[Week 10] [Championship] C. L. Kross(5-1) vs C. Blitz_kreig(6-2) vs 3. MC Guttso(8-1)

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  1. T.a.C

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    WEEK 10



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  2. Nu'maaN

    Nu'maaN Anu'naki, Nuqqa.

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    this shit is going to be fuckin' nice.

    looking forward to friday ...

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  3. MC Guttso

    MC Guttso Fingers in Pies

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    Wasted Explanation

    I need change and recovery to explore what troubles me,
    Coz my crumbled weed leaves me in a grave of drudgery,
    ..But my brain encouraged me to achieve my dreams,
    And he listens and helps me with my humble needs,
    Pleased that he challenges grief and the things I believe,
    Widda mixture of tricks up the sleeve to stop me tokin’ on trees,
    Stroking my nose and embracin’ my lows for the love of green,
    I have a rough esteem, but when I smoke thoughts flow serene,
    As a human bein’ I’ve really been round the block of fiends,
    I wobble my fists as to why I exist and I’m a crock of shit,
    But I persist to be empowered and not rock or flock like this,
    On this road alone I’m fishing for the path of eternal bliss,
    In a mysterious abyss he tells me to write constructive lists...
    ..What makes me chuckle, ambitions and what I’ve got to give,
    Reminisce about the things I bring and why I’m here to live...
    My next session is breathing techniques, relaxation exercises,
    Gives me time to hide robotic highs, retain and flex my mind,
    I find I’m pure and clear, no troubles near or conflicts here,
    Disappear into introspection with lessons to ease my tension,
    Suspended on a string of self-help, health and better awareness,
    Guided by a wealth of teachings, I’m an unfettered apprentice,
    The light bulb’s on and this feat - it’s quite momentous,
    Stress has lessened and I teach people their rights to test this,
    My impression is a preacher but I give the best tools for freedom,
    Provide nice rules for right reasons and for those who need them,
    From the vice of treason to the precise clear kind of feelings,
    It’s revealing to try and tackle the fixed habits that form so quick,
    Sometimes it’s hard as a brick; the tricks are fickle, it’s hit or miss,
    Confused when you know it’s the fight and not the size of the stick,
    Unfortunate that my thoughts progress and I spark up a spliff….

    Ahh…I’m wasted.
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  4. L. Kross

    L. Kross His Highness

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    This is the final test we're takin, lifell try an test your patience
    You can find me duckin death like this is final destination
    But when I finnaly check my fate in, from this violent escapadin
    Ima stay inside the mind of every guy that never made it
    Every time that I got faded, everytime that you related
    It made it that much harder for the time that Im cremated
    Its my time, cause Ive evaded everytime when they were aimin
    Every spy an every agent, every guy in every matrix
    Right when they were chasin, it was tires to the pavement
    With my iron at the waist, an with no type of hesitation
    Its a message to the masses, this tyrant that we facin
    Will try an cheat our type of out of a higher education
    We gotta band together with a tighter dedication
    Cause devided, we gone fall in these trialed tribulations
    ...... One by one until we're exiled by the nation
    Im just the last of a diein breed whod die for intergration
    Behind this seperate nation, through the lies they set in places
    That blind the shepards faces for wolves to dine on lesser patients
    The devide of nets an gains is how they define this section 8 shit
    An stuff em in the gutter where only life an death awaits him
    But, if you had been born just inside their severed station
    Youd have had quite the celebration an never strife humilliation
    But
    With the life ya really facin got ya lookin at the knife an really thinkin
    Is this life worth earnin stripes when any night it might be taken
    I tried to fight the basics, but they blind side all my claims with
    This blindin, vibrant hatred. Cant rewind the mind of racists
    They just keep liein until they can find the time to change it
    We could put a stop to it, but we never unite an try to take it
    The swine in deffication while I try to find the breath Im wastin
    ... But its just another wasted little quiet explanation....
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  5. Blitz_krieg

    Blitz_krieg SAY WHA.........

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    yo.. sorry fellaz but i need an extension..

    i havent even started on my shit due to time contraints... ive barley had time to sleep..

    but ill write one up tom. and see if i can get it in by friday night.. if not no later than sat afternoon
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  6. Blitz_krieg

    Blitz_krieg SAY WHA.........

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    to that Necro- white slavery instru.

    *VENGENCE*
    Im the anarchist…. that came to spark-this darkness
    which for some time has crowded and clouded our minds
    The government… is the smartest but their heartless
    It wont be said out loud but they’re proud they’ve kept us blind
    But NOW we rise and apply our contribution to this constitution
    through a vulgar revolution and violent retribution
    They’ve been inducin’ hallucination in the nation for centuries
    So lets take back the proclamation make it how its meant to be
    Essentially… the government just can’t be trusted
    In disguise they seek our demise and inhumane justice
    Im disgusted and cant stand-tha propaganda they’ve been feedin us
    They say they need us but the elitists-treat us like an a diseased fetus
    They cant defeat us, were rebels with a cause when we ride
    Too strong in size.. Even when martial law gets applied
    They’ve lied for too long, im tired of the Masons runin shit
    I got the guns ‘n clips.. bout to reign down capitol punishment
    We are undeniably the underlying movement in the underground
    The reason these evil churches and fake preacher plunder down
    This is reality rap. Im coastin on this notion and im not into wishin
    So I put my plans in motion and end all these rotten politicians
    Cause they wont stop to listen, not even to their own intuition
    Cause if wasn’t for greed they wouldn’t even have a pot to piss in
    But I-guess-my-stress won’t di-gress until im at rest in a stipule
    Cuase what they suggest is evil and I want whats best for the people
    We need a illegal upheaval of the governors and the lobbyist
    Till they see a people are equal and they stop favoring the snobbiest
    So open your fuckin ears and hear what the masses say
    No more withholdin medicine while the plagued pass away
    No more blood for oil, no more lies or deceit
    Cause we stay loyal and keep our ties in these streets​
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  7. Blitz_krieg

    Blitz_krieg SAY WHA.........

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    Will edit and drop my votes in this link... I fucked up
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  8. hYpOconDriAdIcT

    hYpOconDriAdIcT New Member

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    Guttso- pretty good flow.. o.k. rhyme schemes and mechanics although I woulda liked to have seen a better story from. nuthin really stood out to me about it. like no twists or nuthin like that.. still good tho.. still had a nice flow.. good showing homie

    L.Kross- Amazing flow.. cool way of flippin the topic but ur mechanics and flow are wut stole the show in ur piece and it just kept heatin up twards the end. and the ending was also very solid. great showing dude

    Blitz-great flow although it was not as strong a L.Kross', however u story was stronger a lot of emotion seeped from it i really felt wut u were writing which is the whole point of this league and i feel like ur flow and mechanics (along with ur story) were enough to pull this one off.

    Vote-Blitz.. by a close margin

    1.Blitz
    2.Kross
    3.Guttso
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  9. -Fac3-

    -Fac3- Will punch the shit out u

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    Guttso - Man I was feeling your verse the whole way. Vocab was strong, flow was there, imagery and all that man. Although I was waiting for something to happen or something to come along and really blow my top off and it never happened. It was Very very well written though, but I wish you would of ended it better. Lyrically and flow wise, top notch...Left me hanging in the end though....Still a very strong showing.

    Kross - Like Wordz said, flow is crazy. Multis were off the chains man. Alot of strong imagery and emotion in this. Last two bars might be my favorite..Tied it all together and really made it stick in my mind that even though those words are so powerful in the verse, you are really just wastin' breath. I really enjoyed the read on this one man, Props to you.

    Blitz - Dope man. I felt you and Kross tackled the same subject here. Just in a different way. The story was definately good and the flow was also on point. Vocab was strong which allows you to paint a more in depth picture of what you are saying imo. I was definately feelin' How you started it, "Im the Anarchist", and how you ended it. As opposed to Kross you went in more detail with your piece, while Kross came with a street guy point of view. One thing I didn find though is that your piece was really repetitive...
    "It wont be said out loud but they’re proud they’ve kept us blind
    But NOW we rise and apply our contribution to this constitution"
    ^^
    "I got the guns ‘n clips.. bout to reign down capitol punishment
    We are undeniably the underlying movement in the underground"
    ^^Understand when I say repetitive, I don't mean that in a literal sense....But you would basically say something about them being corrupt and then how you plan to overthrow them....In different ways...I felt like a story to it would of been better or some type progression to build up a better ending....Hope that makes sense to you and if it doesn't hit up my PM and I'll better explain it to you and break it down line by line. Other than that it was a great showing and Like Guttso you had great mechanics and flow...Just not strong enough to win imo.

    Vote - Kross
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  10. Atreyu

    Atreyu New Member

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    Guttso-dope piece. When i got to the end of the verse and it said u were wasted i lol because the verse sounded like a drunk rambling. Verse was dope nonetheless it was just a bit cliche and it didnt take me anywhere.

    Kross-flow is insane. I could spit this to any beat. How the hell u get it to flow so well?damn. The content i ffelt was a bit lacking and almost seemed to transform into a battle verse.

    BlitZ-a great showing.the flow was decent and the content was dope as hell. It read like an open mic peace moreso than a story at times but a nice verse.

    Vote-guttso for telling a story
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  11. MC Guttso

    MC Guttso Fingers in Pies

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  12. Ace the Prophet

    Ace the Prophet A Prophet to the Game

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    Breakdown-

    Guttso: What up man? Really likin this piece. The flow was real nice, rhyme schemes were pretty cool, vocab was on point...pretty much everything was on point with this verse. One thing I am going to pick on though is how you would switch up your rhyme scheme from even bars to odd numbers. Like, 3 bars would rhyme, then you'd switch it up after that and you did it quite often, which kind of made it a bit of a tougher read. I'm sure it would sound smoother but I'm not too big of a fan of it. Example (so you know what I'm talking about and all):

    In a mysterious abyss he tells me to write constructive lists...
    ..What makes me chuckle, ambitions and what I’ve got to give,
    Reminisce about the things I bring and why I’m here to live...
    My next session is breathing techniques, relaxation exercises

    Like, it kinda throws off the piece a little to me. I don't know. Just not too big of a fan. Overall a pretty dope piece though that I really liked.

    L.Kross- Man, this is shit fire. First thing that stands out to me is the rhyme scheme and how well it makes your piece flow. Shit is damn near flawless. Not only that, but I don't think many people recognized you kept the same rhyme throughout your whole piece and you kept it dope. Fuckin talent, man. I like how everything tied together at the end. Very nice piece

    Blitz- Good shit from you as well. The flow was nice, rhymes were on point, and it was all cool and everything. It reminds me a lot of the song "Mosh" by Eminem, which I'm thinking might have inspired you on this some, being that I've seen you say you're a big Em fan. There's really not much I can knock on this though. Good shit

    Everyone dropped pretty hot. Guttso came correct with a dope story and Blitz came with lots of emotion. However, L.Kross's piece stood out to me the most with it's incredible flow and dope ass rhyme scheme, following it up with sick ass content as well. It's easy to see why everyone's voting different ways on this, but I'm siding with L.Kross today

    Vote- L. Kross
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