[Week 10][Contender] 3. Breathless(5-4) vs 4. AniMatiX(1-1)

Discussion in 'The Rapmusic Storytelling/Topical League' started by Tacky Jones, Mar 20, 2012.

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  1. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

    Feb 25, 2008


    VERSUS DUE: Every Friday @ 11:59 PM PST
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  2. breathlesss

    breathlesss Registered Sex Offender

    Jul 28, 2011

    I'm the devil on the shoulder of the angel that's on yours
    The lower level of yer subconscious, the one that's takin' on god's form
    The ego of your id, the one that we don't know exists
    This collective conscience is in denial that is...
    Like the child of a prince raised by the whole village
    Or that final note of silence once the violence has diminished
    The primal role model, behind all the hopeful visages
    No one can witness 'em until goin' to visit it
    in an abysmal plane where the drizzles reigns supreme
    is this a brain storm or is the rain pouring out freely now a leak?
    Driftin' away, off the isthmus of maybes
    Deep within the pith, a musky mist begins to erupt from it
    But if I keep thinking these are just thoughts, then what else is gonna come of this?
    I know I'm not one hundred percent sure, but I wonder...
    Is there another little system of mind inside my subconscious?
    Is there some kind of meek twin behind the evil grin of my demons?
    and maybe there's even a smaller angel beneath the wings of my larger one...
    But that would mean, there's an equally demonic devil residing under the harpy's tongue.
    Two sides to every two sides, so to decide who to side with
    is a hard choice to describe how to even begin to see it deciphered.
    what's the final deciding factor chooser, my mind...how?
    How can i surmise which slice of the fractal to slide down
    Am I somekind of outside filter of ideas and perspectives?
    Essentially, the broken rule of exception
    The sole purpose, comin' full circle, and holding the view, just for a second
    The moment the pool of reflection comes into focus, it's true
    It's the only instant you'll see before your soul is perfect, one of the chosen, the few
  3. DethStryque

    DethStryque DethStryque theInvincible

    Oct 8, 2008
    Breathless...I must say that I'm really surprised. Your RSTL piece here is a thousand times better than your battle verse that I saw. You have a gift! Even if the other guy posted his verse against you? He'd be hard pressed to win. Props, son.

  4. breathlesss

    breathlesss Registered Sex Offender

    Jul 28, 2011
    Thanks man, yea, battlingis definitely not my thing, I just to it for craps and laughter, and I often come up with rhyme schemes and concepts from it that I don't use, just save em for later when a more useful writing time comes, probly one of thereasons my battles are so lacking
  5. Brown Jesus

    Brown Jesus Menso is for Dummies

    Nov 24, 2004
    Dope dope dope! I'm writing punchlines if we ever meet in RSTL


    Really, though, your style on this side is more serious; you can really play with concepts and your style fits that. You have a different type of creativity that really excels here. Plus, your rhyme schemes and natural flow has always been your strong point.

    The only thing that I might criticize, is that sometimes it seemed a little esoteric; but you transition between themes/schemes fluidly. Good shit, brutha!
  6. TheInkwell

    TheInkwell New Member

    May 6, 2011
    a shame you got no-showed..
    you have a good vocabulary, which definitely helps your cause. i hate it when people use the same words over and over. your approach to the topic was also refreshing, as you didn't just take the obvious and easy perspective. the philosophical bits were also unexpected, but a nice touch. I haven't heard someone talk about the "id" since high school. Overall a pretty solid piece. if i had to offer you on critique, it'd be that the flow seemed to be a bit stretched out at parts.

    ie: "Two sides to every two sides, so to decide who to side with
    is a hard choice to describe how to even begin to see it deciphered."
    but then again, i never place much weight on "flow" because you could have intended it to be read differently from how i'm reading it. however, if it is actually a flow issue, i want to point out that you could have easily reworded the second line so that it flows better.

    good job though. good luck in the champ match, whoever it's against.
  7. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

    Feb 25, 2008
    Breath wins
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