Who I IZ.....

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  1. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    Functional alchoholism
    Mixed with obsession
    For non-earthly possessions...
    21 young Christian years
    Ahead of my peers
    Aging like Wild Irish wine,
    So I get more and more fucked up
    In a short amount of time...
    My mind be like...
    "Hey 'Winston'...let's 'Salem' to the 'Newport'...
    Let's bamboozle 'em at every shoe store"...
    I be like Duracell without the copper top,
    Energetic like Energizer...
    Self pride compromiser...
    Confident poise demonstrater...
    Ghetto like Chic-o-stics and Now & Laters...
    Shit...
    I be who I iz,
    so what's it to you?
    I could be rich,
    But I'ma still eat shrimp
    With my Ramen noodles...
    Pit bull mixed with an alley mutt,
    Damn a poodle...
    still wear the glasses to fool you...
    Who I iz
    Be like lethal injection,
    Or fuckin' them bang-tails
    With no protection...
    Who I iz
    Be like a destination
    With no directions...
    I iz who I iz
    With no question...
    So do me a favor
    And loan me 5 dolluhs. lol


    **Just a little freewrite from about a year and a half ago.
    test
  2. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    "Shit...
    I be who I iz,
    so what's it to you?"


    Digging those lines, mos def. I found this to be more an open mic piece, then anything very poetic. I don't think this was very much like your style at all, but this was a year or so ago, so I understand you elevated quite a lot. Overall, I found your other pieces MUCH better than this, I just want to be honest. Although, a nice piece from homeboy right here. I can't say anything less or more, because that's not what I believe -- Just nice, man. My blessings..
    test
  3. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    Understand Nephew, when I write it's not MEANT to be poetic, it just comes across that way sometime. My mind jumps all over the place so there's no "set pattern" with my writing except that they tend to be umm...unusual I guess you could call it. I don't really have a "style" I just write on a whim.
    test
  4. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    I wanna hear this shit in audio. I feel you about having no style of writing that's why i like reading ya shit, reminds me of mines in a way....


    one luv
    test
  5. mocha_licious

    mocha_licious New Member

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    I LIKED THIS...IT MADE ME LAUGH AND I FEEL U ON THE "POETIC" THEORY.. WHERE AS EVERY THING I DROP DEFINETLEY IS NOT POETIC.........BIG UPS


    ~ONE LOVE ALWAYS~
    test
  6. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    i'm glad u back

    u been on a roll lately man....dropin hot shit.....

    i like this...your freewrites are so creative.....unlike mines...lol

    i could hear this being read at an open mic.......

    ...end was dope..made me laugh....keep doing ya thang...u know

    i'm always reading
    test
  7. Atmosphera

    Atmosphera New Member

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    You Make It Very Hard For Me To Reply

    All I Can Say Is I LOVE Your Work

    Beautiful Honest Piece, This Surely Is Peace
    test
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