~When A Poet Cries~

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  1. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    maybe as i held your hand
    and led you
    to destiny...
    we both were
    lost in love's grip
    as we danced away
    carelessly...
    me drunk off you,
    you
    drunk
    off me...
    "this is how it should be"
    you nonchalantly whispered
    to me...
    if one wish could
    make time
    freeze..
    then grant my request
    and we'll live for this
    moment
    momentarily


    i've been known to be
    a fool...
    and such a fool i was for
    believing in you...

    i'm drunk.... i am
    cant remember shit
    but through blurred visions
    i see you and
    him...
    i see you and
    him...
    i see you and
    him become
    one...through
    missionary...
    just the other day
    i confessed to you
    my love...though
    missionary...

    ironically...very

    i'm all drained
    out...
    flushed 6 away, to keep from blowing
    my brains
    out...
    pleasant memories of me and you
    wont stay
    out...
    tonight i danced in the rain hoping to rinse
    the pain
    out...
    didnt shit work, pulled the
    cocaine
    out...
    suicidal off 2 or 3
    snorts...
    i never cried like this
    and never been
    so hurt...
    i never felt so empty
    and i never so strongly
    remorse...the past
    when you use to
    hold me
    when i was a homeless
    fiend...
    you gave me your all
    and i imbue into you, nothing but
    lifeless dreams...
    you use to hold
    me
    and we were
    so close
    you use to hold me
    everytime i wonder closely
    into a overdose....
    you was my
    god...
    "alexuz i will always
    worship you"
    i guess in your heart
    i always
    torture you...

    i'm crushed without you

    i cant get the sight
    out of my head...
    your legs...
    wrapped around his body
    in our bed...
    the sounds of the heavy breathing
    and you holdin
    his hands...
    both eyes locked into
    one another
    bodies sweating...
    i wish i was dead
    i wish you was dead
    but a wish like that
    is only a
    sin...
    for if it wasnt for you
    i wouldnt be
    living...

    i just wanna die in the ashes of poetry
    i written for you...
    i wanna burn in the flames of love
    i had for you...
    i wanna suffocate in the smoke of passion
    i had for you...
    i just wanna die in the poems
    the poems i wrote
    for you...

    i dont care if it doesnt make
    sense


    the day i confessed my love for you
    was the day you went deaf
    to the words i
    spoke...

    i want to
    die...
    after believin in love (her)
    i have lost all desire
    to fly...

    this is what it sounds like when i poet cries




    a keystyle i just did, about me and my girl. just had to get it off my chest.
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  2. 49th Prophet

    49th Prophet Dark Magic Inferno

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    A Keystyle!? wow....The expression was flawless on this piece, and it was very well written, veryheartfelt, feelin it....keep ya head up

    much love

    peace
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  3. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    damn malik im sorry... this was so strong and ... sorry
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  4. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    extremely well written for a keystyle, The emotion was great and strong. Good piece


    stay up, much love, peace
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  5. misspimp

    misspimp a.k.a KATURAH

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    this was beautiful;!! I wanna qoute something...but i loved every single line (And I truly mean this) from begining to end!! I was reading it in dis belief...because it was so amazing....full of raw, untames emotion....

    mad love
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  6. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    damn malik!

    powerful piece....gonna have to tell me more bout this.........

    your keystyles are a lot better then some of the shit i sit down and take time to do...good job....always enjoy th eread
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  7. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    thanks for showing love
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  8. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    When I pick my jaw up off the ground, I gotta have a word with you...you never disappoint me in your writings...but this, by far...is my favorite piece in the entire Realm...
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  9. ThisMiss

    ThisMiss Guest

    wow... im um lol speechless... like always after reading ur poems...um lol...im sorry, im really really sorry to read that... i mean... its amazing... ur very talented....
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  10. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    damn malik......there were SO many lines in here that had me like WOW......but
    "i just wanna die in the ashes of poetry
    i written for you..."
    ^^^
    that really stuck out to me.....

    i havent talked to you in a minute....we have catching up to do.....also we really need to collab......

    LOVE your writing....and youre the one who got me to start writing again [heart]
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  11. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    aww thank u feme
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  12. Nebulaz

    Nebulaz fear God, not man

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    I cant express or show love anymore or with anyother words than they all already used or said.
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  13. !Mpulse

    !Mpulse Who is really illy ill???

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    damn, i felt that like it actually happen to or somethin... nice nice wording, made me almost cry.... hope everythings goin good with you man, stay up
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  14. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    thanks for the love, i really appreciate it.

    last up
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  15. skandelous_lala

    skandelous_lala back from the dead

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  16. eatemup

    eatemup New Member

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    no doubt WOW this was off the hook dopeness, awsome
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  17. Atmosphera

    Atmosphera New Member

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    Understandably And Without A Doubt Greatness
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  18. *Princess*

    *Princess* skantless bitch

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    i've been known to be
    a fool...
    and such a fool i was for
    believing in you...

    ^^felt that like way way to many times....
    loved the emotion loved the whole piece great job
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  19. Craccer_Jacc

    Craccer_Jacc SudAnillyst

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    thats was one of the best pieces i have read all year yo... much respect ... and i do know the feeling
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  20. Dark_Angel

    Dark_Angel Dark_Angel

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    really great stuff here, deep...i thought i had replied cos i checked this out when it was first posted, but either way this was definately a nice peice...good work
    test
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