[Week 35] [Contender] 3. T.a.C(2-1) vs 4. IAmBent(3-2)

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  1. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

    Feb 25, 2008


    VERSUS DUE: Every Friday @ 11:59 PM PST
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    •If granted, the extension will override deadline for both participants extending it for no more than 24 hours
    •CHECK-INS are encouraged, but not required
    •Verses MUST incorporate AT LEAST 1 of the provided topics or pictures
    •A failure to show will result in a loss and a sign out by default
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    •A Championship Title WILL NOT be decided by way of no-show!!!
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    ed, but will not be considered a Champion until a win by vote
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    T.a.C- thedude8125
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  2. IAmBenT

    IAmBenT Eat a dick, faggot

    Mar 16, 2011
  3. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

    Feb 25, 2008
    lets have a different outcome this time. lol. you too bro
  4. IAmBenT

    IAmBenT Eat a dick, faggot

    Mar 16, 2011
    Encounter At The Lake


    Radio broadcast: Your attention please! This is an alert! A serial killer is at large. Please be on the lookout He has been spotted near Forest Lake! He is mentally unstable and extremely dangero-...

    The gloom shuddered with frost, he tossed his head back
    Drew in the sharp autumn air, sighed at his setback
    The car stalled, stopped, wouldn't start back up
    He sat, stressed, trying not to fret about his phantoms...
    The trees rustled, the breeze bustles a muffled cry up!
    It sounds like someone is out there among the briars..
    Seeing that his car is stuck for the time being
    He decides to find whoever might be screaming
    Perhaps if he can help them, they can help him
    He grabs his flashlight and heads into the dim,
    Dark forest in search of this unknown voice
    -Heart's hammering, but his sweat runs cold-moist-
    Each step crinkles leaves that increase trepidation
    The hoot of an owl gives his bowels hesitation
    His skin prickles up as the frost wind whispers
    a hiss, indistinct, but clear, says "Sister!"..!
    He stops in his tracks, ice-cold blood froze
    Just then wings flutter right under his nose!
    That's it! He quits this useless mission
    Turns back, --- then lurches at a distant vision
    Of a beautiful woman dressed in luminous white
    Who beckons him to her, then drifts from his sight
    This must be the distressed damsel, he thought
    But, funny,... she didn't seem troubled at all
    He runs after her saying "Hey lady, wait up
    My car's up the hill, can ya help me, I'm stuck!"
    But he gets to the spot where she stared, meekly
    And his question echoes into the air, weakly...
    The water of the lake laps the rocks lazily
    as the clearing breaks and the moon glows brazenly
    -Illuminates the stone cross of an unkempt plot..
    And the stench of wood rot makes his chest taught
    *Cough!*.. and the crow upon the cross flutters off
    As he inches closer to the age-weathered cross..
    Upon the soft earth he can vaguely make out
    Clumps of fresh dirt..then his lungs blurt with a shout
    "Oh my God! This grave's dug up and desecrated!"
    He had to warn the lady, this is something dangerous
    He peered into the hole and the casket was blasted
    But funny..no corpse and no bone fragments..?
    The radio said..shit! He didn't quite remember what..!
    He got up, but felt the shove of an icy finger's touch..
    All of a sudden, mud and earth filled his nostrils
    He tried fighting but was froze from his toes to his tonsils
    The only sound ringing was the shrill, loud, stinging
    Laughter of a woman dressed in all white, singing:
    "Now you will know, you will know, you will know
    What it is to be missed by your own, by your own
    You will be, here with me, and I won't, let you go
    Underneath the cross and beneath the stone"

    Radio: Authorities say the serial killer was found dead this morning, mysteriously buried in a grave by Forest Lake. Detectives are puzzled, as scrawled in the dirt beneath the headstone, they found the following message:

    Guilt is a snake that devours its tail
    Revenge stalks its prey until it is fed
    Sisters kissed death, together made pale,
    A demon's last breath, blushes them red.

    If anyone knows the meaning of this message, please contact your local authorities, as it may shed clues as to the mysterious death of the serial killer.
  5. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

    Feb 25, 2008
    sorry man. i slacked this week

    I’m 16, and I’ve already found my lovely bride
    Beauty queen, great personality, I’m such a lucky guy
    Every night I fall asleep dreaming we’re hugging tight
    I was so lonely before but now shes got me loving life
    Beautiful brown hair and eyes, tan skin
    I pray we can be paired for life, we’ve planned this
    Trip on her 18th to Vegas where we’ll elope
    My friends say it wont happen, but I’m filled with hope
    They keep telling me all these reasons to quit
    We’ve been together 6 months without even a kiss
    Not even a hug, and nothing beyond that
    I live in San Fran, she’s in LA, we’ve had no contact
    But we’re in love, you can tell by our nightly chats
    The day we met I said I liked her, and she liked me back
    This is real, hoping one day soon I’ll get to kiss her
    I was in her area last week but she had to babysit her sister
    Months back I was in Santa Barbara but she had no ride
    I told my best friend, he said “bro that hoe lied”
    I socked him in the nose and left him with a swoll eye
    Though I wasn’t mad, jus trying to fix my broke pride
    Becoming a recluse, my friends always taking the same jabs
    Saying dating an online girl makes me a lame ass
    But they don’t have the same bond me and Jane have
    So I live my life intermittently, only through AIM chats

    I’m 36 and I’ve already found my lovely man
    Every night when we fall asleep we’re hugging and
    He’s absolutely perfect, he can do nothing bad
    But he always works, I’m home running this fucking scam
    I’m a woman, and I need some form of attention
    So I created this character named Jane, born from rejection
    Told him when I turn 18 we’re going to run off to Vegas
    Served him up a load of bull shit and his dumbass ate it
    I felt bad at first, when it ends I’m sure he’ll jus forget me
    And if he doesn’t, fuck him, he’s jus a little net geek
    Said he’s a song writer and even wrote me a love rap
    Said I’m in LA, I’m in Portland, no contact, not like I’d touch that
    When he showed his pic to me I felt nauseated
    Day we met he said he liked me, so I felt obligated
    I just use him for attention with no emotional connection
    And he bombards me with this devotional affection
    Months back he wanted to see me, man he bothered hard
    I made up some lie that I couldn’t borrow my father’s car
    He told me his friends are on to me, tryin to end my lie
    But when they speak up they fight, he defends my pride
    He’d be the sweetest but he’s a geek mess, he’s not well known
    He’s a gullible idiot believing I have no myspace, facebook or cell phone
    Trust I’ll move on to the next once the winters set
    Fuck him, he’s barely a person…this is just the internet

    Online Dating
  6. IAmBenT

    IAmBenT Eat a dick, faggot

    Mar 16, 2011
    lol bullshit man this verse is awesome!:popcorn:
  7. fairydance2000

    fairydance2000 don't wait, Procrastinate

    Mar 10, 2004
    I am bent
    I liked your story and how it flowed nicely
    The wording was good; the imagery was awesome and powerful
    I enjoyed reading it and it kept my interest from start to finish.
    One of my fav’s of yours. Nice drop

    Flow was smooth. Rhymes were simple, but relevant.
    The imagery was ok, but I think you let me down with the story itself.
    I found I was a tad boarding in places; it left wanting more of something
    To hold my interest.
    Iambent’s story kept me involved all the way through as the story progressed.
    Vote iambent
  8. Shadow

    Shadow Kotaro's Master

    Apr 11, 2004
    Bent - I really like how you wrote this. You always have a great flow to your stories and you continue to improve week after week. The story developed nicely and it was interesting and entertaining. Good work

    T.a.C. - So this had good potential but the problem i had here was that the rhymes were kind of stale. I don't know if stale is the right word but they just did hit right to me. They felt forced and it was really noticeable. When you take your time, you lines are smooth and fresh but when you rush, they just don't make much sense. Not in a grammar way but just doesn't feel right. Other than that, it was a good story. Just needed a better delivery. Good work tho

    V/ Bent
  9. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

    Feb 25, 2008
    Bent wins 2 to -1
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