[Week 9] [Championship] C. L. Kross (4-1) vs 2. Blitz_kreig (5-2)

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  1. T.a.C

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    WEEK 9



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  2. Blitz_krieg

    Blitz_krieg SAY WHA.........

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    check check.. mic check .. a one-two a-one-two
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  3. Lotty

    Lotty Young Amazin'

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    Lookin dumbfound, another average day, bummed out
    Suns down, had to wait, when my boysll come 'round
    A thud pound crash the gate, Vince come an run wild
    Breath wheezin, chest heavin with his tongue out
    Lookin strung out, red face brighter than a duelies light
    Losin sight from catchin breath runnin through the night
    His mood was too excited that exude delight
    Glued, I bite
    But before I ask, hes burstin out about a jewelery heist
    You see, his daddys at the precinct as a lead detective
    Someone just went on a spree, from the rings to necklace
    Thats why V is breathless, the culprit fleed detectives
    He tried to plea
    told em he threw everything in the trees, he wreckless
    They aint leaked it yet, even though its probably just
    Some bullshit to fool kids, they gotta discuss
    Media would have em in the woods choppin it up
    Scared somebody might find it. Somebody is us
    Talkin it big. Sounds good, but walkin its diff.
    All but convinced, he draggin me along for the shit
    Head startin it quick, I spot a sparkle an glint
    A bag full of cash that made me scoff at the jems
    Soon enough the shock wheres off of me when
    We heard the cop cars closin in awfully quick
    Darted wit Vince. Targeted by his father, the pig
    Crossin the bridge soon as we come off of the ridge
    Comin from the other side, shit, its Ross an his friends
    They said give up the money or Vince goes off of a bridge
    Vince spit in his face an said, "Toss the bag off of the cliff"
    I was just rememberin the days.... Ah we were kids
    *Gasp*
    Woke up from a day dream at the side of your bed...
    Sighin, I said, I wish that you'd decide what is best...
    Silently wept, Im hopin for either a sign in his chest
    Or that liein in bed, he himselfll choose to slide into death
    Cryin, depressed. Tryin to hide it my best
    Hide from the stress, got a blunt Im lightin the cess
    Try an confess shit you neva knew to lighten my chest
    Why I digress from the topic of this frightenin mess
    You liein wit Death while I sit here an remember the days
    From treadin the tank to startin real shit an sit in the waves
    'Member when we were lames? Down memories lanes
    When we found those jewels, that bully tried to get us to break
    You never broke. Life or death, you never know
    You spit on him, I bet youd spit on this doc if you eva woke
    You wouldnt wanna live your life hangin on a tether rope
    Layin like a vegetable, youd probly rather let it go
    .... But who am I? The village idiot from a foolish tribe
    Only God can judge me, the same must be for my dude who fight
    You were too full of life for your plug get pulled tonight
    If its meant to be, Im sure the lordll definitely do it right
    But, wait... what if I was chosen to escort him to the gates
    Then if I refused to do my duty, Id be shorting him his fate
    Pulled the plug, life support aborted him, escaped
    Flatline bouncin from his core, through the ward an to the grave

    'Lifeless Support'
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  4. Blitz_krieg

    Blitz_krieg SAY WHA.........

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    Write a verse dissin your self

    January twenty-seventh, nineteen eighty six
    My mother pushed my out the womb along with eighty other bricks
    Twirlin me in the air like “look my baby does tricks”
    That’s when my slick ass slipped.. and broke my umbilical cord
    Flew out the window… and hit the hood of a Ford
    The driver dropped me off at the store with charges I couldn’t afford
    But way before.. I ever started verbally murkin me..
    I was 3, biting thermometers.. purposely drinkin the mercury
    Its absurd-to-see..… the perve in me
    Turn on the t.v and whack it.. to open heart surgery
    They call me Blitz but I don’t chase the sack like laruence taylor
    But im two shotgun weddings away from owning my own trailer
    Ask anyone from the vegetables to the extraterrestrial
    IM a walking talking extra special spectacle with speckled testicles
    Ill wreck-a-fool but right now im killin my self
    Chiks never really been into me there were just feeling the wealth
    I was dumb rich..until I put it all on the clippers..but they never won shit
    Now I cant even get a dance from a stripper… with one tit
    Whats funnier my ass always broke with no bread?
    Or me huffing gas, trying to put Spreewells on my moped?
    Im off the hinges when it comes to being horrendous
    Catch me at the park, bengein on benches with six broken syringes
    My stench is.. relentless when it hits your nostrils
    It could make one of the Lords apostles turn hostile
    Im broke and sober so once again I feel like croakin over
    before I do that I gotta go home and choke my lil soldier/
    im used to smokin boulders and snortin coke till im blue in the face
    and returnin to retirement homes lookin for someone new to embrace/
    who cares if she has no teeth in her mouth and her tits don’t fit in her blouse?
    just as long she starches my underwear before I leave the house/
    I was born in the south so it turns out most the chicks I’ve dated
    happen to be related...But fuck you... incest is underrated /
    but im tired of usein my hand so im cruisin the land
    lookin to get a blow job for twenty aluminum cans
    I love fuckin the chicks whos always turnin tricks
    But that’s reason every time I piss I get a burnin dick
    But when im dying to fuck im always relyin on sluts
    cuase they don’t care that I have a tiny wanker with giant nuts
    but I heard chicks dig guys who can really make em laugh
    so I always show em my dick and try to do basic math
    I try to take the path of just another rapper chasin laughter-B
    But the only thing that’s funny is the disease named after me
    Im a natural born embarrassment… I cant stay low-key
    Even though im so short… I can pose for trophies
    Yeah you know me… and you know-ya-mans-tight
    But I bet you didn’t know I’ve slept with a transvestite
    I tried to take her to springer but they said I was too trashy
    And you would think that I’ve been cremated with the way im so ashy
    Far from classy I think my brain has a tumor in it
    But this is the way I chose to live.. hope you found some humor in it
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  5. Shadow

    Shadow Kotaro's Master

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    lotty - nicely written, i loved the imagery in this piece and the rhyming was off the hook...I thought u used internal rhyming very well(which seems to be your strong point). I thought the middle of the verse(describing the heist), i thought had a choppy flow but it was still a good read.


    fave line -

    "Silently wept, Im hopin for either a sign in his chest
    Or that liein in bed, he himselfll choose to slide into death
    Cryin, depressed. Tryin to hide it my best
    Hide from the stress, got a blunt Im lightin the cess
    Try an confess shit you neva knew to lighten my chest
    Why I digress from the topic of this frightenin mess"


    Blitz - lol hilarious verse...I thought you had alot of bright points here and thought your rhyming was very good.. Your flow was a lil choppy but your rhymes were hilarious and on point

    fave line -

    "But way before.. I ever started verbally murkin me..
    I was 3, biting thermometers.. purposely drinkin the mercury
    Its absurd-to-see..… the perve in me
    Turn on the t.v and whack it.. to open heart surgery"
    ^^dead

    Good battle...My vote goes to Lotty..his verse was written slightly better and more rounded in the lyrical department. Blitz verse was hilarious tho lol he's gonna be champ soon lol

    Vote Lotty
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  6. MC Guttso

    MC Guttso Fingers in Pies

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    L.Kross - First impressions are important. Your introduction was mediocre this week in terms of your usual rhyme scheme, the "flow" was shaky from how I read it. It just seemed a bit blander and simple than your usual stuff - seems like your creativity got stunted to a certain extent this week e.g. rhyming detective with detectives - usually you'd come up with better wording IMO. Although I did like the line: "You see, his daddys at the precinct as a lead detective/ Someone just went on a spree, from the rings to necklace"
    The development from there was smooth and the rhyme schemes you used were definitely consistent and top notch e.g. "Woke up from a day dream at the side of your bed...
    Sighin, I said, I wish that you'd decide what is best...
    Silently wept, Im hopin for either a sign in his chest"
    you had some good imagery too. But not one of your best showings, but still a strong verse that sets a good standard for the RSTL.

    Blitz - This was light-hearted, creative and quite funny in a lot of places, not to mention the rhyme schemes were fucking outstanding, e.g. "Ask anyone from the vegetables to the extraterrestrial/IM a walking talking extra special spectacle with speckled testicles
    Ill wreck-a-fool but right now im killin my self"
    and all the other hilarious lines of having a small dick, to fucking old women, to having no money. I was liking it! Really good, original for a piece like the RSTL.
    Best line: "im used to smokin boulders and snortin coke till im blue in the face
    and returnin to retirement homes lookin for someone new to embrace" - lmao

    I'm predicting this to be a close battle. Kross brought his consistent smooth rhyme schemes to the table and created some strong imagery but I just didn't think it was up to his usual personal standards. Whilst I could tell Blitz really stepped his game up this week to a massive extent, absolutley fantastic flow and mechanics with some extremely funny humour that I could appreciate to a great extent...

    v - Blitz
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  7. liquid`acid

    liquid`acid gods busy can I help you?

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    kross:

    you paint a good picture of the two homies who used to do some dumb shit together. your flow was good vocab too if not a little strange to me at points, but that could just be our respective locations

    nicely distributed internals, not so pervasive that it takes away from what yer tryna say

    "But before I ask, hes burstin out about a jewelery heist
    You see, his daddys at the precinct as a lead detective
    Someone just went on a spree, from the rings to necklace
    Thats why V is breathless, the culprit fleed detectives"

    in think in this section youd woulda been better served to use another word like 'inspector' or somthin instead of detective twice, but thats just me




    blitz:

    damn haha

    kidna jumpy in the first 6-9 lines almost like you werent sure where you were gunna go with it. but then you got on it an started killin lol

    flow didnt quit seem to match up with Kross's but i think you def got im on the way you put yer rhymes together

    the shotugn wedding line was dope man, i was laughen at that for bit

    like kross you had your internals nicely distributed throughout the verse


    vote = blitz
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  8. -Fac3-

    -Fac3- Will punch the shit out u

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    Very Close match imo. Both verses flow wise were extremely on point. Kross, your flow is ridiculous man. Blitz stepped it up a whole lot this week as well..Now to the verses

    Kross - As I already stated, the flow is really almost unmatched in the league and continues to be your strong point as long as I have been viewing the league. As for the story, the way you took it from reminiscing to the actual reality they are currently living in was pretty smooth. As I was reading I could invision the scene taking place as if it were a movie script in perfect flowing ryhmes. Good drop this week..On point as usual...

    Blitz - Wow man, stepped it up for the champ match. Most people would pick this topic and fail at it imo. It was risky, but you seem to of pulled it off. The comedy was priceless in it, and I really like the direction you took with it. The flow was on point and yes I did find the humor in it. Very good drop Blitz, props to you this week.

    All in all this match was a lot closer than I thought it would be. I think Blitz came through this week and killed it. No offense to Kross, but I think for the topic you chose..you could of went in a different direction, I just think it was a bit too predictable. Cliche so to say. Your writing abilities weren't lacking though. The flow was magnificient and how you draw the story out is an art in itself. I think blitz came fresh and original with dope flow and the humor of it put him over the top. Not a blow out by any means, but this week I have Blitz..the guy who I whipped in a battle, lol, coming out on top. Good match up and props to the both of you.

    Vote - Blitz
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  9. Nu'maaN

    Nu'maaN Anu'naki, Nuqqa.

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    fuck. both used their quotes really well.

    lotty:
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    emotional piece. made you feel the character who was sitting at the death bed of his mate. it was powerful. it was a bit weak at the start, but it picked up pace and emotions towards the end of it. if it started off as strong as it finished, i would've voted for you straight away.
    yo, holy fuck @ this.

    damn, nice.

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    lol, dead @ your piece here. the shock factor and the humour in this killed it, just as well as the emotional aspect killed it for lotty. so this is a hard battle to vote for. almost a coin flip. but the way you dissed yourself is fuckin' hilarious. i wouldn't want to be in the recieving end of your disses lol. i would quote my favourite lines i lol'd at, but that would mean quoting the entire thing. i loved it.

    edit ; the humour in blitz piece absolutely murdered it. it was almost eminem-esque. i would vote for blitz in this if it wasn't for the lines i quoted from lotty. those multis had me feeling all dizzy and shit lol. btw, who the fuck is lotty. where's l kross? my vote goes to lotty (l kross) ...

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  10. Ace the Prophet

    Ace the Prophet A Prophet to the Game

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    Haha....breakdown

    Lotus- Man, what really stands out about your piece is your flow and rhyme schemes. Dope as hell. It was super smooth and kept me readin from line to line. Story had me hooked as it was a good story. Everything was very mechanically sound and this was a real nice piece

    Blitz- Lmao....I gotta agree that this reminded me a shit ton of Eminem. A lotta humor...you've gotten a lot better since I really read your shit last. Flow was pretty nice, content was good, and the punchlines were real nice. I definitely didn't think you'd make this battle this close but you fuckin showed up, bro

    This is a real tough battle to decide on, being that there's two pretty opposite verses content-wise that are really nice. Lotty took the serious route while Blitz clowned the fuck outta himself. In the end, though, I think I'm siding with L. Mechanically he was just a little more sound with his rhyme scheme and that to me overcomes Blitz's humor. If L didnt come with a sick ass rhyme scheme this battle would go to Blitz pretty easily. Real good shit from both

    Vote- L.Kross
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  11. Main Stream

    Main Stream The Conversensationalist

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    Lotty - pretty solid showing here man, cool storyline which i hadn't seen gone for before, and you absolutely killed it with the multies and internals and rhymescheme etc, they bounced around like crazy through this entire joint. it was relentless lol i kept waiting for you to loosen up your grip on them but i ddint happen.. tight verse.. smooth flow as well (for me at least) right throughout this piece. i liked a lot.

    blitz - man, you seemed to go OFF this week in terms of outright originality and creativity, you really ripped into it on some off the wall comedic shit (funny as fuck too in parts) good to see some actual COMEDIC verses up in this league, theres far too much seriousness and just about everyone dies in the leagues stories at the minute so this was largely refereshing too man. i'm going with the grain here, as much as i hate to, and sticking with Blitz. dude justs eemed hungrier fort it this week, i guess after winning the title it's hard to stay motivated because theres no higher for you to go, at least thats what seemed happened to Kross here. dude came good, well above average, but Blitz just seemed to smack this one outta the park for me this week. hoping he smashes it like this next week also haha

    vote - blitz
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  12. Yung Troy

    Yung Troy The Lyrical King

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    Lot,

    The rhyme scheme here was nice and as I read the piece I get a visual of the situations you describe in the piece...the imagery set in these next few lines was real dope to me..

    You see, his daddys at the precinct as a lead detective
    Someone just went on a spree, from the rings to necklace
    Thats why V is breathless, the culprit fleed detectives
    He tried to plea
    told em he threw everything in the trees, he wreckless
    They aint leaked it yet, even though its probably just
    Some bullshit to fool kids, they gotta discuss
    Media would have em in the woods choppin it up
    Scared somebody might find it. Somebody is us

    ^^I was really diggin these lines, though these weren't the strongest points in your verse..the part of the verse where you give a depiction of the guy lying in bed I feel was your strongest point because that's when the story really starts getting interesting, like I said, a lot of sick rhyme schemes in there..overall this was a very nice piece, can't say I disagree with anything, all I can tell you is to get even better with writing man...

    Blitz of course,

    Your piece had the comedic factor to it...your rhyme scheme was okay at best, I felt like in some places it actually got a little choppy, but in very few..and also, a lot of your ideas were scattered, like you jumped from idea to idea too fast, I felt like you should of gotten more into detail on some of your ideas and that would of made the piece even doper imo...but you had some good shit in there don't get me wrong...my fave lines were

    Its absurd-to-see..… the perve in me
    Turn on the t.v and whack it.. to open heart surgery
    ^wow, killed yourself

    Ill wreck-a-fool but right now im killin my self
    Chiks never really been into me there were just feeling the wealth
    I was dumb rich..until I put it all on the clippers..but they never won shit
    Now I cant even get a dance from a stripper… with one tit
    lmaoo....


    who cares if she has no teeth in her mouth and her tits don’t fit in her blouse?
    just as long she starches my underwear before I leave the house/
    wow..lol

    overall that was a nice comedic piece...but I just don't feel like it was as put together as Lotus's piece was, therefore

    v-Lotus
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  13. L. Kross

    L. Kross His Highness

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  14. L. Kross

    L. Kross His Highness

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    I thought it was mandatory to vote on the champ match =\
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  15. Blitz_krieg

    Blitz_krieg SAY WHA.........

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