xquisite Guest

    I'm whorin ya stuff, ya not fire so I'm warming you up
    shoulda named yaself Caveat too..to give the league a Warning YOU suck
    -- cool opener
    your nameless..idc what ya claiming cut out the shameless braggin
    one hit n' u'll have an Offset Eye that NFL Teams'll use as a formation faggot
    --aight
    ya losing popularity..noones appealing to yours its only real if ya sure
    Fuck hair.. your Receding Lines got Men in their Fourtys feeling secure
    --I liked this
    your chick can't Box.. can't stop. thats just enough man ya cocky
    she's been working the Corner harder than the Cutman for Rocky
    -- I didnt like the set up...but the execution was cool I guess
    acting like your status is legit.. ya weak an I was the pinnacle first
    Serv only recycled to prove you weren't worth a fuckin original verse
    --cool
    its easy to see your shook.. so look, it'll get real if you push me
    if danger comes this kid will Run enough for DMC to feel like a pussy
    --nah
    I thought you were decent. I'm the boss for a reason.. ya ain't able to quit
    ya showed us a Veteran Status.. is somethin we CAN'T label ya wit
    --cool closer

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    bet the voters'll disregard everything this fucker had said
    i'll have Q saying this battles 'Over', without upping the thread
    --this is new...I like it
    but i agree with you though, thats why you probably feelin nervous
    we on the same page, thats why i see my old concepts in ur verses
    -- lol
    your not even capable of deciphering the thoughts that i say
    he wouldn't know what this 'disbarment', if his lawyer was dropped from the case
    --cool
    i hear the talks, people say you'll be killing me ?
    well thats neither here nor there... it's out with your creativity
    --eh
    no wonder your known as a joke, you got the wackness factor
    you changed the subject, and turned a contendership into a laughing matter
    --lol
    think he deserve the shine, just quit it clown
    only thing bigger than your inferiority complex, is how many people it could house
    --not really feelin it..
    probably caught emotions thinkin them bars up for me
    so im'a punch a hole through your chest, and wear your heart on my sleeve
    -- lol, pretty funny concept here.

    well well...as u can tell from my break down. I thought both verses were hot. you both were consistent. its one of those battles where I feel bad not voting for the other, but in this case, I think seph had a tad bit more effectiveness with his verse....close as fuck tho, almost voted the other way...

    I vote for Sephiroth
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  15. E Tha Real

    E Tha Real Real Life

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    I'm whorin ya stuff, ya not fire so I'm warming you up
    shoulda named yaself Caveat too..to give the league a Warning YOU suck
    ^i didn't get it

    your nameless..idc what ya claiming cut out the shameless braggin
    one hit n' u'll have an Offset Eye that NFL Teams'll use as a formation faggot
    ^eh

    ya losing popularity..noones appealing to yours its only real if ya sure
    Fuck hair.. your Receding Lines got Men in their Fourtys feeling secure
    ^cool

    your chick can't Box.. can't stop. thats just enough man ya cocky
    she's been working the Corner harder than the Cutman for Rocky
    ^decent

    acting like your status is legit.. ya weak an I was the pinnacle first
    Serv only recycled to prove you weren't worth a fuckin original verse
    ^ouch

    its easy to see your shook.. so look, it'll get real if you push me
    if danger comes this kid will Run enough for DMC to feel like a pussy
    ^boo

    I thought you were decent. I'm the boss for a reason.. ya ain't able to quit
    ya showed us a Veteran Status.. is somethin we CAN'T label ya wit
    ^ ok

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    bet the voters'll disregard everything this fucker had said
    i'll have Q saying this battles 'Over', without upping the thread
    ^nice

    but i agree with you though, thats why you probably feelin nervous
    we on the same page, thats why i see my old concepts in ur verses
    ^ouch

    your not even capable of deciphering the thoughts that i say
    he wouldn't know what this 'disbarment', if his lawyer was dropped from the case
    ^not feeling

    i hear the talks, people say you'll be killing me ?
    well thats neither here nor there... it's out with your creativity
    ^eh

    no wonder your known as a joke, you got the wackness factor
    you changed the subject, and turned a contendership into a laughing matter
    ^ Lol I'm diggin this

    think he deserve the shine, just quit it clown
    only thing bigger than your inferiority complex, is how many people it could house
    ^decent

    probably caught emotions thinkin them bars up for me
    so im'a punch a hole through your chest, and wear your heart on my sleeve
    ^old concept, worded well tho

    I'm going with Sephiroth, On a personal note I wish I knew who either of you were. I think this was close. Reviewing my anaylsis and re-reading the verse, I had Seph by a line or two each time.

    vote- seph
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  16. Quriosity

    Quriosity Moderator

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    sephiroth wins, 7-1 in votes.
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