[Week 36] [Contender] 3. ShadowWarriorfs(23-11) vs 4. T.a.C(2-2)

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  1. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

    Feb 25, 2008


    VERSUS DUE: Every Friday @ 11:59 PM PST
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    ed, but will not be considered a Champion until a win by vote
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    T.a.C- thedude8125
    ShadowWarriorfs- ShadowWarriorfs
  2. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

    Feb 25, 2008
  3. Shadow

    Shadow Kotaro's Master

    Apr 11, 2004
  4. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

    Feb 25, 2008
    3 hours after my brothers annoying perseverance
    Calling my mom, he was trying to get the clearance
    To order the WWE payperview to see Edge’s appearance
    And see John Cena win off R-Truth’s interference
    What a good day, the summer sun starting to shake winter
    Wrestling, Pepsi, and throwing down on a steak dinner
    Yep, life is good, my smile’s beam-a-glisten
    Now the shows over, it’s time to clean the kitchen
    Scrape dishes, wiping them with a soapy sponge
    Scrub the plate vicious, “God I hope we’re done”
    One more thing and then I’m about to dash
    But first things first, I gotta take out the trash
    Grab the bag, twist it tight as I’ve done before
    Walk out the kitchen, a few steps from the door
    I hear my mom scream with joy, it had me in shock then
    “Breaking News: We got him”
    I ran up stairs to see the news, couldn’t believe it’s true
    “We’re minutes from President Obama’s speech”, the proof
    My jaw dropped, standing in complete shock
    “Maybe this will be a holiday, Maybe we’ll get the week off”

    The speech is after the commercial, coming up fast now
    Shit, I gotta go quick and take the trash out
    I run down the stairs where I left it, floating high
    Hell yeah I was excited, I won’t deny
    Saw my neighbor pulling up, I had to break the news
    The face that was long associated with hate was through
    He got us once, but with the rest of his plans never
    His son asked who we’re talking about, “the evilest man ever”
    We high fived and I raced inside to watch the speech
    Obama approached the podium, a moment I could not believe
    Listening to the President, thinking of 9/11’s carnage
    When I heard Osama bin Laden died, where was I?
    Taking out the garbage

    Topic: Where was I?
  5. Shadow

    Shadow Kotaro's Master

    Apr 11, 2004


    The Interrogation

    “Are you comfortable?” He asked politely
    Her smile was timid as to not take him lightly
    He began to circle the table where she was sitting
    Slowly stalking her while mentally outwitting
    Her, He placed a cup of coffee by her on the desk
    Her lips puckered as she moved the cup to her chest
    He moved in close behind her like a cat in heat
    She panicked slightly as she felt his eyes on her cheek
    She remembered why he had called her to the station
    He started to ask her questions attempting to be patient
    Simple at first but eventually the difficult questions were asked
    “Where were you March 16th at 8:27pm?” he asked
    She remained silent, too frightened to speak out
    He told her that he could be trusted, silence, he begun to shout
    “Where?!?!” he yelled, slamming down a folder full of papers
    “I was home taking a bath, shaving my legs with razors”
    He continued to press harder hoping to crack her open
    She began to break, slowly changing her story hoping
    To ease the interrogation process but he persisted
    Tears started to flow, his voice grew calm, still he resisted
    She was at his mercy now, all she did was violently sob
    He remained unaffected after all, it was all part of the job
    She began to confess her plot to kill her husband for selfish reasons
    Strapped for cash, insurance money would help her enjoy the seasons
    So she prepared his bath when he returned home from work
    She walked him toward bath to soothe the muscles that hurt
    Construction normally takes its toll on him so he didn’t suspect a thing
    He grabbed her before he got in, almost as if to take her under his wing
    Once he got in, she took her hair dryer and tossed it into the bath
    He seized and splashed but eventually he stopped, she gasped
    The interrogator called in the police to have her arrested
    She plead for mercy, claiming she got emotionally invested
    He turned away, ignoring her cries as she was removed from the booth
    An emotionless man whose only desire is to get the truth…
  6. lyricalpriest

    lyricalpriest Rap Games Dawson Creek

    Apr 12, 2000
    T.a.C.- this story was a honest, personal experience, narration. your rhyme scheme is great, although can come off immature at times. considering the word choice, and vocabulary. the story line was unique, also seeing as it was based on reality it is a classic verse. simple, but fully developed. good twist. how in the end u where taking out the garbage how ironic is that?

    Shaddow- Sound story, structure was right on, the story line was rushed, but your mechanics' were elaborate. you painted good imagery, but the story was to open ended. not enough character development. your word choice comes of more mature then tac's but your effort seemed lacking.. story was predictable.

    tacs was just a lil more crowd orientated and more unique.

  7. IAmBenT

    IAmBenT Eat a dick, faggot

    Mar 16, 2011
    Damn... this is close imo

    Tac- the flow was really well mastered. I love the personal attention to detail, and the great way you tied up taking out the garbage with Osama BEING garbage, real nice at the end. good, honest, direct storytelling here.

    Shadow- I really think you were on to something. Your story is actually really chilling, with this mulder-esque guy powertripping on a search for truth and ignoring the *unspoken yet heavy* likeliness of abuse. Everything here was understated, imagistic, with unique flow and vocab and also a good eye to detail.

    Vote -Shadow I just like his verse a bit more. technically yall are even, like LP Tac's verse is real pleasing and relatable, but I really liked shadow's drop this week
  8. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

    Feb 25, 2008
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