[Week 20][Contender] 3. ShadowWarriorfs(12-7) vs 4. Breathless(7-12)

Discussion in 'The Rapmusic Storytelling/Topical League' started by Tacky Jones, May 29, 2012.

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  1. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

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  2. Shadow

    Shadow Kotaro's Master

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  3. breathlesss

    breathlesss Registered Sex Offender

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    Yea, me too, if I don't post by tomorrow afternoon, it will for sure be Saturday night, I get home from work at 11:30, so it might be a little after midnight
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  4. Shadow

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    Decided to do a stupid remix of "Best Thing I Never Had" by Beyonce'






    “Best Thing I Almost Had…”

    Why didn’t I fight for your love?
    A modest and polite girl who was above
    The glitz and glamour of day-to-day life
    I thought that I wasn’t ready to be a wife
    But I still loved you with every tear that I had
    Becoming trapped within the fears that I had
    I wanted to show you strings your finger uses
    Instead I hide from the blemishes, the bruises
    Because I already knew whom you would chose
    So I didn’t fight, I was just too afraid I’d lose

    All I could do was watch you hold her hand
    As chills swarm my skin I wanted you to understand
    But I couldn’t speak with the goose bumps holding me
    Hoping you would turn around so you could only see
    How much my heart aches for your kiss
    All I want is to be apart of your paradise, your bliss
    Feel your warm breath upon the back of my neck
    Hear you calling my name with no ounce of regret

    Yet you no longer see my face, you’ve become addicted to another
    Enjoying her taste as you tell me to refer to him as a big brother
    But I can’t keep watching you, my heart can’t take the pain
    So I decided to leave so hoping it would rekindle our flame
    Goodbye my love, my eyes just can’t spare any more tears
    I’ll wait for you always as a stronger woman without fears
    With my arms wide open but until then my heart remains sad
    Realizing that you were the best thing I almost had..



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  5. breathlesss

    breathlesss Registered Sex Offender

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    Stream of Blissful Piss Thoughts

    Ill let the truth speak solemnly from loose leaf prophecies
    So don't confuse grief when you know who leaves, honestly
    I knew these would posthumously lead followers to believe
    that the drama between the new age and nonmodern is not needed

    Who's sayin' that god wants us to stop thinkin' is stupid
    Its just a ruse makin' its rounds constantly, somehow, I grew out of it
    Its like I've found the fountain of youth, or I could move mountains
    but I don't wanna alter their view just to disprove doubters

    I'm deep, down in the groove with a smooth conscience
    consciously aware that where I'm goin' there's no use for logic
    No one'll choose to solve problems if the solution'll bruise the soft
    spot on their ego, this populace people call
    the human race needs to fall, we're a monument to evil
    let all of our monoliths with steeples teeter and topple over
    Realize your tithing pays paul and peter, not jehovah

    Do ya even want some closure? What about a little bit
    of lost composure, right at the moment
    you thought that this all would go where you wanted it
    its no fair to hominids, I don't care for ominous
    threats, even more so than cold stares from the opposite
    sex, this is how it connects so seamlessly

    From one line to the next flow, easily
    Lets go, piece by piece through the deepest regions
    of my innermost demons and beliefs, hell froze
    over some time between me bein' a peaceful fetus
    and what leads to these thoughts comin' from the mind of an evil genius
    intertwined in so tight of a weave no light
    can be seen through even the widest of cracks as it glows brightest

    Burning my insides as I wish to turn the tides of change
    But every sight's the same, hurt, despite the pain
    I've learned the right of way, and the right way to learn
    Yearned to fight the day, but each night takes its turn

    Whether for the worst or not, I've searched the plot I've led 'til now
    Perched upon a ledge of grounds not heard of, its settled down
    but the blood shed from my soul bled into this persona as it let it out
    So there's no more me left, just a whole lot of when and hows
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  6. TheInkwell

    TheInkwell New Member

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    shad: your song choice was hillarious. in typical shad fashion, the read was smooth and without any obvious flaws. the rhymes were pretty simple and even though what was presented had no flaws... there could have been a lot more presented. i'm attributing this to you giving yourself some rest before the tourney though, i'm sure most writers are.

    breath: being able to choose your own topic (and then choosing a topic that allows you to write anything) really worked in your favor. Some of the places where you chose to break up the stanzas seemed a bit off to me, but that's not a big deal. i can't help but wonder if you could have pulled this off if you had a more stringent topic though.

    shadow's piece was better written in terms of mechanics.. breath's had better rhymes. This time around, i enjoyed breath's piece a bit more so i'm going to give it to him.

    vote: breath
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  7. patrown

    patrown student for life

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    shadow- honestly.. great showing man. it's good to know your capable of normal human emotion. jk. but really, my girl read it with me and got a sad look on her face. BAM. mission accomplished right? right. As far as uh .. mechanics.. the words repeating didn't work this time. the conclusion felt like a conclusion and the introduction drew me in. simple rhymes hurt, and were made up for with sincerity. i takethe normal human emotion part back if that wierdness was as wierd as i think it was :\ trickery. either way, you got me + a passive observer feeling a bit glum. high five.

    breath - exact opposite. layout .. needed work. my advice to you if you care about doing your own thing and what i have to say is : cut your verses in half and put the end in the beginning and rework it from there. well. you know what i mean..
    excellent rhymes, great flow. some were hanging though.. you're strongest point I felt was hurt by inconsistency. the catchy flow at the end did bring me back a bit, but I never got into the story enough to relate to your piece in the way I did shad's. create characters, build new worlds.. do anything you want in them. and make it nothing like you've ever seen before.
    but keep doing your damn thing cuz you do it well.

    /v shad - sad puppy faces for the win.
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  8. Shadow

    Shadow Kotaro's Master

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    yea hive five back! lol

    Shad wins 1 - 0
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