[Week 7] [Championship] C. Mc Guttso (6-0) vs 2. .:Pain:. (5-1)

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    WEEK 7



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    HipHop - Royce Da 5'9
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  2. MC Guttso

    MC Guttso Fingers in Pies

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  3. .:Pain:.

    .:Pain:. Futurely J. Keeper

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    Deja Vu anyone?
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  4. MC Guttso

    MC Guttso Fingers in Pies

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    ROYCE DA 5'9"
    "Hip Hop"


    [Intro]
    Woo! haha, uh

    [Chorus - Royce Da 5'9"]
    I know my streets, I know my sounds
    Y'all know my beats, how I get down
    I take my steps, and leaps and bounds
    Nigga it's - HIP HOP!

    [Verse 1 - Royce Da 5'9"]
    Yeah, yeah, we started from nothin a couple MC's
    Beat-boxin, the crowd in the lunch room (yeah)
    Me and Prem', both names go together
    Like they ain't supposed to be seperate, like "D" in the D
    I said it before, I rep in records beats
    At the headquarters, rest in peace
    Nigga I'ma hold shotty, and knock you out
    And I ain't gotta know Karate like Afu-ra
    It's - HIP HOP!, strong or not
    This is rap basketball, stats all you got
    Long as you hot, and your flow could hold up
    To knowin all of your short goals is long shots!
    Ninety percent of you niggaz ain't hard
    Here +Just to Get a Rep+, you not +Gangstarrs+
    The finest flow will amaze, rap without me
    Minus The Source, minus the Quotable page

    [Chorus - Royce Da 5'9"]
    HIP HOP! is everything around you
    [scratched] - "No competition"
    Back to the voice, of today
    [scratched] - "It's real in the field"
    What's realer than - HIP HOP! (yeah)
    I know my streets, I know my sounds
    Y'all know my beats, how I get down
    I take my steps, and leaps and bounds
    Nigga it's - HIP HOP!

    [Verse 2 - Royce Da 5'9"]
    Rythmic, league c'mon wit it, I'm long winded
    I will diss you, from long distances
    You will not get the chance, like Choppa
    Ness and Dylan, to dis-respect, who you don't listen to
    Egg in the skillet brain, nigga, diss is you
    Smarten up, every person in the earth, be harden up
    But the only target is us
    It's - HIP HOP! cars and trucks
    I be dreamin about shit, like havin a hard time swingin
    On a nigga, or squeezin a trigger or fallin
    If I land, I won't wake up (yeah)
    My six shot model, ya crew
    I'm leavin ya mommy faces blue, just like a Hypnotic bottle
    They feel you the realer, you spit
    This killer shit is hearin us
    Healin you if you ill or you sick mentally

    [Chorus - Royce Da 5'9"]
    It's - HIP HOP! is everything around you
    [scratched] - "Gotta be something for me to write this"
    Back to the voice, of today
    [scratched] - "No talent rappers"
    What's realer than - HIP HOP!
    I know my streets, I know my sounds
    Y'all know my beats, how I get down
    I take my steps, and leaps and bounds
    Nigga it's - HIP HOP!

    [Verse 3 – Guttso]
    Guttso speeches; armed with cockney charm,
    A benevolent gentleman is more than a thug,
    Feeling the love when I’m up in the clubs,
    The hip-hop beats are my personal drug,
    Bitches...they like what’s in the whiskey jug,
    She gets frisky, digs dance, she’s a vigorous fuck,
    I beat kids who run their luck and their mouths,
    A white dropping fire-truck, what’s the yellin’ about?!
    I’m high and still laugh at you sorry-assed schmucks,
    Who say that ‘coz I’m not black I automatically suck,
    I’m dumbstruck by closed minded racist personas,
    The image they front drags hip-hop through the mud,
    I’ll never be threatened by you or your bloods,
    My nights on the mic are fully booked for months,
    It all grew from those heads that hid from the truth,
    They forgot rap ain’t restrictive now,
    It’s everythin’ in this room

    [Chorus - Royce Da 5'9"]
    HIP HOP! is everything around you
    [scratched] - "Come alive y'all"
    Back to the voice, of today
    [scratched] - "It's all in the game"
    What's realer than - HIP HOP!
    I know my streets, I know my sounds
    Y'all know my beats, how I get down
    I take my steps, and leaps and bounds
    Nigga it's - HIP HOP!​
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  5. .:Pain:.

    .:Pain:. Futurely J. Keeper

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    ROYCE DA 5'9"
    "Hip Hop"


    [Intro]
    Woo! haha, uh

    [Chorus - Royce Da 5'9"]
    I know my streets, I know my sounds
    Y'all know my beats, how I get down
    I take my steps, and leaps and bounds
    Nigga it's - HIP HOP!

    [Verse 1 - Royce Da 5'9"]
    Yeah, yeah, we started from nothin a couple MC's
    Beat-boxin, the crowd in the lunch room (yeah)
    Me and Prem', both names go together
    Like they ain't supposed to be seperate, like "D" in the D
    I said it before, I rep in records beats
    At the headquarters, rest in peace
    Nigga I'ma hold shotty, and knock you out
    And I ain't gotta know Karate like Afu-ra
    It's - HIP HOP!, strong or not
    This is rap basketball, stats all you got
    Long as you hot, and your flow could hold up
    To knowin all of your short goals is long shots!
    Ninety percent of you niggaz ain't hard
    Here +Just to Get a Rep+, you not +Gangstarrs+
    The finest flow will amaze, rap without me
    Minus The Source, minus the Quotable page

    [Chorus - Royce Da 5'9"]
    HIP HOP! is everything around you
    [scratched] - "No competition"
    Back to the voice, of today
    [scratched] - "It's real in the field"
    What's realer than - HIP HOP! (yeah)
    I know my streets, I know my sounds
    Y'all know my beats, how I get down
    I take my steps, and leaps and bounds
    Nigga it's - HIP HOP!

    [Verse 2 - Royce Da 5'9"]
    Rythmic, league c'mon wit it, I'm long winded
    I will diss you, from long distances
    You will not get the chance, like Choppa
    Ness and Dylan, to dis-respect, who you don't listen to
    Egg in the skillet brain, nigga, diss is you
    Smarten up, every person in the earth, be harden up
    But the only target is us
    It's - HIP HOP! cars and trucks
    I be dreamin about shit, like havin a hard time swingin
    On a nigga, or squeezin a trigger or fallin
    If I land, I won't wake up (yeah)
    My six shot model, ya crew
    I'm leavin ya mommy faces blue, just like a Hypnotic bottle
    They feel you the realer, you spit
    This killer shit is hearin us
    Healin you if you ill or you sick mentally

    [Chorus - Royce Da 5'9"]
    It's - HIP HOP! is everything around you
    [scratched] - "Gotta be something for me to write this"
    Back to the voice, of today
    [scratched] - "No talent rappers"
    What's realer than - HIP HOP!
    I know my streets, I know my sounds
    Y'all know my beats, how I get down
    I take my steps, and leaps and bounds
    Nigga it's - HIP HOP!

    [Verse 3 - Jae Keeps]
    Jae Keeps, I'm nicer than what most are used to,
    Blew through the ranks, I'll chew through the game,
    I move smooth, I ain't soft, but I'm a cool dude,
    So you dudes are safe, if you knew the name,
    The best on is me, I've messed with the best,
    The rest rest on their knees, necks bob and weave,
    Next, heads fall and bleed,
    I rape and pillage, ya'll don't wanna beef,
    I flow dope, I know hoes call me weak,
    Then depict me in homo-erotic dreams,
    I keep it hip-hop, I ain't kneelin' for anyone,
    Don't test ya luck, I wield a machete tongue,
    I shred up the haters, fellas fake it when they hate it,
    I run the best tracks, celebratin' like a pagan,
    Yea, each verse a depiction of me,
    And that's why I'm hip-hop, while you're just wishin' to be.

    [Chorus - Royce Da 5'9"]
    HIP HOP! is everything around you
    [scratched] - "Come alive y'all"
    Back to the voice, of today
    [scratched] - "It's all in the game"
    What's realer than - HIP HOP!
    I know my streets, I know my sounds
    Y'all know my beats, how I get down
    I take my steps, and leaps and bounds
    Nigga it's - HIP HOP!​
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  6. Got Life?

    Got Life? Resident Megalomaniac

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    Though I'm not signed in I'm at least a 4x champ, so yeah I'm voting.

    Guttso - What in the hell happened to your flow and scheme here bro...on multiple occasions you failed to connect rhymes...maybe it works with a british accent but I found several lines to be stuck without a proper rhyme connection. Also most of your verse was kind of blah and bullshit about getting high or drunk and then you flip it into you being white and hating on people that are ignorant towards you since you're not black, but you didn't connect on the actual topic of being Hip-hop. Being that royce's subject matter had nothing to do with your own, I felt like this would have been a really out of place collaboration if it was ever laid down. Not a strong showing from you.

    Pain - This was stupid on point with the flow and your subject matter stayed on point with the punches and bragadocious style of Royce making it a smooth transition through. I laughed at the homo-erotic dreams line especially considering recent events with Joro's whole homo-erotic depiction of you and me last week, but yeah nothing really wrong with this piece. Only thing I wasn't all that into was the celebratin like i'm pagan line...maybe I missed something there, but yeah.

    vote = Pain by a mile.
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  7. Shadow

    Shadow Kotaro's Master

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    Mc Guttso - I thought the lyrics here were serious and mad hot, they only issue i had here was that the flow seemed off a little. I'm not sure if flow(as far as rapping it with the actual song) matters but i couldn't quite get it matching up or even somewhat close. I found that is seemed inconsistent but i'd have to hear how you'd rap it to know for sure but to me it did seem..right(if that makes sense)...Lyrically, you were great, your rhymes were great and the vocab was on point...nice verse here

    Pain - Your verse was great, your rhymes were strong and the good thing was i felt like it flowed with the beat(atleast when i rapped it myself) which seems like that can make or break your verse this week..I thought your verse wasn't as strong lyrically as Guttso's but your flow made up with it..I think that next time with this kinda rap you should make more use of multi's or internal rhyming..that, i think, would take your verse on a new level that would match better with the lyrics here...good verse tho

    Overall, this battle seems to be flow/rhymes(pain) vs vocab/lyrics(Guttso). Although i liked both verses..for this type of battle i have to give it to Pain for the fact that his flow matched up more with the beat and the other lyrics in this rap..If Guttso would've gotten is flow right, he would've won, although if Pain would've made more use of the internal rhyming or multi's he would've sealed it.

    Vote - Pain
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  8. T.a.C

    T.a.C Guest

    Guttso- Like GL? said, there were some lines on there that to me didnt rhyme, im not sure if it works with your accent. But that took away from this verse in my opinion. Unlike shadow though i thought this had a nice flow to it. i thought it worked with the beat especially at the beginning. however, the rhyming on this verse let you down in my opinion. It just wasnt up to your usual par.

    Pain- You straight up killed this. Flow was crazy. I thought the rhymes helped you out a lot too. at certain points you had some sick shit. i thought this would have been a sick audio verse. Nice job

    vote- Pain.

    good job guys
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  9. Orange407County

    Orange407County Well-Known Member

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    vote pain

    eh, i dont think this was your cup of tea guttso... i wasnt really feeling either verse that much to be honest. alot of guttso lines were generic tho and nothing stood out for me asside from the white line.

    pain - i didnt like ur scheme in the first few bars rhyming every other line...eh i dont quite know why. over all your verse was slightly better written with less bland lines...
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  10. liquid`acid

    liquid`acid gods busy can I help you?

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    guttso:
    bleh, not a fan of starting a verse with your name and i think you would have done well to rhyme the first line. having a line that doesnt rhyme is perfectly ok as long as its really adding somthin to the verse which that lines doesnt really seem like it is.

    "She gets frisky, digs dance, she’s a vigorous fuck,"
    haha this line was awsome

    "A white dropping fire-truck, what’s the yellin’ about?!"
    this line seems kinda like total filler thats only there to rhyme the one befor it.

    ionno, this drop kinda seems substandard to the other ones of yours that ive read since i signed up. altho a lot of peeps werent feelin the vid collab so i can understand if you didnt give it your all



    pain:
    lol you too huh? like i said to guttso not really feelin the name drop opener.

    im liken how you alternated the scheme on the first 4 lines, its kinda s.o.p. but not used very often anymore.


    "The best on is me, I've messed with the best,
    The rest rest on their knees, necks bob and weave,"

    despite my doin it last week im not a huge fan of usin the same word twice in one line. an i think mixing where you used the words a bit coulda helped, maybe somthin like.

    "the rest is on me, ive messed with the best
    the best rest on their knees, necks bob an weave"

    just my take on it at least.
    overall its a solid drop with great rhymes and flow.


    vote = pain
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  11. Ace the Prophet

    Ace the Prophet A Prophet to the Game

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    Well, here's my breakdown:

    Guttso- Cool shit, man. Pretty much everyone has said everything already. I liked the flow. Some words were harder to rhyme, but yeah, that's cuz you're british and you're thinking of them in your lingo and accent and all, so fuck it. I do think your rhyme scheme could've been a little better to make your flow smoother and all, but I think it's obvious from what I've seen out of you this season that you're more of a topical writer than a video collab. I do have to say though I was really digging your closer

    Pain- Smooth as hell. Your flow alone could win it here for ya. Nice lines, dope rhyme scheme. Easy to critique right now cuz there's not really much I can say about it at this moment in time

    Pain wins this one because he's better at writing to a beat than Guttso. Good shit from both

    Vote- Pain
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  12. Main Stream

    Main Stream The Conversensationalist

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    Guttso: I think you did well here, rid the topic well, flow was on for me, read smooth enough, I do agree that maybe the accent hurt you this week brosef. It's funny how it's taken a video week for you to become unstuck though.. you've been grinding on this topical tip for a good few weeks now man, you'll def be back in the top match soon enough. The closer was pretty dope actually, and while some people will bring up you the rhymescheme, I think you did the right thing and sacrificed that for the content - you made the right choice, just didnt quite execute it fully is all.

    Pain - You were at an advantage the way I see it in that you have experience writing to beats, that helped you this week for sure, flow was butters, I dont think its fair to say you could have won on flow alone but with such an overworked topicthis was always gonna be an awkward one. You had a strong showing here, didnt really portray you being hiphop until right at the end, more just flexing and showing the ego off to give it a polish but yeah, Pain got this one.

    Not the blowout the votes suggest, but it's pretty comprehensive..
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  13. L. Kross

    L. Kross His Highness

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    Vote - Pain

    Pain, sick flow, nice multis, did a good job of puttin off a underground hip hop vibe.
    Guttso, I loved this verse, mostly some of those rhyme patterns were crack. Text wise I think Guttso had a stronger lyrical verse, an mightve even captured a more solid sense of hip hop, but since they felt the need to give us beats.... and remix existing songs we'll never see in real life... Pain had a verse more structured to audio givin him the edge here.

    Also... Boo@this beat for the champ match
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