Week 4 RBL "First Blood" Event Card/Rankings/Lounge

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  1. Extreme Venom

    Extreme Venom Well-Known Member

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    True indeed.. lol RaZ is bout to be DQ'd like a muthafucka hahaha..


    Ay Riot The Mag it up.. Sticky that soooooooon!!
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  2. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    Get fuct ev.
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  3. Extreme Venom

    Extreme Venom Well-Known Member

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    lol Why? its just a prediction it has no power over the outcome.. Change your destiny like the heroes of Old Greece.. :afro:




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  4. lyricalpriest

    lyricalpriest Rap Games Dawson Creek

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    **throws a flag, blows my whistle"

    nobaswald said:

    "Lyricalpriest- Think I've mentioned before that your lines need better structuring as there is no sense of where the end of a line/rhyme is positioned."

    im not buying into the, "bar structure" bull shit

    aaaaaa aaaaaa aaaaaa bbbbbbb
    aaaaaa aaaaaa aaaaaa bbbbbbb

    verse's may be how moron's read their verses and shit

    but im writing like

    aaaa bbbb aaaaa ccccc
    aaaa cccc aaaaa bbbbb
    aaaa bbbb aaaaa ccccc

    bars and shit, he said my end rhymes weren't positioned right as well

    but i counter that statement w/ evidence

    "im perverse un-rehearsed so re-imburse me
    many have battled lpree but nan are worthy"
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  5. Mrjdm998

    Mrjdm998 New Member

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    "MRJDM and Murderous KEY's got a porno out called "It's-a-ATM" i was taping them, Riot
    was raping him, i was amazed @ THEM, MR. J.D.M. took the "murderous key" strokes like it
    wasn't phasing him.. i thought, "i didn't sign up for this gay shit, how much am i getting paid again?""

    Should be:

    "MRJDM and Murderous KEY's got a porno out called "It's-a-ATM"
    i was taping them, Riot was raping him, i was amazed @ THEM
    MR. J.D.M. took the "murderous key" strokes like it wasn't phasing him..
    i thought, "i didn't sign up for this gay shit, how much am i getting paid again?"

    It's simple.
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  6. niboswald

    niboswald Paradoxymoron

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    Dude, fast rappers do around 16 syllables per line to meet the 2/4/8/16 meter of rhythm. You AVERAGE like 22, and consistently write three or five lines in a rhyme scheme then move on to the next rhyme scheme without finishing it off properly into a 2 or 4 or 6 or 8. These conventions are there because they just make damn sense.

    Your entire second half is illegible, there is no sense of structure at all as to where one line ends and the next begins.

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  7. G Force

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    ^LMFAO^

    That shit is just too funny, mwahahaha..very true though!

    Oh nice verse at Dethstryque by the way! Dethstryque is very good and he will have to bring his very best to win i think!
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  8. lyricalpriest

    lyricalpriest Rap Games Dawson Creek

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    .. has any one ever watch a real battle in real life? that shit is not precise syllables and bar structure etc.. like o' dude is saying.. your make a grand point about the count's and measures ur absolutly correct, and i appreciate the analysis and all that..

    but i didn't realize, that's what win's battles, i thought it was content, garunteed when i rap this on vocaroo later and post it, that shit ur saying would hold no value, but i guess in text it does

    that shit tho, was a good break down, doesn't prove ur theory that u can't find the rhyme and shit, just proves that your holding my verse to standard formula's.

    here's an example of a twista vs and let's see if it matches ur standards.

    On the bus in disgust will I able to throw rocks in my pocket
    Nickel sacks in the other

    (18 syllables)

    For po-pos who watch, can't stop, it's hot
    But I gotta make a profit for my baby and my mother

    (25 syllavbles)


    Straight up hustler

    (4 syllables)

    What's the mental frame of mind
    That nigga had to have the roll
    Be sold, or be poor up in these city streets
    (ganga syllables over 18)
    Or with the pistol playin' for you Mr. Reaper
    Forgive those, I explode like c-4 so give me 50 feet

    (un even ammount of syllables)

    Bustin' shots in every directions
    a nigga stop a moment from getting made
    I done witnessed public aid, people get sprayed, the tip raise
    And momma cry, why my bills won't get paid
    If I have to I'ma send cheese from blows
    Nobody can hurt me or run thugsta greed, GD's or foes
    Workin' the spot 'cause we need some clothes
    Who ever thought I'd be making money off of my CD's and shows
    My crib got gats in the hall, rats steady crawl
    Roaches comin' out the cracks in the wall
    On the tip, bust it with my back to the wall
    Work my way up to an ounce, now I'm back to a ball
    Now I fin to spend stacks at the mall
    Bend the blocks on barbers hopin' my profits stack a bit taller
    Twista AKA "The Bitch Caller", bring your money to the mob
    Just to be a pimp-shit talke


    im not gonna get into the whole verse like that, and maybe i am counting the syllables wrong or the bars wrong, but im sure 10 years of studying music, i wouldn't be that naive and ignorant.
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  9. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    Heh, Im just talking shit. Truth is I'm a complete newb in RBL battling. I'm not a great or even good and I understand that. You guys are impressive with the verses I've read here. Honestly, I underestimated the art of a good dis.

    Good job everyone. I'll keep working on this way of writing .
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  10. HeartCloaker

    HeartCloaker Winter is coming

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    I agree, syllable counting is complete crap.
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  11. Mrjdm998

    Mrjdm998 New Member

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    In the end there's zero reason why you can't structure your verse in a way which makes it wasier on the reader.
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  12. Wo0dY nAiLz

    Wo0dY nAiLz aka Skrewman Plankwood...

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    in the end, all of you worthless faggots are going to die. hopefully from an aids related illness.
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  13. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

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    jus clarifying, verses are due friday, right?
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  14. lyricalpriest

    lyricalpriest Rap Games Dawson Creek

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    i think that i don't agree w/ none of the comment's that it's hard to find the flow in my verses. i got like a flow word almost every other word, some bar's aren't structured the same because of the content and the delivery.

    i won't change shit, because i don't know how, i been writing my lyrics like this since the begginning some will like it some won't

    fuck it
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  15. lyricalpriest

    lyricalpriest Rap Games Dawson Creek

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    I was thinking about how LP's an easy target
    And when I'm dissing him what I should start with
    First a question: Why does your wife’s secret garden
    Smell like delivery day at the worlds biggest fish market?

    (took 4 bar'a to get one diss off)

    Mate if you really want to be a black man so much
    I'll beat you that colour with my back hand and such

    (that's not gangsta, clever, or original..)

    Fact is LP you're overrated in your own thick head
    Won't swallow your pride but'll gobble a dick instead

    (almost lol'able..)

    Did you know MK has a leather daddy called big Abe
    Who's got AIDS, braids and multiple sex slaves

    (what's a leather daddy?)

    LyricalPriest thinks he has hard bars for days
    But if that's true why do you get zero praise?

    (i answere you, because people are illiterate and stubborn)

    "Well for ten points MJ I'll take it's cuz he's really wack
    And proper texting skills are something he clearly lacks" (CORRECT!)

    (again, you took 4 bar's before you even got a punch out)

    You two really need to get your bar writing enhanced
    I feel like Knoxville in the Ringer but neither tard has a fighting chance

    (pretty poorly formed concept, u feel like knoxville yada yada, wtf is this just clever wording?)

    Like a rock band with a piano after playing a set
    I'll smash Keys into little bits without breaking a sweat
    He calls himself Murderous because he wants to be a G
    But he's a moron so something about that seems off to me
    He'd probably get to the drug spot see crack and call cops
    Like "They said I'd be a runner and I wanted to be sponsored by Reebok!"
    He call's me MJ but that's something I can forgive
    Because I can turn MK into a zombie like in the Thriller vid
    Neither of you two can avoid mentioning I'm a "limey ass Brit"
    But those bars will be like American beer - Weak as piss!
    And if you still want to do the English lines you best not forget
    America's UK's child so you should be thanking me for your every breath
    So I guess in conclusion after you take this L
    Don't say OMG it's for fucks sake and bloody hell


    LP, you a dour bitch, You got a house and kids. ( so im gloomy and got a house and kids)
    .But it’s Murphy’s law, none of it will amount to shit.(good flow @ least, good presonal jab)
    .LP, Are Vatican enthusiasts now battling like mook and shit?.(good flow, and flip n shit)
    .Is rap on his medulla when this priest isn’t screwin’ kids?.(GREAT FOLLOW UP BAR)
    .Entire Style Is a circus, You’re just a clown.(BASIC DELIVERY, BUT WHATEVER)
    .Wigga?? Bitch only transform whever there’s blacks around.(TYPO'S.. GOOD PERSONAL)
    .Ur punches are worthless, and ur skills getting’ worse now.
    .In fact, ur shits better when U take 90 Percent of the words out.
    .U fuckin’ suck and your verses prove it, now it’s got ur dick riders cursin’.
    .Cause this match will prove LP and mrj is actually the same person.
    .You missed me with 80 lines of shitty lines and a shitty format.( WHERE R U GETTING UR CALCULATIONS?)
    .Shatter the glass ceiling, now you know where the floors at.
    .Leave LP clueless and Hurt, I’m abusive with words.
    .You say UR self-employed, you mean U just too stupid to work.
    .Put Lp’s Best e-friend in a suitcase, Now who’s action packed?
    .And after this, Lpree will be looking for another site to post at.
    .Mrj face the facts, Ur not even ‘pose to be in this match duke.
    .I just had to make it obvious that last week wasn’t a fluke.
    .I’m Quick to abuse ur keys, I swing fists that’ll bruise ya cheecks.
    .I’ll leave mrj asss son’ed in more ways that a nudist beach.
    .Didn’t I jst beat this faggot leach?
    .My lyrical kung fu style will leave this faggot baffled and blue.
    .Put This bitch mrj on his back, with symptoms of Déjà vu.
    .Bitch Ur out of ya league,think u got a chance if ya prewrite ya verses?.
    .Ya words wouldn’t have a prayer if ya text messaged in churches.
    .A Mockery dissected, man, Your cockiness is reckless.
    .‘Case aiming to piss me off is tryin’ to pee erected.
    .Peep The next post. Vote – MK, Prophecy? You Guessed It!!.

    I'm so hungry on the mic.. yawl can-see-my-rib's

    im a animal like tyson..... "ima eat-these-kids"

    (OPEN JAB TO BOTH OPONENTS)

    suff-o-cate 'Em-to-death, if that's what it takes to live

    (NEXT BAR IS PUNCH @ THEM BOTH)

    make MRJDM998 earn respect....'that's what it takes to give

    (SINCE mk ALREADY HAS MY RESPECT, I FOCUSED ON MRJ, GIVING HIM ADVICE ON HOW HE CAN EARN MY RESPECT)

    the "fore-father's" of rap... are probly hatin'
    last week space-boy* was matched to battle me
    but then he got cold feet like outter space ice skatin'

    (A BIT DRAWN OUT BAR BUT, MORE OF A MOOD SETTER)

    I throw up on the mic 'riot' im just that ill
    I shoot to kill..a bandit will..make u abandon wheel's

    (META'S, WORD PLAY, MULTI'S.)

    so like polar ice gum these fake cat's should chill
    ...but "if you want it".... like "soul for real"...

    (META'S, PUNCHLINE, WORD PLAY)

    6 shot's = 3 separate different puncture wounds
    .............which one will heal?..............

    (3 SHOT'S 2 DIFFERENT PEOPLE, 3 SEPERATE PUCNTURE WOUNDS BOTH VICTIMS. 6 SHOTS YES!)

    im perverse un-rehearsed so re-imburse me
    many have battled lpree but nan are worthy

    (WORD PLAY, VOCAB, PUNCHLINE)

    Riot been tryna xpose me, fuckin phony, your no "og"
    riot be on some: tendoroni, read a novel, drink-some-tea, and be cozy, type Bologna!

    (PERFECTLY COMPOSED BAR, 6 DIFFERENT DISS'S AND PUNCHES IN 2 BARS C'MON, MY OPPONENTS DIDN'T HAVE 4 BARS WITH
    THAT MANY DISSES BACK TO BACK)

    does any one know how many assholes riot kissed to get modded and run the r-b-l?
    He don't kiss-n-tell, but i watched him kiss about 6-to-12 dicks-and-tails
    just to get his position like it was the christian's 'grail this snitch is stale.

    (WORD PLAY, MULTI'S PERSONALS,)

    MR-J.D.M i'll twist your cranium, i suggest you ingest some radium, get lynched & mamed again
    first thing that came to mind......when i seen this match up ........"aw shit these lamez again?"
    he must be eating beans, coz he's gassed up. but fuck him, the queen and everything in between
    don't ever say i should say thank's again.. when you where born the doctor said "it's a alien!"

    (FUCKING SUPERB LYRICISM, MULTIS, WORD PLAY, DISSES, PUNCHES, METAS,)

    MRJDM and Murderous KEY's got a porno out called "It's-a-ATM" i was taping them, Riot
    was raping him, i was amazed @ THEM, MR. J.D.M. took the "murderous key" strokes like it
    wasn't phasing him.. i thought, "i didn't sign up for this gay shit, how much am i getting paid again?"

    (NAME FLIPS, METAS, WORDPLAY, MULTIS)

    fuck this im goin on a vacation then..

    now... voting may begin


    NEITHER ARTIST HAD AS MUCH MULTIS, WORDPLAY, DISSES, AND PERSONALS, AS MY VERSES. U ALL CAN DISAGREE, BUT THAT'S THE
    HONEST TRUTH
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  16. HeartCloaker

    HeartCloaker Winter is coming

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    LP my leather daddy wants to know why you were talking about Space Cowboy. My leather daddy thinks it was irrelevant. I kinda need to get an answer out of you and give it to my leather daddy or she's going to start some trouble with me.
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  17. lyricalpriest

    lyricalpriest Rap Games Dawson Creek

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    so is a leather daddy

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  18. lyricalpriest

    lyricalpriest Rap Games Dawson Creek

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    u got dumb and dumber against a G...

    what are the odd's ima get slept on the 'net?
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  19. lyricalpriest

    lyricalpriest Rap Games Dawson Creek

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    this is hypocrisy at it's finest i swear..
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  20. lyricalpriest

    lyricalpriest Rap Games Dawson Creek

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    why is ur leather daddy a she?

    and is ur leather daddy.. allen knight perhaps?
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