[Week 19][Contender] 3. Breathless(6-11) vs 4. ChopChoiceBeats(1-2)

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  1. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

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    VERSES DUE THURSDAY @ 11:59 PST
    Line Limit: Minimum 8 lines, Maximum 40 (If opponent agrees, you may go over the line limit)
    NO BITING OR RECYCLING
    Biting/Recycling is the equivalent of a no show
    Extensions must be requested in your battle thread before the Thursday evening deadline. It is the opponents choice whether to allow the extension or not. Failure to accept/deny the request prior to the first vote being cast will result in the extension being allowed.
    If granted, the extension overrides the deadline for BOTH battlers
    A No Show results in a loss and automatic sign out
    If your opponent fails to show, you must still post at least 4 lines and 3 voting links for your victory.
    A title wont change hands by no show
    COMPETITORS MAY ONLY POST THREE TIMES IN THEIR MATCH. A CHECK IN, THEIR VERSE, AND THEIR LINKS. EXCESSIVE POSTING WILL RESULT IN A LOSS OF VOTES.
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    First battler to post is allowed to edit their verse up until the second battler posts theirs. Once the second battler posts, they are allowed to edit their verse until the first vote is casted.
    The Second battler to post cannot post more lines than the first. Doing so will result in DQ.
    Disruptive members will be banned from the league will and have their posts moved to the garbage bin thread.
    UNDER NO CIRCUMSTANCES CAN A NON-MOD MAKE A THREAD IN THE LEAGUE. YOU WILL BE BANNED FROM THE SITE FOR A WEEK. THIS IS YOUR WARNING!!!!!

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    VOTES ARE DUE SUNDAY NIGHT @ 8:59 PST
    You must vote on at least 5 matches(provided there are 5 matches to vote on, if no vote on whichever battles are open) and post the links in your thread. For every link not posted you will lose a vote.
    Votes MUST be at least two lines per verse, and must have a vote casted. There is no voting for ties.
    Voting is open past the deadline in the case that I’m late starting the new week.
    Voting is open to current participants, RBL mods, and former champs. Former champs must vote on at least three matches to have their vote counted, and must adhere to the same voting rules.


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  2. ChopChoiceBeats

    ChopChoiceBeats a.k.a ESKIMO SPLIF

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  3. breathlesss

    breathlesss Registered Sex Offender

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    *14....

    edit...
    but...if we do end up against eachother again, i want it to be 4 bars
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  4. ChopChoiceBeats

    ChopChoiceBeats a.k.a ESKIMO SPLIF

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    lol seriously...is 12 or 8 cool then? I'm bringing heat tho this time (setups n everything)
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  5. breathlesss

    breathlesss Registered Sex Offender

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    14 "bars", 21 lines of 4/4 time...
    ...I dunno, do 16, 24, whatever
    I don't mind if yours is "more"


    Stick to choppin' the beats, yer choice to be a rapper is a frickin' comic relief,
    yet, let alone a lone vote, yer not even gettin' laughter.
    Shit, you wouldn't get a positive response if you wrote yer mom an emotional note,
    then sent the letter home with a prepaid postage, self addressed envelope enclosed.
    You're helpless against me, I've been developin' prose since well before yer embryo was even conceived of.
    Right now, you'd be gettin' sonned by the one who had sired you...
    but, lemme refresh yer memory whether you remember or don't...
    I developed PROS, not amateurs, so why're you still standin' there mad, silent, like I'm yer absent dad an' I owe you somethin'?
    You prob'ly should no show, it'd be better for yer rep. It's already a done deal, this round's up like cattle.
    Just sign outta the league bitch!
    Now, I know...somehow, you managed to get one, but the only chance you'll have to suckseed in another battle...
    is by swallowin' semen...
    Although, if you wanna drop a bomb, thanks, but kid,
    this is child's play ...just a mild pain for me to dance my fingers across the keys like they're Tom Hanks from Big.


    Stick to choppin' the beats, yer choice to be a rapper
    is a frickin' comic relief, yet, let alone a lone vote,
    yer not even gettin' laughter. Shit, you wouldn't get a
    positive response if you wrote yer mom an emotional
    note, then sent the letter home with a prepaid
    postage, self addressed envelope enclosed.
    You're helpless against me, I've been developin' prose
    since well before yer embryo was even conceived of.
    Right now, you'd be gettin' sonned by the one
    who had sired you, but, lemme refresh yer memory
    whether you remember or don't. I developed
    PROS, not amateurs, so why're you still standin' there
    mad, silent, like I'm yer absent dad and I owe you somethin'?
    You prob'ly should no show, it'd be better for yer rep.
    It's already a done deal, this round's up like cattle.
    Just sign outta the league bitch! Now, I know, somehow,
    you managed to get one, but the only chance you'll have to
    suckseed in another battle, is by swallowin' semen.
    Although, if you wanna drop a bomb, thanks, but kid,
    this is child's play, ...just a mild pain for me to dance
    my fingers across the keys like they're Tom Hanks from Big.
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  6. ChopChoiceBeats

    ChopChoiceBeats a.k.a ESKIMO SPLIF

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    I get you dude it's all good.

    He’ll try to get dirt from my twitter but I’m scholarin him
    He’ll start hitting up the wall like Apollo in gyms
    Yelling “I’ma kill Chop!” before this following hymn
    “Why the fuck he got my girlfriend following him?”
    My lyrics are too creative; yours would fall in a poll
    You’re weak hearted, my concepts thrall inner souls
    Life’s like a GAME...Breath makes stalling a goal
    When you see that STROKE, kno I put (putt) B-all (Ball) in a hole
    Breath’s a net nerd, the anti-social box set type
    Won’t leave his room til he’s arranged his socks set right
    Never left his house; he saw a girl once n got dead hype
    So “The road LESS Travelled” applies only to this cock’s sex life. (Pause - capital cock)
    If skills levels were edible I’d hit the meat aisle n buy pri-cey veal
    He'd be in process foods confused between di-cey deals
    What I’m saying is...next to me... he’d die medial
    I’d SPLIT HIM IN TWO; I’d be the only survivor
    Cuz with that SAMURAI I’m Tony the Tiger, I make him Biserial (Buy Cereal)
    I’ve been writing for 3 months you dip shit
    You been spitting bars for mad years and you’re a bit shit!
    fuck this clik shit, I ain’t with no bitch shit, get a quick fist
    to ya ribs and find my wrist touching your slipped discs. UNGH!!
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  7. BarZ.

    BarZ. Over Everything

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    Overall:
    This Verse was boring and had nothing even TEXT battle worthy to quote.. I found it pretty hard to follow ya flow and where u rhymed at on both verses you posted..
    Suckseed/Semen is played and the Tom hanks line was prolly ur best line but had no effect whatsoever.. U should focus on punchlines/nameplays/creativity anything other than what you did...

    Overall:
    The Weak Hearted/Inner Soul lines was pretty nice... flow was solid too.. Punchlines were good where they hit at and the set type to sex life part was dope.. Had a solid verse... Job well done
    Fav:
    My lyrics are too creative; yours would fall in a poll
    You’re weak hearted, my concepts thrall inner souls

    Breath’s a net nerd, the anti-social box set type
    Won’t leave his room til he’s arranged his socks set right
    Never left his house; he saw a girl once n got dead hype
    So “The road LESS Travelled” applies to this cock’s sex life. (Pause - capital cock)

    V - Chop
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  8. breathlesss

    breathlesss Registered Sex Offender

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    then, this is your problem, my flow is flawless, sorry i didn't use a lot of hyphens and word break downs that would sound retarded out loud
    at least you did capitalize "text" though
    my bad for being a real rapper i guess
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  9. D-MONIK

    D-MONIK Active Member

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    Vote= chopchoice

    Close battle imo, breathless had an impressive flow and maybe some quick jabs here or there , but as far as structured punchlines where a set up leads to a good punch that it where breathless fell short a bit, the set up/punch format doesn't work for everyone but if your not going to use it you have to be very creative with wordplay and personals and comedy..

    Chop followed suit in a lot of his verse with the flow, focused too much on just rhyming instead of creative punchlines ,, but choice still managed to have a good segment or two of actual hard hitting punchlines

    Props to both
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  10. Menso

    Menso Go Lakers!

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    Lol @ pharcyze. Those are the same verse,and, yeah, the flow is unorthodox, but its flows well. It word choice that helps his flow, not necessarily strong rhymes;but it definitely works. I wasn't digging the content much, either. I think the develop prose had potential, but, and this is a problem for you, you didn't make an impact with the wordplay.

    Chop, you had some very forced material and/or played, but you used the creativity against your opponent.

    Vote Chop
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  11. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

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    Chop wins 3-0. Loses for not voting.
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