[Week 49] 9. Vern Acular(0-0) vs 10. Racecar(0-0)

Discussion in 'The Rapmusic Storytelling/Topical League' started by Tacky Jones, Aug 2, 2011.

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  1. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

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  2. Vern Acular

    Vern Acular 12x RSTL Champ

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    first of all...
    i'm what you would call an oxyMoron...
    you know...perfect flaws
    good at being bad....sad when im happy...nervous...calm
    i used to feel like a king...
    but since have reduced to a worthless pawn
    hell...i bought a pre-pay phone for a curtain call
    but to be honest...
    i couldn't afford the family plan...
    i took life as a joke...
    and let Seth MacFarlane teach me to be a family man
    what can kill a relationship?....well...mis-understandings can
    and to say the least...
    chasing the beaver made me a man thats dammed

    secondly...
    and here's the interesting thing...
    my ex-wife...
    well she started as merely a sexy fling
    and then time progressed and well i gave her everything
    so when she left i told her and confessed it stings
    and poured my heart out...
    but she quit fighting...
    basically retired and "left the ring"
    and oh sweet lord the stress it brings...
    and needless to say...
    she went away...pointing and laughing at me everyday
    i thought every moment for me to escape
    the pain i was in would to be in a grave...
    and then it happened...

    Chapter 3...
    see after me...she had it easy living so happily
    her friends and family had her back...
    and well...she had her back to me
    and not to be repititous but i wanted her back with me
    and instead of using sentences with "I" i wanted it back to "WE"
    who knew it would last for weeks...
    I was slowly trying to dream... and she was fast asleep
    nothing seemed to bother her i thought it had to be
    a reason why this happened but then the facts would leak...

    and here it is...
    another man was involved...it's pretty typical right
    but it's my own fault...that im alone caught up missing my wife
    we started off in love but i didn't finish it right
    and i guess that's the main reason someone else is with her tonight
    i had every opportunity to fucking fix it and fight
    but instead i took a notch from the bucket list of my life
    and what sucks is i did it twice...see i slept with a married chick
    a vicarious thrill filtered through feelings i carried it
    as a burden and buried it...in the area where he is
    yea this is another murder story but somewhat hilarious

    Final Chapter...
    and I guess i'm sharing the title
    here is Singing The Blues with the next american idol
    see my wife found another man so now i share with a rival
    a love triangle not found anywhere in the bible
    it's apparantly vital explaining...remember the bucket list
    well...I wanted to have a manage... me my wife and another chick
    and what's really funny is...i didn't know but she wanted it
    as much as i did...and so we confronted it
    and so i confess...
    with in time we both changed...and with both times undressed
    when i changed she was still her...and that's when we tried some sex
    who knew sleeping with my wife after "I" changed...
    was something that "I'D" regret
    but then SHE changed...
    and well she slept with a lot people
    and the funny thing is one of they guys was my alter ego
    now flip that...see her doing the same exact thing...
    and you bought the sequel...
    cause you watched the preview...
    when i cheated on her with HER alter ego

    so in conclusion...
    it's confusing i get it...im so alone
    cause i went back to being myself and well she became a rolling stone
    but eventually...she was back and the fact is we hold our own
    and now my bucket list has a scratch through...
    fixing a broken home



    :: Write the poem needed to fix your broken home ::​
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  3. Resilient.

    Resilient. .. . ..

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    I would've no showed, too. This will be verse of the week.
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  4. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    Vern - I like your written voice here and the way it pushed the narration in a comforting, some what familiar voice. It moved so WELL for me up until the Chapter three start. After this point the story KIND OF fell in on itself, having to really stretch out more as the lines bars shown me as I read. I felt that the second half really had to make up for the breeze and lazy fair of the first movement before chapter three.

    Still, a solid drop. Somewhat dragging on but you know what ? you really tied in the topic and picture fantastic. Great verse, great voice. Maybe some more images ? I don't know if it needed any but I'm sure it could have helped to reduce the line stretch transition that occurs around Chapter three. This is just me. I Can't wait to read more of you , honestly.
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  5. PerfectoUnoJr

    PerfectoUnoJr RM Jobber

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    I can't say muh more than Coup did, but I'll add that I think your writing is a tad forced. I like feeling a flow within each verse and seeing it build, or decrescendo. And while the overall story had a a great flow, the individual verses, I feel, did not. I think that's what causes the "drag," especially in the 3rd chapter.

    I swear dude, if you work on that, you'll be one of the hardest cats to beat here.
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  6. Resilient.

    Resilient. .. . ..

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    He's one of the GOATS, man. Do you know who Vern is?
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  7. PerfectoUnoJr

    PerfectoUnoJr RM Jobber

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    See my post count? haha. All I saw was the 0-0
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  8. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

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    Vern wins by no show
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