[Week 16][Champ] C. Coup d'etat(4-0) vs 2. ShadowWarriorfs(11-4) vs 3.TheInkwell(5-2)

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  1. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

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    TheInkwell New Member

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  3. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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  5. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    Sitting atop a cold tomb stone
    Just me, misery and old bone
    My feet dangle bare, no shoes
    kicking till' my heels go bruised
    A sharp wall of air hits my body
    I push it back and become wobbly
    I fall and land in the mushy grass
    Flat on my ass I look and see bats
    I also note clouds cycle, sky wings
    Flying in rains to drown something
    Dense drops tap-dance my tongue
    Reacting like acid, fizzing that blood
    I burn and then remember once was
    The rain, that water, that flash flood
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    The rain washed me into the earth
    I sunk down, hosted by the hurt
    In an underworld hallowed in form
    Under a grave, a dead man is born
    Dying is scary, death is always last
    Today is tomorrow, yesterday is past
    In theory death is a random, a puppeteer
    But...this other dead dude sees me here !

    He has a cigarette lit with smoked color bone
    And he's pissed that I sat on his old tomb stone
    I asked if I could bum a smoke, finally at long last
    He said, "If you smoke after death you died to fast"

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  6. Shadow

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    Inhale

    Life for John has always been a bit rough
    Trapped in a career doesn’t pay him enough
    Drifting away from a place he feels doesn’t exist
    Isolated in a corner like a baby sucking its fist
    Nothing seemed to help no one seemed to care
    No outlet as John would sit in the dark, in his chair
    He tried to drink alcohol but hated the taste
    So John began to smoke hoping the stress would be erased
    A single puff was all it took for John to feel relief
    Hanging his head on the single belief
    That this would solve give him the strength to cope
    So he continued to smoke

    With his every breath burns the heat
    Lips on my butt, suckling at my teat
    My scent pungent as it replaces the fresh air
    The grime in his nails glide through his pressed hair
    With exhales that are followed with moans of ecstasy
    My skin darkens the fingers that sit next to me
    His lungs fill with my toxins his breath smells of death
    His throat still whistling even though the bells haves left

    Soon decay formed causing coughs of blood
    With each puff his lungs started turning to mud
    Perhaps he always knew this would be his fate
    Still wanting to die but at a slower rate
    Realizing that there was hope but didn’t seem to care
    Sucking in the smoke until he could no longer taste the air


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    My father… crouched on the porch like a gargoyle
    Wrinkles wear his face, valleys carved out by turmoil
    A mountain unwavering, snow capped with white hairs
    That he dyes when we can afford to splurge on minor cares

    A mountain, commanding respect from those who brave him

    Lights a dynamite hanging from his lips and sucks in
    Sighs and exhales smoke, a volcano diffusing
    The pressure inside his chest, heated to boiling
    It’s either that or… he leaves to work overtime
    Leaving me to cower at the thunder from his wife
    “Always bitching”… he’d describe her daily habit
    And spits at the ground like we weren’t related

    A volcano… get too close and you’ll be burned

    I’m running desperately from the glowing cinders curved
    In a ring… consuming the stick between his fingers
    A cancer, a danger, but to him? An answer
    My heart is stained by his second hand exhale
    Can’t breathe for myself, abandoned and shelved
    Like a bookholder… I maintain the structure
    Of this household, keeping the weight from falling over
    But she gets so angry, and he gets so distant
    I’m an island, alone, estranged like a misfit
    Words can be grateful or words can be grating
    When he leaves for work, I’m the target for degrading

    Father, you’re a mountain, with no regard in the least
    For the explosives that you market ‘cause you tower over me
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  8. fairydance2000

    fairydance2000 don't wait, Procrastinate

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    Hi guys hope you don't mind i had to pop in and leave a comment.
    Best of luck to you all.

    Coupe
    I had to read your verse a few times to fully take in the imagery, and to get where you were coming from,When i did. clever, and different, good imagery. I found the flow would throw me off here and there.
    But all in all nice work

    Shadow
    A complete story.
    With clear imagery, Very easy for me to follow
    An enjoyable read. Favorite lines:
    “Drifting away from a place he feels doesn’t exist
    Isolated in a corner like a baby sucking its fist
    Nothing seemed to help no one seemed to care
    No outlet as John would sit in the dark, in his chair”
    Flow was good , what can I say I expect nothing less for shadow
    You have the ability to make me feel it.
    Well done

    Inkwell
    Firstly (clapping very loudly)
    Loved it, flow was spot on, imagery powerful and compelling pulling along into your story.
    Rhymes are nice. Very enjoyable read. If anything, with a nice smooth flow. What was with the last two lines?
    I lost it there; I guess I was meant too. But overall it is wonderful.

    Well this is going to be a real nail biter, so close. Good luck to you all
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  9. Kuja

    Kuja Jack Skellington

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    Coup - Aight im going to be honest, after reading
    your verse it felt like it was wrote by a total
    different person. I would defo say this was far
    from your best. The imagry was however pretty nice
    in parts. There were a few lines in there that seemed
    forced to make it rhyme. For example.

    'I fall and land in the mushy grass
    Flat on my ass I look and see bats '

    just seemed a little random.


    Shadow- Just wanted to start off by saying ive never
    known babies to suck there fists lol. On the whole tho
    your verse was what it was. Nothing really stood out to
    me but apart from the 'sucking fists' line nothing really
    stood down to me either, on the whole a nice drop.


    Ink - Hmmm of the 3 verses i have to say this was my
    favourite altho once again, not as good as other work
    ive seen you write, the flow through me off once or twice
    the first been the 'habbit' - 'related' line. the story
    itself was decent enough nothing really surprised me, but
    in the end i felt you did what was needed and you earn my vote

    Overall- in all honestly I found this to be a poor champ match, but thats just me.
    I know you can do better.



    Vote - Ink
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  10. patrown

    patrown student for life

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    ..i'm doing a real quick vote before it's closed. i know.

    coup- the simplicity and depth gave you the win
    that's me hanging out at a graveyard before I realize I'm dead.
    nice verse coup. the meaning didn't go over my head. I like your approach at that t opic this week.


    shadow - .. nice point of view on it. oh hey.. that's me in 5 years..
    gj..nice drop. powerful.. in my opinion, this week. . . normally might have appealed to me more if shorter.

    ink - some of the word choices took away from the verses appeal tome.
    you said some things very clever, and it's a good verse. but my vote..

    /v coup - just felt his more this week, considering it's total length, and syllable counts, coup entertained me the most.
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  11. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

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    Ink and Coup tie
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