[Week 29] 5. nO gOoD!(1-0) vs 6. ShadowWarriorfs(19-8)

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  1. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

    Feb 25, 2008


    VERSUS DUE: Every Friday @ 11:59 PM PST
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    •Recycling is the equivalent to that of a no-show and will be treated as such, thus resulting in a loss in favor of the participant whom chose to recycle and a win in favor of his/her opponent
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    •If granted, the extension will override deadline for both participants extending it for no more than 24 hours
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    •Verses MUST incorporate AT LEAST 1 of the provided topics or pictures
    •A failure to show will result in a loss and a sign out by default
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    •A Championship Title WILL NOT be decided by way of no-show!!!
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    ed, but will not be considered a Champion until a win by vote
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    T.a.C- thedude8125
    ShadowWarriorfs- ShadowWarriorfs
  2. nO gOoD!

    nO gOoD! Life Music :: Press Play

    Apr 18, 2001
    Wassup bruh, let's do this..

    Let's go for Saturday ok, gonna try my best to include an audio each week.

    Good luck dude, may the best writer win ;)
  3. Shadow

    Shadow Kotaro's Master

    Apr 11, 2004
    Welcome to the rape wagon :)...Good luck

    Where’s daddy?

    I could hear him calling to me but where was he?
    The air here feels different; this feeling of peace is heavenly
    The breeze is refreshing and the sunlight is sublime
    And I am pain free which is the first in some time
    But where is daddy? He was just here sitting by my side
    What the hell is going on? Why is daddy trying to hide?
    My memory is turbulent like fog dancing upon the grass
    My head aches as I struggle to remember what happened last

    It was dark outside and the moon was full and vibrant
    The air was gradually cooling and the wind was dead silent
    It was a celebration and dad had just turned thirty-eight
    We left for the party at 6pm to prevent him from working late
    I could tell he was exhausted, after all, he was a single parent
    Bags under his eyes added to this but he did not making it apparent
    We arrived to the party as people were already starting to drink
    Carpet stained with Miller Lite, eyes glazed over forgetting to blink
    Dad became upset at the immature behavior, they knew I would be there
    He decided to say a few hellos before leaving, I told him, “That isn’t fair”
    He deserved to have some fun and I wanted this night to be special
    “You are the only thing that matters.” He said while leaving the threshold
    I smiled and began to sway in appreciation as he put me into his car
    We decided to get ice cream and cookies to celebrate his life so far
    Fifteen minutes into our trip, another car pulled up behinds us
    Honking their horn and waving as if they had been trying to find us
    Daddy became nervous as if he could smell the liquor on their breaths
    I asked “why?” and he said, “drunk driving causes a lot of deaths”
    They began following us, yelling and flashing their high beams
    Dad’s attempts at calming me were drowned out by my screams
    They pulled into the wrong lane and starting throwing beer cans
    Hitting the driver’s side window causing us to swerve into the sand
    Dad began to slow down as a car came speeding towards them
    They panicked and turned into us, we lost control as things looked grim
    Our car slammed into a pole, projecting me into the air, no sound
    As time seemed to slow down as I black out before hitting the ground

    That was all I remembered as suddenly things made sense
    I died in that accident, body impaled on a wooden fence
    The shock overwhelmed me and I couldn't help but be mad
    Tears ran down my cheek as I continued to call to my dad
    “Where are you?” I yelled as I suddenly appeared in a hospital room
    “Daddy!” I screamed as I ran to him but his face had a gloom
    I was just a whisper in the wind, as he just lay there depressed
    He sobbed asking God to bring me back while his hands beat at his chest
    He told God that I was his “little princess” as he curled up into a ball
    I walked towards him and whispered softly into her moist ear
    “I love you daddy.” I said as he quickly jumped up. “Could he hear?”
    I told him I would miss him and my death was not his fault
    He began to smile as if he had locked those words into his vault
    I started to leave his side, eyes flooded then I swiftly turned to him
    “I’ll wait for you.” I said as my hair was floating amongst the wind
    “Good bye…“ I said as I returned back. Years have passed and sadly
    I still wait patiently, wondering and asking myself, “Where’s daddy?”

  4. nO gOoD!

    nO gOoD! Life Music :: Press Play

    Apr 18, 2001
    Sorry shadow my week fell apart and didn't get the chance to write..


    Topic "Hero"

    Am I a hero?

    Or am I wasting my time?

    Because I... *write with a purpose,*

    lacing the rhymes..

    I need a ... Place to recline

    A place I can find..

    to get away from the daily pace of the grind.

    Can I save the world, from thugs with guns?

    Or can I lay back doin what I love for fun?

    I don't have no powers, to heal them bruises...

    All I do is make... some "feel good" music..

    I ain't a hero.. Just your everyday man

    Doin what I gotta do so I can raise the fam

    I play the hands that I'm dealt - live the ways

    I speak from experience, man I did my days..

    Locked up, aww shucks, man I'm in the pen..

    After the second time.. How'd I get pinned again?
  5. fairydance2000

    fairydance2000 don't wait, Procrastinate

    Mar 10, 2004
    Shadow warrior
    I enjoyed this story very much.
    The rhymes where ok. The flow was smooth throughout
    There was what I think is a typo I think it’s meant to be his not her.

    The imagery was very powerful and clear nicely described.
    It evoked powerful emotions, nicely done.

    No good

    Your flow was very nice, spot on.
    Rhymes were nice and smooth. A pleasing little ditty! I enjoyed reading it, it was fun
    I wish you had of had more time to put a bit more into this piece, it was very good but I felt it was cut short in so many ways.

    Vote :shadow
  6. Shadow

    Shadow Kotaro's Master

    Apr 11, 2004
  7. Cereal_Killer

    Cereal_Killer no ESCAPE

    Oct 25, 2002
    Your imagery was potent and you delivered a solid story with emotion and power backing it.. I think you have improved soo much dude your definitely becoming a killer in this league.. continue how you're going and you'll be able to body anyone..

    no good:
    So it sucks because i thought you where writing for your album, so im like man this dude is gonna drop heat.. so it definitely was a shame not to see a full verse but on the other hand at least you did drop something.. Nice job dude..

    vote = shadow warriorfs
  8. Riot

    Riot The Dark Hero.

    Feb 5, 2001
    Vote - Shadow.....Obvious Reasons.

    Shadow, Good Verse You always bring great detail and imgry to your verses which imo is the best element in storytelling, painting the scene and bringing it to life, and this peice was just that, very well illistarted and wording is well done.

    NG, obviously not a full verse, but I always love the different type of style you bring to this league, it's always a fresh gasp of air, hopefully one of these weeks you will have time to write a full verse cause you have the skill set to create a magical verse.

    Vote - Shadow.
  9. Shadow

    Shadow Kotaro's Master

    Apr 11, 2004
    Shadow up 3 to -3
  10. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

    Feb 25, 2008
    Shadow wins 4 to -4
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