[Week 44] 7. ikon211(0-0) vs 8. Got Life?(0-0)

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  1. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

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  2. ikon211

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    Wow, I finally get to battle Got Life. Well i'm adding a loss to my record -___- thanks a lot T.a.C, (g/l Got Life)
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  3. Got Life?

    Got Life? Resident Megalomaniac

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    How now brown cow?
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  4. Got Life?

    Got Life? Resident Megalomaniac

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    The world we hold in our hands...

    Lets imagine a world full of Angels and Demons,
    Where playing God isn't just an act of Morgan Freeman's,
    Where there's A for Asphyxiation and also for Angels,
    Yet where are all the angels when a baby gets strangled?
    So we Blame it on Demons cause B stands for Bombs,
    But as I think of Saddam's, I start to forget about Balms,
    That sooth my lips as I Cry in the wind over Cancer,
    Wondering if Chemo will ever be the answer,
    Yet D represents Death, Destruction, and Demise,
    Which is something for which we can't Devise a Disguise,
    So society casts Death in the form of Execution,
    Disregarding all the charm found in Elocution,
    Cause we're far to busy cheering on the prosecution,
    Which is just a contribution, to all the systems Flaws,
    Still we all wish to Fly like that bastard Santa Claus,
    And the clause of this effect is Gonorrea in retrospect,
    But the Garden of Eden is still something we suspect,
    Was a lie brought into our Homes by a church we trusted,
    As street regimes inject Heroin & leave dead sluts busted,
    Out on their ass with Hope lost in a distant Haze,
    But for the Horse she'll lick your dick 5 different ways,
    Still every one in this Inbred Incestual taboo society,
    Washes away Independence along with our sobriety,
    Eating away 40 grand a year to keep some bastard in Jail,
    So as we Jog away our stress we hope good will prevail,
    As we welcome in the sale of countless Kilos of Ketamine,
    Worshipping with Kindness every last blessed smithareen,
    Imagine still that Laughter never cured Leukemia,
    But Paula from the real world is still battling bulimia,
    So we'll Murder the youth as we Murmur in ignorance,
    Cause Masking Masculinity is often a cause of impotence,
    At least we avoid Negligence, Never Neglecting Nymphos,
    Yet we resurrect the Narcissism & start callin females sick hoes,
    But it's ok cause we'll pretend we never gave Opium grants,
    As we smoke up all the plants and Orgasm in our pants,
    So hallucination arises within this vacant nation,
    Seeking sedation, we've been Popping Pill after Pill,
    Yet we know that the Pilgrims are still likely to kill,
    That Persecuted and devastated Quiet Queer,
    Because the Quest to enlighten has you left in fear,
    Raping, Ravaging, and Resurecting all the unknown,
    And even a Rainbow has its own Racist clone,
    That has all the homeless drenched in acid Rain,
    As Serpents drain life from all the innocent Slain,
    Yet these Serpents are corporate and still make Slaves,
    Of heroes with Tuberculotic and Terrorized graves,
    Since Terrorist still petrify a world based on Trade,
    Although the Umbrella Used to block the rain is frayed,
    And the Urchin eating out your heart still betrayed,
    The trust we lost that breeds Vigilantes with Vendettas,
    As Vigor leaves your lungs when you lock lips with Berettas,
    Upon the Whipping Winds of vicious Wintry Weathers,
    Never Worshipping mother nature's leathers or burly feathers,
    As our lack of X-ray vision lets Xerox mannequin these candidates,
    So X still marks the spot for these Xenon gassing magistrates,
    Yapping Yuppies Yearning Yearly for preteens that hide infections,
    Yet the Youth's distortion is bounced of a Yeung-ling's reflection,
    And imagine a life expectancy where Zero is the true projection,
    Cause as you open up ya eyes you'll see the the twisted resurrection,
    Where our lonely lady liberty is drowning in a sea of bigotry,
    Yet as long as her torch is still sponsored by Geico,
    I can convince your teenage beauty queen that all she needs is lypo,
    So when you stop imagining and realize it's reality,
    Learn to understand that God giveth brutality!

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  5. Benigno

    Benigno you can lose your life.

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    nice verse gl #Respect
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  6. ikon211

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    iight ima drop soon (dreading it though...) either way.... MAD verse GL?
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  7. ikon211

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    Live and die an assassin....

    (I used the assassin's creed pic.)

    Life as assassin theres two rules obeyed
    kill or be killed, last most allies betray
    on these feilds, I glide alert seeking my prey
    placed on this summits peak, my quest takes place

    I (altair) was demanded, annihilate nine victems.
    in search of loot held in their possession.
    I walk a difficult path, a blooded trail follows the steps
    enemys waiting for me to slip to capture my last breath.

    3 citys to travel 9 victems on my list for death
    staring opoun my first location, "this shall be a test"
    enter sanctuary 10 minutes exit without a scratch
    daggers jabbed in their abdomens, now 6 more left

    deep breath... now soaring Jerusalem's roof tops
    hit the next location, assanations guresome
    shatterd disks... no CD's picture spiral cords
    excerted from humans backs rived on the floor

    now i stand before the door, glancing the carnage
    it seems after assassintions i get encouraged...
    no time for boasting, my hardest confrontations aproaching
    this haze spreads as a wildfires flames... uncontrollable

    with a vibe danger soon to arrive
    and two assassins armed on each side
    I reach for this sword ready for war
    gettin hit twice across my left arm (blood leaks...)

    I throw blade hitting one in the throat
    then dodge a swing, that should've claimed my soul...
    but it didnt, so i remain fightin' prepared and-
    swingin' with all my force... my enemys beheaded...

    thats eight down... so there's 1 to...
    there's one to...
    *takes fianal breath after a stabbing near lungs
    from the final assassin, witch wouldve been the next target...*
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  8. IAmBenT

    IAmBenT Eat a dick, faggot

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    Solid battle yall

    GL - Really one of the better Topical verses I have seen in a long time here at the site. I like the idea of incorporating the alphabet, although I didnt' see how you set it up, so it just kind of appeared, but it was well excuted. Great use of alliteration, sound devices, i liked that Yeung-ling/Youth line which was very clever, there were a great deal of witty lines throughout, with a sense of real anger and bitterness. THe pic jars a bit with what you are writing about, since its so damn innocent looking, but thats more an outside-of-the-verse thing. I think some of your lines were kind of stretched, but the imagery was super vivid and the whole verse was cohesive and clean.

    Ikon - wow man very descriptive verse, you have a real knack for plotting out a story in rhyme and keeping the action going, that is gonna serve you well in the future. the Assassin's creed character is really deep, I think you could have given us another side of him, his contemplative nature and maybe how easy yet disturbing it is for him to just kill and kill, what you did give us was a good deal of action and solid imagery. Your sense of what flows is really good, some misspelled words bugged me a little, but this was a cool verse.

    Vote-Got Life, i liked the idea of looking over the shoulder of a great killer like Altair, but GL really put together a powerful and smart topical verse off a picture that was rather so-so, that was hard to do.
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  9. Benigno

    Benigno you can lose your life.

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  10. Got Life?

    Got Life? Resident Megalomaniac

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  11. Benigno

    Benigno you can lose your life.

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    GL? you must be one of those inet cornball textcee's. check my history prick! im A REAL RAPPER and you can google that at your convenience. i voted for you and this battle was lopsided so i dont understand what you expected. DICK RIDING?? i dont even know you or have i ever heard of any of you fucks! and i personally know LUSH OKWERDS P-NUT DIZ ILLMAC CON ect... the list goes on fuck boy! i actually help out the BATTLE MOVEMENT in a REAL WAY. ima factor in this industry, you might wanna do your homework homeboy! nothing like you and your highschool girls!! FUCKIN PRICK

    i hope you bust a nut in your eye while you jack off to your WILD CRAZY TOPICAL BATTLE VERSE you wrote in 30 min. lol GOT LIFE? sounds like your nerd ass dont have A LIFE. Benzo Footwork Dinero - Public Figure - Tracy, CA | Facebook YouTube - ‪footworkinc's Channel‬‏ feel free to check me out cuz im a REAL person, not one of you behind the screen ass rappers that dont wanna show your real self. HERB!
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  12. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

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    Beni- please dont post things like this in the battles. it clutters them up. if you want to address gl, do it in the lounge thread.

    also, can you edit your votes so they're two full lines per person please?

    my vote will go here


    GL- wow. i really enjoyed this. i was getting near the end of the verse and wondering to myself where you were going with this. you tied it in well, and the verse worked great with the pic. i loved the alphabetical theme of the verse and a lot of the references you had in there were well done. i lol'd @ the Morgan Freeman line. glad you're back. doesnt look like you'll have much rust for the tourney.

    ikon- i dont know shit about assassin's creed so maybe i missed out with this verse. i thought it was descriptive as Bent said, but i also found myself losing interested while reading it. also, i thought you coulda worked to step up your rhymes, as they read pretty basic. last, you had quite a few typos in there. that took me out of the verse at times. thats a simple thing to fix, but it can hurt you in votes.

    kon, dont feel bad. GL is a monster. i saw you signed out, hope you sign back in soon. keep praticing and youll keep improving.

    vote- gl
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  13. ikon211

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    GL- this verse woulda been nice even without the alphabet incorporated into it, but that was like the icing on the cake. the lines were clever throughout, some more than others. overall a very very solid piece, probably the best i've read this week, but i just skimmed the others so far.

    ikon- correct grammar and spelling goes a long way... take a minute or two to proofread, it'll make it alot easier for people to read your stuff. spelling/grammar aside, i didn't get too much out of this one... you're able to tell a story and be descriptive, so i would recommend building on that. it's a good base, but now try to give more substance to the story.. you want to draw your reader into your verse, give them a sense of the character's personality or whatever you need to do to draw your reader in. also, instead of using emote type things such as "(blood leaks...)" try to just write it out as part of the piece. you could have easily done that in that instance. if it was a stylistic decision on your part, then so be it, but if not... i'd try to stay away from it personally..

    v- GL, for an overall better verse
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  15. Shadow

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    GL - Your verse was solid. The flow and rhymes were good. I thought the story was lacking in the excitement department but still was enjoyable to read. As usual, you develop your point nicely but i felt like this piece was just a piece to get you by this week. I think you knew who your opponent was and didn't really take it seriously. Still a solid verse


    ikon - This was a very difficult piece to get into. Your misspelled words were overwhelming and it was hard to really get into this. I felt like if you had wrote this in Microsoft Word, you would've gotten all of these issues out. I liked the concept of this though but you gotta go back to the basics and work on your words.


    V/ GL
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  16. Shadow

    Shadow Kotaro's Master

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    GL wins 4-0
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  17. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

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    GL wins 4-0
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