Whats Up?

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  1. dsp2k5

    dsp2k5 Dime Sack Pimp

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    Hook:
    Everytime I roll through the city, I'm thinking 'What's Up?
    Am I the only one left? Are all my homies locked up?
    To the laws: ain't nobody trying to call calls bluff ..
    So please put them tazer guns the fuck up ...
    Everywhere I go I'm thinking 'What's Up' ...
    Been constantly watching these times change wondering What's Up?

    Verse:
    What the fuck is wrong with the world anymore?
    I see dikes with hair shorter than Demi Moore
    In G.I. Jane. And I ain't straight? You tipsy whores
    Get divorced then turn into slit lickers ..
    Then get pissed when this dick gets the slit quicker
    They want to be honest today, tomorrow a big stripper
    A quick sniffer fucking coke dealers sniffing too to get his prick stiffer
    It figures, but not long ago they was just passing weed
    And just cuz Em went sober don't mean we have to be
    What's that mean? Don't be asking me ...
    Especially with that attitude,show me gratitude for even rapping, G.
    A catastrophe in this atmosphere ...
    People killing people to be the baddest rapper here
    if its like that, I wanna be the whackest rapper here
    I've had my tears, Ive dried my eyes, seeing what its all comming to ..
    I should have left rhyming be since we heard Mother Goose
    Rum and Juice busting through
    my system while I'm hidden tryin to duck a truce
    Cut me loose, I'll try to save the innocent
    I know its the cops job, but they who killing em
    Gangsters still playing games ... lil kids still mimmick em
    Homeless here and we're saving villages ...
    I ain't really feeling it, but I'm not really intitled to an opinion ...
    I'm gettin looked to to fix it, but who is the villan..
    The media like you one week then move back to Gene Simmons
    And you been outnumbered now if you used to be Christian ..
    no kidding

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    Damn ...
    Supposed to be more but I don't guess I saved it ... Damn ... gotta ask myself what's up now ... lol
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  2. LyricalMaze

    LyricalMaze The Scottish Warrior

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    Thought the content has been a bit over done but I picked up a nice flow and some of the lines had attitude. The "media" line was nice, shifting media opinion is a joke anyway.

    " know its the cops job, but they who killing em
    Gangsters still playing games ... lil kids still mimmick em"
    Dope two lines.

    Sorry I haven't given you much here man, I did enjoy it though.
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  3. dsp2k5

    dsp2k5 Dime Sack Pimp

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    No, your good homie .. thanks for the feed, I really mean it ...
    And your right. The story there has been played. That's part of my problem lately ... not so much as writers block, but topic idea block I guess .. lol
    Thx again
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  4. INKrypt

    INKrypt New Member

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    i wasn't feeling it too much at the start, not with respect to the technical aspects of it - just the subject matter, but that's just me.. it picked up at the end though.

    "Homeless here and we're saving villages ...
    I ain't really feeling it, but I'm not really intitled to an opinion ..."

    that was what stood out most to me haha

    overall a very solid drop
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  5. dsp2k5

    dsp2k5 Dime Sack Pimp

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    Thx for the feedback

    I been waiting for a solid idea to hit me so I can go with it ... waiting for something fresh and good at the same time and I'm having no luck, but I'm being patient lol
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  6. CALIFORNIA

    CALIFORNIA New Member

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    the verse was good..i really liked it..good emotion in it, man!
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  7. dsp2k5

    dsp2k5 Dime Sack Pimp

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    Thanks homie ... PM me if you wanna collab
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  8. Out Write

    Out Write New Member

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    Wasn't that good.. Lol.. Be honest people, hes not going to improve if you keep telling him hes amazing when he writes like that...
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