whats at the bottom of this bottle?

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  1. j$crILLa

    j$crILLa ~$crillVille~

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    replied to REALMS< BHITIAH< QUOTIVE./...


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    as i sip this bottle, i begin to ponder, ponder deeply
    what am i searching for?
    each drink brings more intoxication
    each drink i get more satisfaction
    that im close to the answer
    but what answer
    whats at the bottom of this bottle?
    here i sit and write this poem
    and here i sit drinking the 40 ounce
    which is helping me more? - i dont know
    problems can be solved-
    as the alchol is desolved...
    consumed and drank
    i get drunk and i thank...
    the makers at the brewery
    are they foolin' me?
    or are they savin' me?
    i dont know but im payin' thee.
    workin all day and makin money
    only to spend it
    never to lend it
    im sick of people
    all people who lie and mis-use trust
    i tend not to give no fuck
    i keep thinkin
    as i keep drinkin
    and i still i havent found an answer
    so i finish one bottle
    not to find anything
    on to the next bottle
    still- still searching
    this is my mind drifting
    this is my late night drinking
    i drink to ease stress
    and it works, so its not worthless
    this is real, this is me
    im an alcoholik
    im whatever u wanna call it
    im done writing, but not done sipping
    well im still thinking
    and this bottle im still drinking
    hoping just hoping
    i can find answers on the bottom.....
    of the very next bottle......


    peace
    test
  2. ChyllTyrant

    ChyllTyrant AmIEternalOrAnEternalist?

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    interesting little study of a bottle. could have reached a further potential, in fact you may have just inspired me to write about a little drinking... but since writing comes for experience, i may have to just go out and get drunk tonight.

    no doubt.

    PEACE
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  3. j$crILLa

    j$crILLa ~$crillVille~

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    thanks man
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  4. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    Yea there were some real nice questions asked, kind of an interesting perspective on drinking, kind of just reflecting on the goods and th bads. Question the whole purpose of drinking all together. Feeling this piece very nice concept.


    Stay Up, Much Love, Peace
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  5. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    Good piece man. I have a slight drinking problem myself, so I can pretty much see where you're coming from with this. Hard for alot of people to acknowledge that fact that they have a problem. You took it to the depth with this.

    one luv
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  6. j$crILLa

    j$crILLa ~$crillVille~

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    i love me a few beers everynight


    and thanks for the views
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  7. nathedawg

    nathedawg New Member

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    yeah i have the same problem, but im in the army and shit so i have to keep it cool most the time, but the urge for a drink is awful splendid!! MGDizzle!!! good read by the way
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  8. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    damn i think this may be the best piece i've read from you

    love the title...it made me think of some shit to write latter on..

    i can find answers on the bottom.....
    of the very next bottle......

    very nice ending

    impressive
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  9. babyangel17

    babyangel17 New Member

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    yo i felt that lol even tho i anit a big drinker tho this piece was good just thought id give u your props ya kno peace
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  10. j$crILLa

    j$crILLa ~$crillVille~

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    thAnks everyone
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  11. RealMS

    RealMS Ne te quaesiveris extra

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    Dang that's nice J. You didn't flip flop to different things as I would have, and it stayed on point, always something different to think about when I was reading it. It's like the beginning was like the end, vice versa. Good job.
    -Peace
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  12. j$crILLa

    j$crILLa ~$crillVille~

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    thanks homie
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  13. Subconcious

    Subconcious CiPrIoLa DyNaStY

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    I really liked the story this told although I am going to be imagining this damn poem the next time I am drinking. lol. Good write though brah.

    ^Luv
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  14. nathedawg

    nathedawg New Member

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    beer is fine and dandy!! so is candy: but liquor is quicker!! haha
    what is at the bottom of the bottle? that is really a question that will never be answered i believe its within someone strong enuff, to find out and not tell any motherfucking body!! jking good read dawg uppin fo ya
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  15. j$crILLa

    j$crILLa ~$crillVille~

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    thanks yallz fo rizzle
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  16. GirlThug

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    skull skull skull skull
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  17. Black Liquid

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    i feel you on that. alcohol is like a noose though, if you take the noose off before you fall you wont get hung up. the question is the answer.
    -Liq
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  18. Psycho69

    Psycho69 A Soul Born In Verse

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    Nice poem.. I can't say I can really relate to it though. But, I enjoyed it.
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    j$crILLa ~$crillVille~

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  20. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    yeah, agree with lpoet here, cause this was quite motivating...I don't have a drinking problem fortunately, just like to act like I do, lol...Quick to say that I need a drink, but I don't drink all too often, only about 4 times a year, lol...But, this piece was dope, a few people that I know have issues with just the same thing...dope drop...
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