[Week 5] [Champ] 1. Kuja(4-0) vs 2. InsaneVillian(3-1)

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  1. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

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  2. Insanevillian

    Insanevillian STILL in CHARGE

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  3. Kuja

    Kuja Jack Skellington

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  4. Kuja

    Kuja Jack Skellington

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    Week 5


    The sky swirled grey such an eerie display
    Engulfed by war & its smokey decay..
    A spring chicken, a tale yet to be written
    Seeking bravery while keeping truth hidden
    Just a kid at heart trying to remember
    The family he had without losing his temper
    Missing his home now he felt alone..
    Trapped in a trench amougst a bloody cologne
    Deafening tones, shots fired while guts spilled
    Now a crimson pool of death as the pit filled
    Drowning in isolation his heart was pounding
    With death & fear consuming his surroundings
    The world went silent, his vision a thick mist
    Until he felt a tight grip round his weak wrist
    Light on his feet he was holstered over a shoulder
    & his life saved by an heroic veteran soldier
    Hours had passed but inside, the kid felt safe
    Taking refuge behind a tank with this new best mate
    His loving comrade, Johny was his name..
    Survived a dozen wars, a man of valor he became
    They sat hunched bitter & cold, it was frozen
    Wearing boots that neither could feel there toes in
    Not a word was spoken, they just sat & watched
    Barely taking time to blink for fear of the cost
    Gunfire became distant replaced by deaths existance
    Both men smiled as they survived the resistance
    They lit up cigerettes, a victory blaze
    Exchanging words of joy, as the young kid praised
    He owed his life to this man but both felt weak
    & after these moments of joy they both fell asleep
    The night was bitter & damp, the mist persisted
    A thousand tales of lost souls that slowly whispered
    Daybreak arrived, the sun sweeping the mist aside
    Revealing two crushed men both in death side by side
    Worn out & weak, the sleep itself was too strong
    Because the thing about this picture,
    Is the battletank had gone.




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  5. Insanevillian

    Insanevillian STILL in CHARGE

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    no boom this week... i had to drop an old piece that i never used in the rstl... but i did make an audio for it, you can pm me if your interested... maybe you could give me constructive criticism on it... really had no time to come up with anything new as my life this week has been a whirlwind, but i refuse to no show to a title match... using the topic I......,

    It's My Life...

    let me show you the history of my misery
    stabbin this paper with sorrow till my pencil bleeds
    envision me, the kid no one wants to be like
    see strife, jumped in the sandbox for not being white
    could see light, mom was white, cursed my black skin
    i lacked gin, so i was forced to see the truth back then
    attacked again mentally when moms died physically
    pops beat me crazy, nuts, i needed help clinically
    knsanity reigned supreme, to drugs i was a fiend
    unclean, low self esteem, no home at fifteen
    leaned on my vices, there's nothing like this
    no help needed, no one knew what a fucked up life is
    lifeless, but smart enough to find my way out
    lay out a plan, to not get my brains sprayed out
    a doubt crept into my thoughts, thickened the plot
    sought my savior, rapmusic kicked in and fought...

    Its my life,
    feel the strife... the blade of the knife
    that pleads for me to take my life

    Its my life,
    always fishin for my expedition,
    my composition on display for your comprehension..


    with this head of sin, i knew doom was settling in
    like when hip hop flip flopped to the tip top, where metal was in
    my adrenaline races, paces, chases for remedy
    i asked the beatles for a clue, they said let it be
    but naturally i strive in life, showing resistance
    to these obstacles trying to wipe me from existance
    what is this? ohhh its weed, i need to cope
    i dont need the pope, with this in my lungs i see hope
    society dont need a rope to leave me hanging
    i believe some slanging, wouylf relieve the aching
    in my pockets, id rather see kids on crack and dope
    then to pay attention to the fact im broke
    im ready to choke and vomit cuz i cant palm it
    and i have a job to pay bills, but the rest no comment
    but i have a way to solve it, by giving you cancer
    sike, but for real tho, your listyening to the answer

    Its my life,
    feel the strife... the blade of the knife
    that pleads for me to take my life

    Its my life,
    always fishin for my expedition,
    my composition on display for your comprehension..


    enter whores to a place you never went before
    where glass dicks are broken in your pussy for intercourse
    and of course it takes place in the mind of insanevillian
    where pains buildin, only released when i flow
    my brains spillin hatred onto these pages, outrageous rages
    waiting to be free and cageless, and im nameless
    only answering to my mask of death
    my life support drowns as i grip a flask for breath
    ask the meth about the drain life has insisted
    resistance is futile, everlating life i missed it
    kissed it all goodbye, easy as one nigh stands
    like the white man cut off the indians like a night stand
    i fight man, what good does religion do you?
    a christian would tattoo jesus on his dick, to put god in you
    what to do? sit back and cry at the cards your dealt
    then put faith in a higher power, cuz you have no faith in yourself
    as the floor melts due to my acidic perception
    my confessions of hard truths lead to my misconception​
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  6. Kuja

    Kuja Jack Skellington

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  7. doYen

    doYen Man Above All

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    kuja...

    to start i have never read your work and here are my thoughts and obstructive criticism the piece for me started slow in regards to flow and rhyme scheme but the usage of imagery gave the mood of your piece life and for me it kept me reading although i'm a fan of multi-syllabic rhyme your imagery and story it self kept me tuned in and by the last line i wasn't blown away but satisfied overall good piece strong meaning and the little twist was good i could close my eyes and almost imagine it .... 8.1/10


    IV....

    sup bro how you been it's been a while, anywaysorry for the unnecesary small talk, to the verse or let me say song, in a text point of few this was cool but it just seemed more like a reflection of you in a nut shell, it was hard to find a flow being i had no beat where i started catching a rythem in places it faded, i'm sure this would be an ok album cut, but for the topic to "I" i would have went more into detail and had a stronger peice then this, not saying it was bad i just wanted more, on a short note that would have been my critique minus your explanation above, however, it was still decent, good job my freind i'd like to hear the audio shoot me an e-mail .... 7.5/10


    OVERALL....


    this was a decent champ match not the best i've seen but kuja has potential in this league, and well I know what IV is capable of, with that being said IV is fam but the better man this week was KUJA/vote
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  8. Insanevillian

    Insanevillian STILL in CHARGE

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  9. Cereal_Killer

    Cereal_Killer no ESCAPE

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    Ku:
    You always paint such a marvellous picture with your words, smooth and subtle.. This had such strong emotion in it without being over powering.. You can feel the connection through the war torn characters and the twist at the end was sweet.. Pretty cool drop dude.. Nice one..

    IV:
    Jam packed with emotion.. This was purely a drop of your life, essence of IV lol.. but seriously it was pretty cool.. The rhythm of the piece was solid and so was your structure.. I like the personal touch and it did sound nice on audio..

    "a christian would tattoo jesus on his dick, to put god in you"

    ^LMAO

    Sweet drop dude..

    Vote = kuja

    His portrait of even a war environment is displayed with such grace.. I dont want to take anything away from IV's personal encounters but damn Kuja delivered some smooooth work.. Top match guys and GL
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  10. Defcon_5

    Defcon_5 Relax and take notes

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    gotta roll with kuja here, although i feel his piece was missing something to really grab the reader into u, IV i can tell ur piece was more of a song than a story. I haven't listened to the track due to my net being messed up but it read just like a song. Kuja had a nice piece, lots of imagery in it but in my opinion he took too much time describing the scene around this soldier than he did developing his story but in the end it still grabbed my attention more than IV's piece

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  11. pestilence

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    This is the one thing that I had a hard time with in this league.

    I'll explain.

    Kuja. Pretty good story. If you would have added more bars... IMHO... I think it would have been better because none of your bars disappointed me at all... therefore, I'm assuming by adding more it would have been more impressive. Like I said imagery was good... I could have imagined it better in a 64 bar piece. Your flow and structure are very smooth as well. That's something I need to do in my writings. I can take a tip from you here on how to. Well done.

    IV- With that said ^^ I would have probably rathered to have listened to your piece more than Kuja's in an audio format. I think thats based on my tastes though as I don't like war anything (movies, shows, games... and I guess literary pieces either)... and with that also being said... What you have here is a song... and I don't know if its a song thats really geared to what people try to do in this league... (and I totally get it... I would never ever listen to anyone try to rap what I write for this league... I, personally, think it would be bad)... but overall I liked this...

    Vote- Kuja. And it was pretty close but I liked both. As doyen said, I know too what IV is capable of in this style of writing and he could have won this battle.... but Kuja just had him in this matchup.

    Although... IV... I would like to hear this... and I hardly listen to any type of hip hop music.
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  12. breathlesss

    breathlesss Registered Sex Offender

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    well, i liked both of these, but one i liked much much better

    kuja
    your story had good imagery and empathizable feelings, although the story was fairly simple, the way it was told drew me in, the flow and rhymes were very on nothing super spectacular, but no real complaints there, and the end, i actually didn't really take a good look at the picture before hand and didn't notice the tank, i read the battle tank moved on line, like, what's he talkin' about, then looked at the picture and it was a nice wrap up twist ending. i like how it was brought from like terror to safety and creature comfort and building up to a nice positive ending, then wham...they die, but i sorta felt good for them, like, the battle was won, they died in their sleep rather than suffer being shot...nice piece all around

    IV
    i did like this lyrically, but it just wasn't too engaging to me, just another story of a hardlife teen, drugs debt and deity stuff, as a random song i could see liking it, but the lyricism, although nice, was not enough to trump a good story, some of the rhymes were repeating words or just a very basic "first thought" word to rhyme with, not really bad in song, but, definitely lacking in a written format, i did however really like the meaning of the bridge/hook thing, but the word choice just seemed off, regardless though it was still alright as a whole

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  13. Shadow

    Shadow Kotaro's Master

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    Kuja wins 5 to -4
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  14. Pent uP

    Pent uP I'd Like to Fight Ten Men

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    Super last minute votes

    Kuja - Your verse had good imagery and a nice structure to it. I think you did well with the flip in such a medium sized piece (in reference to the lines used). You could work on your rhyming mechanics a bit but the wording itself was pretty good.

    IV - I like the topical approach - its something I've found rare from you. Your piece had better flow and was more reflective than your opponents. I think that your approach was a little 'flat' in the sense that it could've been more creative.

    overall - I think the creativity behind kuja's verse edged it for me - it made the verse more engaging.

    Kuja
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    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

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