when the lights go out.

Discussion in 'Open Mic' started by nO gOoD!, May 20, 2012.

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  1. nO gOoD!

    nO gOoD! Life Music :: Press Play

    Apr 18, 2001

    When the motherfuckin lights go out my 9 come out..
    You aint got time to shout, bitch im wilin out.
    Leaving bastards in caskets after half of the wack shit,
    that they had to come back with, i'll leave em gashed on a mattress
    Soaking and bleedin, cuz they didn't know I was feigning
    choking when breathing cuz I left them open and wheezing..
    Got your crew hoping im leavin, but im not, dope is the reason
    I got you jokers believin that bein broke is in season.
    Im so far underground, ive reached the core of the earh,
    Destroying a verse, deploy and dispurse the story at first.
    Un-paralleled excellence without a weapon kids,
    So think before ya speak, and watch what you steppin with
    Im blessed with this gift, like my name's on christmas lists,
    So ill, kids with cancer wish they were sick as this
    Enough with the cryin and bitchin, i fly with a written..
    My shit's so hot, i know you cant deny i've been bitten.
    Half of the time when im spittin, leavin you cats in a daze,
    Bastards amazed, left in awe when my rap hits the page.
    After the rage of writing a rhyme, your life's on the line
    I could prolly get arrested for holdin the mic at this tme,
    So to rock a show like me, ya gotta drop a flow like me
    If you stop i know you'll see that the cops will know the plea
    Im guilty. Filthy. So commit me. Sick and twisted.
    Im already high on life, you'd probably shit if you seen me lifted
    Once again i rip shit, cause life is rough despite the game
    So when the lights go out, i might pick up the mic cause im insane..
  2. ThatsNotMyName

    ThatsNotMyName The Conquering Lion

    Nov 5, 2011
    Whoah, the lyrics were nice. The delivery was weak, really, that monotone flow that ya'll 3 had it's atrocious.

    I was hoping you to blow the fuck out of me, because when you started you sounded a lot like Tech N9ne, and I was like... DAMN! But then the similarities changed, since after the 4th bar, your delivery was so simple that it was just like bleh.

    Really, work on that delivery, stop just talking the word, rhyme with passion and shit.
    The lyrics were nice, too long with no purpose, no real punchline nor message that was easy to understand, so it just went on and on and that shit gets bored.

    "So ill, kids with cancer wish they were sick as this"

    Why would kids with cancer wish to be as sick as you if you sicker than them?
  3. nO gOoD!

    nO gOoD! Life Music :: Press Play

    Apr 18, 2001
    Thanks for the feedback. I think my delivery has improved since then ;-)

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