~WiThOuT lOvE~*****************

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  1. mocha_licious

    mocha_licious New Member

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    I AM OF NO VALUE TO LIFE
    FOREVER A LONER WITHIN A CROWD
    IT SEEMS THAT EVERYTHING IS AT A STANDSTILL
    WIND BLOWS, BUT NO BREEZE IS FELT
    LEAVES NO LONGER DROP FROM TREES
    COLDNESS SPREADS, WHILE BLANKETS TRY TO WARM UP
    CONTINUALLY EATING, BUT NOTHING HAS FLAVOR
    LEGS SO STRONG, BUT THE KNEES ARE BENT
    STANDING, BUT ALL THE WHILE LEANING
    THERE IS NOTHING TO GIVE AND NOTHING GAINED
    DREAMS HAVE ENDED; NOTHING TO RECALL
    WAILING EMOTIONS REACT INSIDE MY SPIRIT
    FLAILING HANDS REACH OUT BLINDLY
    WHAT KIND OF INSANITY CHOOSES LOVE AS THE PREDATOR AND YOU AS THE VICTIM?
    SAD BUT IT IS REALITY
    BUT IM STILL BREATHING....


    copyright@lre@dy
    test
  2. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    A depressing piece, I must say. Without love was the title and that was basically the whole meaning of what you wrote, clear and an exact definition of "No Love". I thought you had creativity within words and a stern look within the meaning of this. Overall, a very nice piece, indeed. My blessings..
    test
  3. artassociatez

    artassociatez F*ck off

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    I was really feeling this one!!
    nice
    test
  4. vinous

    vinous New Member

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    definitely luvn this piece. everything rang true. nice.
    test
  5. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    Yeah it's reality...just know that the sooner you learn to love yourself, the sooner you can deal with it and it won't matter anymore.
    test
  6. unspoken1

    unspoken1 Revolutionary Wordsmen

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    feeling it...nice piece...haha a bit of a downer but still very very nice
    test
  7. Poetic N Nature

    Poetic N Nature New Member

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    really liked this piece.... 7.5-8/10

    loved the contridiction, the diction, and flow...
    test
  8. mocha_licious

    mocha_licious New Member

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    ty



    ~one love to each of you~
    test
  9. UFO the Phoenix

    UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS!

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    say word

    lil short and deep poem right here

    I feel where you coming from...lots of emotion in this

    Venting out on depression is always a good thing

    I liked this one yo for real

    good job

    keep em coming!

    PEACE AND GODBLESS
    test
  10. SIZZLA

    SIZZLA New Member

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    de[ressing...

    hope-lee, help-less feeling...

    nice.
    test
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