WEST: Atheist & Formal Logic V Vigil & Claus V Pent uP & SteveThaGreat

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  1. DiC GeTs GuLLy

    DiC GeTs GuLLy Hello

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    TOPICS: http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=1006008
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  2. Annihilation

    Annihilation CLAUS HOUSE

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    1-http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=1006011
    2-http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=1006521
    3-http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=1006016
    4-http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=1006049
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  3. Pent uP

    Pent uP I'd Like to Fight Ten Men

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    Shaking and drenched wet, glass tool nearly breaking from tension
    Pacing these ten steps, circling with hate in ascension
    Making attempts in stabbing the shank in his tendons
    Scrapin the henchmen as pool cues are raised with agression
    Strikes are exchanged and weapons clash as attacks slide within range
    Mike is then phased when sticks snap over the side of his brain
    Psyched by no pain he tumbles over the bar, sighing each smack
    while he reacts by slicing a fellow with the knife that he grabs
    Grinding teeth crack as a kick sends him into the emergency exit
    He's surely dependant on running, but these persons fiend merit
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    He falls and sees Eric still approaching him with passionate hatred/
    spectators sat in amazement as a drug dealer battered his favorite/
    thick blood splattered the pavement, it was enough to make you sick/
    as his face was hit, Mike's blood gushed and he felt tough takin risks
    he slashed but his shank had missed, so he ran to the back of the alley/
    Eric chased him, wondering why suddenly.. this faggot was smiling/
    Mike grabbed at it mildly, slowly aimed, and threw the knife at his throat/
    Lifeless is hope, as mike decapitates the man in the sight of his scope/
    Sloppily daunted, bloodied from his former company's sauces/
    Pocketing rocks quick before he ran home white like he's possibly haunted/

    and though the body was blindly disposed, Mike got what he wanted.../
    Bloody, he's taunted, so he runs to get cleaned in his mahogany faucet
    Doors slam and get locked, awaking the house with horrible head shock
    snortin his wet rock while family knocks and yells, more than regret's stocked
    He calms the fam, wired as hell, "your all tired and swell" Here comes the scam
    "Speed off my man, and hun, I'll be in bed after I read on the can"
    Soon as they slept, he'd get out his cokespoon and play wrecked
    doomed in ways, yet, careless and rich he'd continue in his gloomy basement
    Killing gay songs, building ••••e racks, cleaning and itching for rock
    Shrilling dissolved, the night ended and the morning found him stiff as a log

    Every sweet has its sour; every evil its good.
    Ralph Waldo Emerson

    "Michael was prudent and great, rich beyond his affluent estate/
    His legacy muted by fate he must have been brewing irrate/
    it wasn't a stupid mistake, he was large beyond the weight scale/
    and now he calmly lays pale, because he longed to take rails../
    Had we only taken witness, we would pause his bagel business/
    pay millions to make a wishes, to spare the mile he exchanged with inches/
    Lately he was acting su••••ious, but I put it past intuition
    I figured he was lacking upliftement, I didnt see him snatched from my vision..."/

    Take problems that phase in like wealth that you have to change for yourself
    and contrast to Coke, placebo's mass plateu where you feel to amazing for help
    Apply to his case, and though it may feel sweet, it supplies your distaste
    To different peeps it might be bittersweet just by examplifying his race
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  4. claushouse

    claushouse pass weed & collect 200$

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    Liberty Stands Still

    by Vigil and Claushouse



    Liberty Stands Still
    As landfills amass like wealth yet people pass for currency
    A mass recurring dream that seems so unseemly
    As the seams on an obscene past unravel faster than Dan Rather’s career
    Broadcasts emit fear while Border Patrol gathers the rear
    Spattered across the frontier
    A front mirror shatters as bullets splatter like tears
    Mexicans scatter as Alabama’s Alma Mater appears
    Their vehicle commandeered
    By divine intervention - American “volunteers”
    Their message falling on deaf ears
    In this odd mess of hysteria
    And the message is clear:
    God blessed America.
    Liberty Stands Still
    As an African Nation’s emancipation from mental slavery
    Can’t fuel a Harley-Davidson
    Or pave way for incremental wages that are scarcely savory
    Far from bravery GWB learns his ABC’s through HIV
    As he Abstains from Being Faithful to Condoms’ effectivity
    Condemning sexual promiscuity while bushisms spread like disease
    Without reprieve, his Concerto relieving funds so fundamental to Sudanese
    (The GOP can get elected hunting fundamentalist sleaze)
    But you didn’t hear it from me
    As we practice avoidance tenancies turning on the TV
    While the worlds in Jeopardy
    Italian-American Names for 500
    I’ll take Geno with a side of apathy
    Alongside my high-cholesterol Freedom Fries so I can die peacefully.

    Our own people seeping below sea level in the Theatre of the Absurd
    The water meters obscured as cannon fodder’s left uninsured
    As the Right procures land sites to better their 1/3rd.
    So if your fifty fuckin’ feet under water,
    FEMA’s your new four letter F-Word.
    Liberty Stands Still
    As she watches hope wash away in a dome and a grave
    Realizing Atlantis was the true home of the brave
    When the storm rode the airwaves, the poor were without a paddle
    Forced to sit out in the battle that took their lives like they were cattle
    For days white flags were burned on rooftops
    Leaving only loud cries to signal food drops
    As a nation stood in shock
    After being told looters were scooping scooters n' shooting cops
    Bodies float on remote grave sites as the people wait denied
    The West arrived late, and no registration or dates applied.
    Liberty Stands Still
    As sons and daughters awakened to a neocon invasion
    That staged an attack to willfully dominate through mass persuasion
    It was a matter of days before she saw who really had the terms
    As Liberty had her worst fears confirmed
    She wasn't prepared, unaware you can buy a fight
    I guess the far right was just outta her eye sight
    As the head of state wouldn't dare to tell so he spared help and said a farewell
    As he failed to share any grace with his will so curious george didn't fair well.
    'Countless deaths' to cover up the real number of dead
    People left out to hang when they hung on by a thread
    The Big Easy's big picture is hard to paint, Betsy also charged the state
    And Katrina shared her's mother's fate but this Big Girl had a larger plate
    But this hurricane didn't star Washington;
    It cracked down a different Watergate.

    Which is why its fate was briefly deplored before being ignored
    New Orleans an inconvenient truth almost spoofing Al Gore
    As more troops ship from our shores to stand for democracy
    While our own borders are ignored in the land of hypocrisy
    A primarily African-American city’s still under attack
    But the bills that get backed are for rebuilding Iraq
    Yet the U.S. Army’s disproportionately black
    And the lack of Hispanics?
    DON’T PANIC
    The data’s scalable
    ‘Cuz suddenly FEMA stands for Find Every Mexican Available
    Liberty Stands Still
    Left to rest on its laurels, wondering why there’s no end in sight
    Three stories collapse and mend into one plight
    My friends, listen tight
    I assure you there’s no prejudice implied
    It’s so obscenely overt
    You need only open your eyes.





    They always say time changes things, but you actually have to change them yourself.
    Andy Warhol
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  5. Pent uP

    Pent uP I'd Like to Fight Ten Men

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    uppin

    oh yeha i posted drunk so

    Me-1st
    Steve-2nd
    Me-3rd
    Steve-finishes
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  6. Got Life?

    Got Life? Resident Megalomaniac

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    Pent & Steve...eh...ok so the flow started off cool, trying to do a spruced up scheme with more syllable rhymes, but these bars seemed to drag on forever and the action throughout them wasn't really pulling me in...it felt like I was just reading this piece and at the end I was like...umm ok...what a lame approach to the topics provided...like at first the whole action going on, but then he gets in...rails some blow and dies...meh...

    Vigil & Claus...so normally I get bored with political pieces and truth be told this was the case here as well...It might be my hangover, but this just started being boring about 1/2 way through...I guess i'm not a big fan of topicals for this because if they're not rapid firing rhymes to keep me reading I just zone out...mechanically wise though the piece was great and I think you guys did a good job with the direction you took with your topic...

    vote = Vigil & Claus ; more creative and a more polished verse....better chemistry between you guys too...

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  7. SteveThaGreat

    SteveThaGreat Zeus

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  8. Vigil

    Vigil Im infinite consciousness

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  9. Atheist

    Atheist Storyteller

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    why was my verse deleted?
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  10. Fold

    Fold *NEW* DIC - just add gay!

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    Pent up and Steve, this seems like one person wrote this from the way it's told and the pace of flow that's kept steady. Doesn't seem like a collab, but it's very well written. I liked the crazy opening with the bar fight and extremely detailed graphic violence made it nice to read and exciting to reach the ending, but the ending wasn't that way at all. Wife and kids, building something, edited out or something, doing lines of drugs to build it. Weird shit, kinda freaky, but kinda cool too. Unexpected as it starts at a fast pace and ends on a slow one of a regular dyfunctional family type. This was pretty cool. I liked it. No crazy twist or anything like that, just a weird day for the family man/drug dealing killer. Lol Nicely done

    Vigil and Claushouse, this was a nicely poetic justice type of piece as it gave pollitical satire on how our government treats its own citizens so horribly, but is so quick to rebuild and improve other nations with tax dollars taken from American's citizens. The hypocrtical oath kinda theme has been done to death, but I still think this was well portrayed. Flow seemed long in some places, but the wit taken was nicely directed and I liked that.

    Tough choice again. A creative piece with character development and twist of no twist, kinda comical against a politically motivated piece on our society's governing powers that was well told and nicely formatted. I think the creative piece got my attention more and I enjoyed the read a little more.

    Vote Pent Up and Steve

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  11. Annihilation

    Annihilation CLAUS HOUSE

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    yo wtf is with that IV shit, if DIC, pent's boy and mod buddy, is gonna vote in this battle than IV can fucking vote in here. Especially with the lack of fucking votes
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  12. Pent uP

    Pent uP I'd Like to Fight Ten Men

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  13. Vigil

    Vigil Im infinite consciousness

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    This match better not end in a tie.

    We either lose or win, if the match doesn't get resolved tonight then extend the voting till tommorow night.
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    Well, what the hell, I guess I gotta vote on this one too. That makes 7 or something lol. I don't know man. Pent & Steve, you all pretty much went rhyme crazy. For the most part, it was pretty impressive. I'm going to be honest, I am about 90% certain only one person wrote this lol. I'm not holding it against you because I don't know it's true, but every single clue in the world hints that way. Regardless of that, Like I said, the rhymes were pretty nice. The flow of the piece was pretty solid. It wasn't the easiest piece to get through, but I could see the flow within each line so that was straight. The story itself was a little crazy. Not really my cup of tea. I'm undecided about the way you all presented the story. On one hand, I didn't really start to get any idea what the point was until about the second to last stanza. At the same time, at least it did finally click a bit. I don't know. Maybe I'm just tired. The last line about exemplifying his race, what race was he, I don't remember it ever being mentioned. Am I to assume he's white because of the photo or am I missing something. Just checking. By the way, the bagel business reference later on was pretty dope. Ok, enough of that, Vigil & Claus, I definitely liked the repetition and the way each section added a little bit of a twist to the previous one. I definitely didn't see the final stanza, I'm not sure why, it seems obvious now that I think about it, but I honestly hadn't ever thought of that particular issue in that way before. It's pretty fucked up really but it's absolutely true lol. People have done Katrina shit so much, but this was a pretty original take on the whole thing. The rhymes weren't quite as abundant as the other piece, but I thought they seemed well thought out regardless. The flow was pretty solid too. Again, different from the first piece, but nice in it's own way. I'll just sum it up with this, I got more out of reading Claus & Vigil's battle than I did from reading Steve & Pent's. I liked the rhymes in the latter, but the message of the former and it's seamless transitions between stories, and then subsequent tying up of them, was pretty damn dope, and something I haven't seen done well in a while. [/hide]
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  15. Annihilation

    Annihilation CLAUS HOUSE

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  16. Pent uP

    Pent uP I'd Like to Fight Ten Men

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    on top of his LEAGUE requirments, that would be ALL THE MATCHES

    thank you
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  17. Pent uP

    Pent uP I'd Like to Fight Ten Men

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    Honestly We got jewed here, but thats my opinoin

    2-1 votecount

    Vigil and Clause advance
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