What's Greater Than Gold To Me

Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by Gemini_TwIIn, Jun 5, 2003.

Thread Status:
Not open for further replies.
  1. Gemini_TwIIn

    Gemini_TwIIn a.k.a. Sydephex

    Joined:
    Jun 5, 2003
    Messages:
    61
    Hey wassup y'all, this will be my first piece dropped here...could use some feedback..


    Whats greater than gold to me
    no 1 he's the G..O..drop the L..keep the D
    no 2 Can't forget about friends and family
    Last of all its basketball i'ma ball til the death of me

    If it wasn't for Allah I wouldn't be here today
    I love you mom you've taught me well and showed me the way
    Sometimes it gets rough, but I still keep rhyming to keep tough
    Michael and Refaya y'all my best buds that'll be till the everlasting end
    Lisa and Nora, you two are like my sisters you have done so much for me
    My younger brother Anouar, he's eleven plus 1
    Can't wait til he get older so i can take them out and have lots of fun
    God what am i gonna do,my love life stinks like poo
    But i still got ma basketball come challenge me i'll shake you
    in one step like AI cuz its all about fundamentals and basics
    You isn't gonna touch the ball if we play make-it-or-take-it
    Back from the sports talk to the love talk
    Grandma I love you so much please don't leave me
    Like Grandpa did hope your having fun in heaven
    Just to have you 2 in my heart is such a blessing

    Whats greater than gold to me
    no 1 he's the G..O..drop the L..keep the D
    no 2 Can't forget about friends and family
    Last of all its basketball i'ma ball til the death of me

    Nouredine i know its hard being a dad, but you ain't bad at it
    I Love you even though we've been through ups and downs, smiles and frowns
    If this world was mine it would be all my friends and family's too
    Cuz I love every last one of you, and y'all deserve it as much as I do
    Allah I thank you for giving me this ability to rhyme
    I thank all my friends and family for loving me and keeping me from doing a crime
    I pray for every last one of y'all everyday and -night
    And if i ever pass away this one will always be here and it'll shine bright
    test
  2. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

    Joined:
    May 25, 2003
    Messages:
    869
    When I saw the title of this piece, first thing that came to mind was 'another female dedication drop'. Although, it surprised me and was more of religious attempt to specify God as the greatest influence, etc. to ever grace the soul of others, the mind of others.. The hearts of others, na'mean? You spoke of family, friends, everything, but overall nothing came closer to you, then God, which I found very heart felt and beautiful. Keep the pen steady and welcome to the realm! My blessings..
    test
  3. Gemini_TwIIn

    Gemini_TwIIn a.k.a. Sydephex

    Joined:
    Jun 5, 2003
    Messages:
    61
    thanx for your feedback man, appreciate it...could I get some more feedback?
    test
  4. lpoet

    lpoet POET

    Joined:
    Oct 20, 2002
    Messages:
    12,678
    welcome to the realm

    this was just 2 deep

    i loved it

    was a long read and usually i cant stand long stuff

    but this really held my attention

    u most def got skills.....i felt at first like TR that u were gonna talk bout a women...loved how u switched it up on me...this is very different from the stuff i've been readin in here lately and i like it...hope to see more from you

    up for more replies....just know that in order to get love in here u gonna have to spread some yourself

    peeps some other cats pieces

    up
    test
  5. Infonation

    Infonation Info for the Nation

    Joined:
    Jun 3, 2003
    Messages:
    1,016
    It was straight, you talked bout what was close to you and i'll give you props for dat. And that hook was pretty creative. Your cool wit me. All praise to Allah ^ One.
    test
  6. unspoken1

    unspoken1 Revolutionary Wordsmen

    Joined:
    Nov 23, 2002
    Messages:
    758
    i liked it.....your a good writer keep dropping things in the realm kiddo
    test
Thread Status:
Not open for further replies.

Share This Page

Users Viewing Thread (Users: 0, Guests: 0)