[Week 5][Contender] 4. ShogunCrosse(2-0) vs 5. T.a.C(2-2)

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  1. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

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  2. ShogunCrosse

    ShogunCrosse The Fuckin' Good Guy...

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    check...I apologize for what i must do to you t.a.c :(
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  3. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

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  4. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

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    My girl was gor-g-us
    She was the death of my past only fuckin with horny sluts
    Early morning humps, never a boring fuck
    Her adoring’s glut, and never one of those roaring cunts
    I was used to cum sluts, hit it and quit it
    Split it, diggin the divot, and never givin the digets
    But my girl was an angel, looks you stop to see
    Father had a lot of cheese, personality you could not believe
    A perfect angel, one night my nightmare became a prophesy
    An angel with a Godly sheen told me she’s got to leave
    I woke up the next morning, she had died in her sleep
    When I tried to beseech her to wake up she was denying of me
    Called an ambulance and proceeded to cry in my sheet
    When the paramedics arrived they thought I had died and not she

    A year passed, and I still couldn’t trust, what…
    Is wrong with me, I only seem to wanna bust nuts
    Fuck love, for me that emotion died that night
    Cuz I could never replace her, try as I might
    Sighs as I cry, I need my pain to go away
    And I tried, but I couldn’t refrain from goin back to my old ways
    Fuckin everything I could, did it with no grace
    Fat, old, ugly, doesn’t matter, pussy has no face
    Trying to dull the pain I always got chicks swollen
    Buying condoms at a rate people thought I had stock in Trojan
    I’d knock it open, always carried lots of lotion
    In the playa hierarchy, I was the top, the shogun
    But I wasn’t feelin better, my soul wasn’t at ease
    There was no solace, I was wondering what did I need
    It was bound to happen, to most the concept comes as simpleness
    But this cute dimpled chick was the bitch that gave me syphilis
    But really, there was no reason to treat it
    If I die I’ll be happy, I’ll continue to be miserable if I beat it

    One night I had another dream, seeing a devil formation
    He told me I had reached the worst level of damnation
    My wife was my guardian angel, meant to give me a revelation
    So here she is to give you one last dishevel dictation
    My wife appeared, for some reason she was a site I feared
    The voice I’d give my life to hear stabbed me just like a spear
    I tried to speak but choked, her smile gave me a gleam of hope
    A scene I’d have never gotten to see if I awoke
    Then she spoke, “you used to call me an angel, starving sin…
    From you, which I did because I was your guardian
    See I was sent by God, a concept at which you might laugh
    He wanted me to straighten you out, get you on the right path
    Once I had, he took me to fix another person
    Someone the devil infected who was suffering worse, then…
    I’d be moving on again, but it seems you gone astray
    You met the fork in the road and you went the wrong way
    Get over me, I know that’s what you sought to
    But now you’ve ruined your second chance and the devil’s got you”



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  5. ShogunCrosse

    ShogunCrosse The Fuckin' Good Guy...

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  6. ShogunCrosse

    ShogunCrosse The Fuckin' Good Guy...

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    [youtube]xE0UA8RREX4[/youtube]

    No cliché’ is older...
    ’Good and evil arguin’ on opposite shoulders’
    A folklore told since hominids roamed earth...


    [Me: In White..Evil: In Red]


    I need an Exorcist with holy water…A preacher who saves souls!
    An inner evil has killed off all my guardian angels!
    A slow split……athough it's painful!
    It feels like Kane, ponderin’ on slaughterin’ Abel!
    and, I’ve had it marked in my date-book for eight darkening days, soooo!…


    "No I won’t let you take full control of my soul ‘n mind!"
    Although, the fight for my humanity has been a slow decline

    (The demon flinched within)

    I began to yell, "Asshole!!!", but only mouthed silent ‘squawks’!
    I lost my dialogue…it just stopped before 'I talked!'
    By the time I saw what looked like a black-hole, I was caught...
    …then vacuumed behind my own bodies’ mind and thoughts![FONT=&quot] [/FONT]

    (My consciousness was sucked into some abyss)

    It was like the bottomless pit the prince of darkness was dropped in!
    It was so quiet…I felt impossibly boxed in…
    I started wanderin’, lost, hollerin’, "A’MEN!"
    Then I heard a voice from the hostile that was robbin’ my conscious!

    “You’re just an evicted occupant in my apartment…squattin’!”
    “Your just a carcass that’s got skin!... just a car, with options!
    “It’s the “Tree of Life”…Ah, Shit… {Shrugs shoulders}
    “Even “bad apples” that fall onto the “Garden”, get rotten!…”

    As i fought the evilly fiendish, deeply subconscious demon!
    I saw a cosmologically divine light from God, and reached it!

    “NOPE!...Sorry, you’re mine now!”... HA! HA!..you’re hardly leavin’!”[FONT=&quot] [/FONT]
    “I’LL MAKE YOU FEEL THE WRATH OF EVE’S SORROW WHEN BARRED FROM EDEN!”


    The thing began barfin’ so much; no way my throat was shuttin’!
    But then I noticed somethin’!...
    …The throwin’ up gave me partial motor function
    It was the only opportunity since I let it enter me
    I focused towards the inner being, with all my energy

    Until eventually… the transformation was rendered incomplete
    I was back…no longer in a deep imprisonment

    “You can be disobedient, but defeat is imminent!”

    "YOU’LL NEVER TAKE AWAY MY PHYSIQUE, OR SKIN YA PRICK!"
    But the thief was insistent to attempt persistently to live again!
    I felt forsaken with all these prayers of mine, unheeded
    Like when God loses all his faith for humankind, like Legion!
    I was screamin’…”I’LL NEVER LET YOU TAKE MY LIFE, DEMON!
    "I ORDER YOU TO LEAVE IN THE NAME OF CHRIST, JESUS!"


    ”Awww…for me?...I’m speechless!...what you said was "hella" sweet!”
    …but that usually just works in horror movies from the seventies…”
    “The truth about the Devil’s bleak…Was once presumed as ‘Heavenly’.”
    ”But shit, all the demons rulin’ Hell used to be angelic beings!”


    (I grabbed up the wooden cross I had beside me, and held it tight to my face; the light russet color of the cross faded to a darkening auburn as tears soaked into the wooden idol.)


    ”Allegedly entombed, but exhumed from my sarcophagus!”
    “You should stop usin’ that stupid cross for confidence!”
    “To go against me is preposterous, probably monotonous!”
    “Approximate odds are zip ‘cause I’m just dominantly monstrous!”
    “Hence ‘demonic’-I’m positively Godless and nastier than feral wolves!”…
    “Don’t be scared of the inferno; All inhabitants are skeletal”
    “Hell is full of ‘flarin’ folks without a tad of hair, just skulls!”


    I began to preach like clericals recitin’ passages and parables!


    I spoke the holy gospels, over and over, while growin’ pale and wary

    I repeated three ‘Fore Fathers’, paired with three ‘Hail Mary’s’
    While inhaling, my breathing became impaired, like an ‘ailed’ wheeze


    “HAHA..You’ve failed…I’m un-jailed, freed!..
    "Now just whiff the smell of defeat and bail, please!"

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  7. lyricalpriest

    lyricalpriest Rap Games Dawson Creek

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    AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!! yo that shit was the shit SHO!!! ...

    unfair advantage he got an extension but.. it was permissable so .. here goes

    T.A.C.- i thought u had this one, really good piece, great concept, very organized and well interpreted , strong beginning and strong ending the climax was beautiful. choice of words were great! nothing bad about this piece tbh.. kind of predictable if anything..
    better then last weeks in my opinion..

    SHO- u fuccin bastard! this whole piece had me on edge of my seat, great story line, a little confusing to what the topic was, but i think u were possessed, obviously.. great choice of sentence structure, the music added much more excitement to reading it, and it was easy too read, man, i read that shit twice, i cant believe u did that, shit was amazing..

    vote=sho
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  8. Scrolls-Oracle of Omen

    Scrolls-Oracle of Omen *DBS*--*A.B.C*

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    Holy mother fuck...what u guys take rapping steroids?

    Tac...that's what I'm talking about man. Not the type of story I'm into but god Damn if u didn't kill it. Nice flooow...very nice setup man. Best peice I've seen from u. Story was good...Damn son lol.

    Sho...wow dude. Lovin the story u chose. And u told it very very well. Best I've seen u come too. Damn man...flow was aweesome, smooth as fuck to read and love the battle between good and evil inside urself. I can relate to that. I think I'm possessed haha...Damn.

    Vote...Sho...ONLY cause the story hit more home with me. Yall both came equally as good flow, lyrics and imagery wise. This is the battle of the week right here. Holy fuckin shit fuck.
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  9. Cigma

    Cigma Maxwell's Demon

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    Ok this is battle of week with two verses close and very strong.

    T.A.C.

    I am not a fan of that vocab, but I can feel that swag. You are at home when it comes to sex talk and skankiness.
    When I read that shogun line I was like - damn!

    At first I thought you were overboard with the dirty especially after the wife died. But then that ending everything slammed home. And you hit a home run to me.

    It was a twist and a half.

    Sho - Excellent story telling skills. Good structure, ideas. Rhymes execution. I really enjoed the demon's dialogue.

    I don't play video or listen to audio just read the text.

    Vote - T.A.C. I think both writers were good at the same things but just went about it in a different way.

    The difference for me was the ending. Where show told a great story and described a good scene.. T.A.C. told a complete story with an ending that made you ponder about events that happen in your life.

    The choice is yours on what actions to take.

    Sho was entertaining and skillfully told.

    Thank you guys.
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  10. Shadow

    Shadow Kotaro's Master

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    T.a.C - Like always, you are very creative with your topics. I enjoyed the flow and the imagery in this picture. I really enjoy your work and think you are still improving. I did, however think that the rhyming in the first paragraph made it seem a bit like a nursery rhymes which through me off a bit. I think that in a topical battle, it is better to sacrifice internal rhyming then story consistency. Still, i think you finished strong here. Nicely done.


    Fave line-
    "One night I had another dream, seeing a devil formation
    He told me I had reached the worst level of damnation
    My wife was my guardian angel, meant to give me a revelation
    So here she is to give you one last dishevel dictation"

    Sho - I am impressed with this verse here. The rhymes especially. It felt very smooth and didn't see forced at all. I rather enjoyed everything in this verse. I don't have anything critical for you to work on. Good work

    Fave Line -
    "I need an Exorcist with holy water…A preacher who saves souls!
    An inner evil has killed off all my guardian angels!
    A slow split……athough it's painful!
    It feels like Kane, ponderin’ on slaughterin’ Abel!"

    Overall a cool matchup. I think that bother writer are still improving but i believe that Sho won this with a more polished style...Nicely done guys


    V/ Sho
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  11. Riot

    Riot The Dark Hero.

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    Tac - As Usual Good Shit. I Love The Way You Take A Topic And Make It Your Own With All The Different creative Spins You Put On It. Although At Times This Verse Seemed Simple It Did It's Job, Flow Was Good Specially Through The Second Half. Story Was Creative, Vocab Was Decent. Imagry Was Nice, Overall A Good Verse. Best Lines

    One night I had another dream, seeing a devil formation
    He told me I had reached the worst level of damnation
    My wife was my guardian angel, meant to give me a revelation
    So here she is to give you one last dishevel dictation
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    See I was sent by God, a concept at which you might laugh
    He wanted me to straighten you out, get you on the right path
    Once I had, he took me to fix another person
    Someone the devil infected who was suffering worse, then…

    Again, Overall A Good Verse

    Sho - Dude, WTF? Seriously. I Love The Concept. I Remeber I Used To This Type Of Concept Back In The Days With Multiple Voices, You Def. Made It Work. Your Story Was Nice, Flow Was Good, Imgry was great..I Just Think You Killed It with The Structure, Great Job This Week Bro.
    Best/Fav Lines;

    began to yell, "Asshole!!!", but only mouthed silent ‘squawks’!
    I lost my dialogue…it just stopped before 'I talked!'
    By the time I saw what looked like a black-hole, I was caught...
    …then vacuumed behind my own bodies’ mind and thoughts! 
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    "I need an Exorcist with holy water…A preacher who saves souls!
    An inner evil has killed off all my guardian angels!
    A slow split……athough it's painful!
    It feels like Kane, ponderin’ on slaughterin’ Abel!"

    Again, Overall Great Verse, Very Entertaining. I Didn't Get Lost At All With 2 Different Voices Going On. You melted Them Together Very Well.

    Vote - Sho.

    Thanks For Another Two Good Reads This Week Tac And Sho.
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  12. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

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    Shogun wins 4-1
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