[Week 44][Champ] C. The Marshall(3-2) vs 2. Resilient(3-0) (resilient wins)

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  1. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

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  2. Resilient.

    Resilient. .. . ..

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  3. the marshall

    the marshall New Member

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    i'll go 14 fella
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  4. Resilient.

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    Look..

    He’s getting taken apart..
    Get maimed in the park when I’m scraping the yard..
    The RBL is 12 deep - that’s the only reason you made it this far..
    Save your punch, get maimed son - you’re gay as fuck..
    Leaving my balls in marsha’s face like the Brady Bunch..
    He loves cock and balls, no lie he’s soft and all..
    It’s true that only a woman would be seen rocking shalls.. (shawls)
    This whore won’t compete, You champ? Biggest folklore I can see..
    ‘cause you beat days (daze) - let’s see if you can last more than a week..
    But hey don’t brag about beating him - he was a paper champ..
    I’ll cut through you like I’m a scissor - and you’re just a paper, champ..
    Work on your concepts ‘cause the readers’ ears are bleeding of course..
    ‘n if you’re having that much trouble with vocab… Read a thesaurus..
    Listen marshall you can’t touch me, by far I’ll score best..
    You didn’t battle last week
    …… It was a contest to see who’s bars are more stretched!
    I’m an inhuman fucking entity, You can’t match this much intensity..
    ‘n you’re the marshall? Bro - I’m elected into the fucking presidency..
    You’re getting stepped on again, I’m not only talking ‘bout bars..
    But this isn’t the first time we heard of someone walking on Mars..
    I thought it'd be hard beating you, of course they were lying..
    Unfortunate kid, what’s your excuse this week? To poor to be trying?
    I’ll spray you with words, get capsized - fact is you’re drowning..
    You’ll be 3-3 after this match..
    .. Probably the only time in life you’ve ever batted 1.000!



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  5. the marshall

    the marshall New Member

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    chicks love my confidence, but Res is a sad subtle bum
    all ya bitches wanna lay on marsh
    ..... but after this battle we'll find you dead next to one

    http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusic-...0-0-vs-10-resilent-0-0-vs-11-blue-tongue.html

    "The fact you let me show up means you lost the battle
    Look at the ranks..
    My ass is on top of Tongue like tossing salad"

    ^^^^

    that line was a head scratcher, definitely a wrong move
    im gettin my cock licked by sluts, your at home fantasizing about blue
    throw the hands if you want to faggot...i'll end ya son
    all i need is 1 punch...& your mouth'll pop more then black bitches chewing gum
    c'mon fella why'd you even participate in the league
    we all know im better...hell, even you ranked yourself right under me
    you wrestle with those weak concepts, thats ya #1 flaw
    bitch... my punches'll snap ya head back harder than chris benoit
    fuck ya mag fella, & none of ya verses ever seem hard
    are talent level has a huge distance...cuz res has to squint to see mars
    when i put the iron to ya chest, you'll begin to pant
    if Res puts the iron to a guys chest...its more than likely nipple clamps
    you're in the champ match but i've faced better...ya worthless
    i've seen atleast 100 'defeat' lines...& they're still 100 times better than ya verses
    dont bring ya dukes to a knife fight...my nerves about to pop
    cuz my machete'll have ya head hit the ground quicker than a guillotine drop
    i'll play hero to this site, while your career hits the drain
    your styles so far in the hole, we'd swear it was cell mates with bane
    this champ match is a killer...so i'll hang you up for display
    once i twist his neck...you'll hear more click & pops than tap dancers on stage
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  6. Reptilian

    Reptilian I need live meals.

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    I dont know eiither battler.

    Both verses were decent, but the one that made me laugh my ass off was balls in marshas face. Id like to battle either one of ya, both got a nice format.

    Vote = resilient.

    Non biased. Good battle
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  7. the marshall

    the marshall New Member

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    If res chooses to accept that vote i will but to be honest that vote was wack. Like I said up to res.
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  8. Reptilian

    Reptilian I need live meals.

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    ..That was my first vote ever..how is that wack? You lost he won theres my vote....
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  9. Ravenous510

    Ravenous510 Well-Known Member

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    Resilient:

    Some of the concepts you used in this section of your verse shouldn't have really been entertained at all.

    The "balls on Marsha's face" line doesn't really work because the guy's name isn't "Marsha", it's "the Marshall". The name needs to be a precise homophone for the double entendre to work.

    Also, implying that he's gay and "loves cock and balls" because "only a woman would be seen rocking shalls (shawls)" doesn't make any sense either. This is because, once again, it's not a true double entendre.

    Yes, it's a true statement to say "only a woman would be seen rocking shawls", but that statement doesn't make any sense when you substitute "shalls" for "shawls". If you're attempting to imply that "shalls" is short for "Marshall", and therefore pertains to your opponent, then it still doesn't make sense, because "Shalls" is simply not plausible as a nickname for, or being short for "Marshall". If you would have gone with the singular tense of the word "shawl", as in "rocking a shawl", (Shall), I would be less persnickety about the line, and more willing to forgive the fact that the entire concept is flawed because women don't "rock" the men they're with...

    The above portion of your verse was much more on point, imo.

    Your concepts made more sense, and your syllables matched up better.

    Once again, though, watch your name flips. "Mars" wouldn't necessarily be short for "Marshall", (unless that's a common nickname for him on here, and I'm simply not privy to this fact because I'm new), however, this name flip works much better, imo, than the ones you attempted in the first half of your verse.

    The Marshall:

    This entire verse seems like it was written by someone who wasn't even really trying.

    No effort to come up with anything even remotely resembling complex wordplay, and your schemes all consist of overtly simplistic two, and sometimes even single syllable rhyme patterns.

    No offense man, but imo you need to read more, make a genuine effort to expand your vocabulary, and listen to quality emcees who write with complexity.

    This isn't 2001 anymore. While mainstream rap has certainly devolved, the underground has conversely evolved, and right now it seems as if you're catering to those who are emersed in the former.

    My vote: Resilient

    EDIT: Btw, Reptilian, why should you have to state that your vote in this battle wasn't biased?
    Do you normally vote with bias, which compelled you to feel the need to inform everyone that this one vote in particular was abnormally unbiased?
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  10. SonnyDaze

    SonnyDaze 7 train heavyweight

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    Resilient


    He’s getting taken apart..
    Get maimed in the park when I’m scraping the yard..
    The RBL is 12 deep - that’s the only reason you made it this far..

    Off to a good start.


    Save your punch, get maimed son - you’re gay as fuck..
    Leaving my balls in marsha’s face like the Brady Bunch..

    ^^^Looks like we have some subliminal biting going on here. I said that line the week you signed into the league and I'm pretty sure you read the battles that week.

    He loves cock and balls, no lie he’s soft and all..
    It’s true that only a woman would be seen rocking shalls.. (shawls)

    I’m all for name flips but this is pretty forced.


    This whore won’t compete, You champ? Biggest folklore I can see..
    ‘cause you beat days (daze) - let’s see if you can last more than a week..

    It hasn’t been used too much recently, but ‘daze’ and ‘week’ wordplay has been played out to death over the course of my time here.

    But hey don’t brag about beating him - he was a paper champ..
    I’ll cut through you like I’m a scissor - and you’re just a paper, champ..

    These types of punches can work, but I think this was pretty forced


    Work on your concepts ‘cause the readers’ ears are bleeding of course..
    ‘n if you’re having that much trouble with vocab… Read a thesaurus..

    This was cool.

    Listen marshall you can’t touch me, by far I’ll score best..
    You didn’t battle last week
    …… It was a contest to see who’s bars are more stretched!

    Decent punch, but this is your 3rd couplet dedicated to a battle… that he won. Just feel like you’d be more effective talking about another topic.

    I’m an inhuman fucking entity, You can’t match this much intensity..
    ‘n you’re the marshall? Bro - I’m elected into the fucking presidency..

    You almost pulled this one off but your final punch had one too many syllables in it and just threw everything else off.

    You’re getting stepped on again, I’m not only talking ‘bout bars..
    But this isn’t the first time we heard of someone walking on Mars..

    ^^^^So we have the same played out concept that I used last week, but you used it less creatively.

    I thought it'd be hard beating you, of course they were lying..
    Unfortunate kid, what’s your excuse this week? To poor to be trying?

    Filler

    I’ll spray you with words, get capsized - fact is you’re drowning..
    You’ll be 3-3 after this match..
    .. Probably the only time in life you’ve ever batted 1.000!

    This line looks good as text but if you said it out loud it would make no sense. He’s not 3 for 3… if he was his record would be 3 and 0.

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    The Marshall

    chicks love my confidence, but Res is a sad subtle bum
    all ya bitches wanna lay on marsh
    ..... but after this battle we'll find you dead next to one

    Alright start.

    9. Muti (0-0) vs 10. Resilent (0-0) vs 11. Blue Tongue

    "The fact you let me show up means you lost the battle
    Look at the ranks..
    My ass is on top of Tongue like tossing salad"

    ^^^^

    that line was a head scratcher, definitely a wrong move
    im gettin my cock licked by sluts, your at home fantasizing about blue

    If you’re gonna quote something, you better be creative with the punch. This was okay but could’ve been better.

    throw the hands if you want to faggot...i'll end ya son
    all i need is 1 punch...& your mouth'll pop more then black bitches chewing gum

    Ha, nice.

    c'mon fella why'd you even participate in the league
    we all know im better...hell, even you ranked yourself right under me

    Not bad.


    you wrestle with those weak concepts, thats ya #1 flaw
    bitch... my punches'll snap ya head back harder than chris benoit

    Alright.


    fuck ya mag fella, & none of ya verses ever seem hard
    are talent level has a huge distance...cuz res has to squint to see mars

    I had a punch about the distance b/w myself and Mars last week but I think you switched it up enough that it was effective here.

    when i put the iron to ya chest, you'll begin to pant
    if Res puts the iron to a guys chest...its more than likely nipple clamps

    This could’ve been really good but just got a tad too wordy.


    you're in the champ match but i've faced better...ya worthless
    i've seen atleast 100 'defeat' lines...& they're still 100 times better than ya verses

    Meh, nothing special.

    dont bring ya dukes to a knife fight...my nerves about to pop
    cuz my machete'll have ya head hit the ground quicker than a guillotine drop

    Decent.

    i'll play hero to this site, while your career hits the drain
    your styles so far in the hole, we'd swear it was cell mates with bane

    Decent wordplay but the monosyllabic punches are starting to hurt you.


    this champ match is a killer...so i'll hang you up for display
    once i twist his neck...you'll hear more click & pops than tap dancers on stage

    Meh, okay punch. As a closer I don’t like it a lot though.


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    Resilient’s strong point was that his shit was structured well and a lot of his punches sounded good.

    Marshall’s strong point was that he was consistent all around- content, punches, flow.

    However, Marshall had a lot of monosyllabic punches, and that takes away from a verse despite decent wordplay and metaphors intertwined. A champ should hold themselves to a higher standard.

    On the other hand, I had a lot of issues with various parts of Resilient’s verse- biting, using played out wordplay, forced wordplay, overusing schemes, lines not making sense. Your verse just lacked proper depth beneath the surface.

    Vote: Marshall

    Both verses had there fair share of flaws. Marshall just did less to shoot himself in the foot.
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  11. Quriosity

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    Resilient's walking on mars > sonny's shit. Real talk.

    I'll vote here.
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  12. Tacky Jones

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    Res:

    Save your punch, get maimed son - you’re gay as fuck..
    Leaving my balls in marsha’s face like the Brady Bunch..

    This whore won’t compete, You champ? Biggest folklore I can see..
    ‘cause you beat days (daze) - let’s see if you can last more than a week..

    You’re getting stepped on again, I’m not only talking ‘bout bars..
    But this isn’t the first time we heard of someone walking on Mars..


    Marsh:

    that line was a head scratcher, definitely a wrong move
    im gettin my cock licked by sluts, your at home fantasizing about blue

    fuck ya mag fella, & none of ya verses ever seem hard
    are talent level has a huge distance...cuz res has to squint to see mars


    vote-Res
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  13. the marshall

    the marshall New Member

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    Just for clarification. 2-1 Res, Reptilians vote was trash.
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  14. Resilient.

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    I did not see that line from gramur. And if anything it's a flip not a bite. But okay my bad. Same thing with the mars line. Again no bite. Maybe a flip but mine was def better in both instances. And it's 3-1 unless a MOD says that vote doesn't count
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  15. Donis

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    Hard battle to call. Frankly, I wasn't really impressed with either verse. Both were ok, I guess.. just nothing that jumped out at me as being particularly witty or unique. Res followed the more traditional text battle format.. and was a little more polished, for lack of a better term.. Marshall's verse came off like a beginner's (no offense) in some ways, but some of his punches were direct, if not simple.

    This was really close. I think I'd probably give the edge slightly to Res. Just seemed like he put a little more thought into it.. Got him the slight victory this week.
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  16. Quriosity

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    i'll vote if this stays open until tomorrow. if not, good match. i'm in a hotel in chattanooga and no time to vote now, but i've read it.
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  17. BarZ.

    BarZ. Over Everything

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    i did a full breakdown and it said somtin bout expired tokens.....


    VOTE = MARSHALL

    he had the best bar of the battle with the BANE LINE....

    Res ya verse was decent.. i explained how your ball in marsha face line is forced cuz no1 calls him marsha and i can see if u said mars/marsh but just cutting out 2 letters of someones name to make a punch - NO...
    the Shawl line was forceed too.. only good line to me was walkin on mars

    Mars had the squint to see and bane line n another 1... he had better plans of attacks SNL: please cut out all that gay shit - no1 wants to read all that homo stuff
    v - marsh for better thought out verse nd less filler
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  18. Quriosity

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    res wins.

    i may edit a vote in later, just to provide my feedback. best match i've read thus far since returning though.
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