What am I?

Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by Infonation, Jun 6, 2003.

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  1. Infonation

    Infonation Info for the Nation

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    My circular disk are electricly bound in the depths of the earth.

    This vision I have threw these eyes are illuminating threw the blackness.

    Cautions ring when citizens are ready to proceed.

    I survive, not being lonely, when people give metal and copper with multiplicity.

    Tatoos of artist are on my older sisters.

    My motive, only to serve and help others.

    I open my doors for all, accepting the rich, poor, and blind.

    Never tired, I speed threw all hours of the night.

    Coming to a standstill I screech and holler.

    My habitat is all around the world in the most populated cities.
    test
  2. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    nice drop

    def like this better than your first piece in here

    I open my doors for all, accepting the rich, poor, and blind.

    dope line...wish everyone could

    wish this was a bit longer...feel like u coulda streched it out a bit....

    nice though

    keep doing ya thang.......if you get a chance peep my piece called her testimony her shame...
    test
  3. unspoken1

    unspoken1 Revolutionary Wordsmen

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    hmmmmmm nice piece i liked it.....keep doing what you do
    test
  4. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    Better metaphors in this one, decent imagery, even though imagery is your best aspect from my point of view. Other than that, the topic was onpoint and you basically described yourself in and out, it seems. Overall, decent and straight to the point type of piece, which I always will respect, even though on occasion, I like my hidden meaning and need to know what you really are talking about at the end. Nice drop, family. My blessings..
    test
  5. L-M-INT

    L-M-INT New Member

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    NICE.. KEEP IT UP
    test
  6. Infonation

    Infonation Info for the Nation

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    Thanx fo da feedback bloods. i'll try to return the favor.^One
    test
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