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  1. Predator INC

    Predator INC New Member

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    The soldier soul is lacerated, he bleeds through tears.
    Dreams dissappeared, a peace of led hitting his head
    like a hammer is his only fear. misses the girl he wed
    The souls he created through intimate acts of love.
    But now Hes running. wanting to grasp onto existence
    He recalls of a time in his mind when bliss glistened
    And he was able to listen to people, but his attention is on survival
    The antichrist controls the calvary of death and bloodshed.
    Familys mourn and dred, they are unable to cope with them going to heaven.
    Love survives distance but the odds of him surviving are just as distant
    Man wishes to be as the father, therefore causing the apocolypses
    Other reigning demons realized there mistakes but dont wanna stop it
    The soldior now could careless, he wants to return to HIS kingodm.
    Because its the only place in the land of the damned where theres wisdom
    He burried his comrads, He wishes he was a caurcus with them.
    Because now hes seen every horror, He wishes it would end.
    But he then sees the maiden he left behind. he has a purpose.
    Signed his soul the devil to join an army thats worthless.
    They lured him into a false sense of security, money, education
    How is that useful if he loses his life to defend a nation.
    Which is nothing but false promises, and false salvation.
    The Devil laughs as he has the world in his palms.
    His evil thoughts wield far more destruction the bombs.
    He sends the soldor thoughts that there is no return.
    Leading him unto the king of darkness to forever burn.
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    Very Good. Yo I liked how you put yoself in someone elses shoes(I Think?) and ran in them. Its like I can smell the burnin shrapnel almost as hot as the tears he drips for his distant lover...Seriously tho u did good and then expressin YOUR OWN feelings at the end rounded it out pretty well.
    I got a poem in the Realm by the same name and it would be a perfect collaboration 4real we speak on like the same things.Keep it comin. Jus Like Dat!
    Truthfuly Speakin and Truf Fully Spittin OUT
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  4. Mind~$oul

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    Nice shit here, imagery was great, like truf somewhat said it felt like i was in the mans shoes.

    one luv
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    ^^^^^^^^^^^^^
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    ^^^ ^^^ ^^^ ^^^
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    ^^^^^^
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    this was some tight shit yo defenitly a dope read nice drop
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