[Week 52] 7. T.a.C(11-8) vs. 8. Noble Soldier(5-3)

Discussion in 'The Rapmusic Storytelling/Topical League' started by Shadow, Aug 22, 2011.

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  1. Shadow

    Shadow Kotaro's Master

    Apr 11, 2004


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    T.a.C- thedude8125
    ShadowWarriorfs- ShadowWarriorfs
  2. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

    Feb 25, 2008

    NOBLE SOLDIER Fireball Kid

    Sep 1, 1999
    lol.. awesome.. im only writing like 20.. kiss my ass..

    NOBLE SOLDIER Fireball Kid

    Sep 1, 1999

    the reflection of disgust, but looking is a must..
    hands the color of rust, because of the blood I've touched..
    Uncleansed infidel, still nautious from the blood i've smelled..
    deadly skilled, waking with images of those i've killed..
    rather be a healer, but i got to fix myself first..
    dont pray so im not a kneeler, but still consider myself cursed..
    the smells of burnt flesh wont leave, it just hangs around, scent of dead..
    the crys of dieing enemys force me into a corner surrounded..
    bound by invisible chains that keep me from moving forward..
    slashed by whips of tears, and agony.. being brutaly tortured..
    looking and loathing at a reflective portrait, its unfortunate..
    senses so crowded by death and gore, got me feeling like a contortionist..
    proportions of smiles and frowns leave the scales leaned to the latter..
    because of the dreams of blood splatter before my dreams shatter..
    people always ask whats the matter, but i have no answers to give..
    im looking for them myself, begging like a panhandler lives..
    walking the streets, mind paralized, staring into nothingness..
    me and my shadow meet, its materialises and shares his disgust
    crushed beneath the weight i carry, not strong enough to be the bearer..
    flushed.. because this is when i see the wrongs when i rush to the mirror..
  5. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

    Feb 25, 2008
    It started in a hospital maternity ward
    Waiting for almost an eternity, bored
    Clocks ticking, minutes pass like hours
    Til someone’s day is a brighten light tower
    Shoes squeaking, running up the hallway
    Almost crowning as the doctor on call came
    As I sat watching, feeling like a voyeur
    Though I had been sent by my employer
    As the baby came out a shade of blue
    Umbilical cord choking him, facing doom
    I saw through the wall of the waiting room
    My job, ensure he safely escaped the womb
    I rush in, silently making the doctor aware
    Though I had no voice and no body in there
    The cord is unwrapped and his life is saved
    Parents cry tears of joy instead of cry in pain

    20 years pass, watching daily for his safety
    And he’s made some bad decisions lately
    The same baby I saved has now grown
    Found blow and wasn’t allowed home
    He was found in the bathroom comatose
    After I told his dad he had overdosed
    Though I still cant speak I put in his head
    To go check the bathroom, get out of bed
    But that was then, now the stakes reach higher
    His friends and him went for a beach fire
    Drunk as fuck, his friend says he’s fine to drive
    He cant walk, the stars need to align to survive
    About a mile away a person out for a night stroll
    Is a witness as their car slams into a light pole
    Fate was to t-bone a bus, but I made it fall behind
    So the car was totaled but they’re all alive

    20 more years pass, he turned his life around
    Completely saved by the wife he found
    And she’s tried her best to be protective
    He’s always had this streak to act reckless
    A death wish, though he wants to change
    Settled down, working on the stock exchange
    Eating healthy, exercising, trying to live long
    To teach his kids if shits right, if shits wrong
    But he washed away problems, lost in the river
    So I made him dream he was shot in the liver
    He woke up, touched it to notice a bloomer
    A small lump, diagnosed as a cancerous tumor
    Because of me he was given a new fate
    Meant to die, to find the cancer too late
    You could say I’m playing God or a great lurk
    Saving a life, but it’s all in a day’s work

    I protected him ‘til I fizzled like a blown speaker
    See, as the years go on our powers grow weaker
    He lasted a lot longer than most of my peer’s
    I resided over him for close to eighty five years
    Everyone has an angel, some have stronger powers
    You complain about work but we put in longer hours
    And it stays in the family, it’s all the same situation
    Once you die you’re assigned to the next generation
    So when my guy died I got to wait and bother
    We met, I explained I was his great grandfather
    Told him everything, all the times I saved him
    Now he has to watch his great grandkids as payment
    As I go on to heaven passing my initiation
    Walking off into the sunset, the other angels give an ovation
    I worked for a lifetime to protect and it’s paid off
    The only thought I had was “If I took a day off…”

    If I took a day off

    NOBLE SOLDIER Fireball Kid

    Sep 1, 1999
  7. fairydance2000

    fairydance2000 don't wait, Procrastinate

    Mar 10, 2004
    Noble soldier
    Your imagey was strong and clear
    The flow was mostly nice and smooth,
    The rhymes were good.
    My biggest thing is I wished you had of given me more to the story
    It seemed kinda short.
    But a good verse

    I really enjoyed this story
    It had strong images that carried through the whole story
    Strong clear and relevant
    I could feel the emotion in these words
    I liked that it was a complete story
    The rhymes were simple and spot on
    Your flow was nice
    Nice verse

    For having a start middle and ending to the story. over all more complete
    Vote TAC
  8. Riot

    Riot The Dark Hero.

    Feb 5, 2001
    Noble - I love the structure to this verse, the scheme was very vivid and had a easy flow to eat, although the story itself was lacking. It was more of a back of book readers digest version. I Still thought it was a nice read, just wanted more of it.

    Tac - you have improved a lot since the last couple years, your content of your stories pour emotions although your verse. The story itself was great, I love you small structure, i prefer it that way, specially with how Your write. I think Noble was more vivid than you but you had a complete story that was formulated with a beginning, middle and end..and it was well done.

    Good reads both of you, but for having more of a complete story and a good one at that my vote goes to Tac.

    Vote - Tac

  9. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

    Feb 25, 2008
  10. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

    Feb 25, 2008
    T.a.C wins 2-0
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